视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating phrases like “different views” and reduce hesitation. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., “scenery,” “backdrops,” “landscapes”).

範例: Yes — I enjoy photographing different views because varied scenery provides interesting backdrops. For example, I like capturing city skylines at sunset and mountain landscapes in the morning, as they each create very different moods.

建議: Clarify and correct vocabulary, and remove fillers. Give a clear choice in the first sentence, then support with two concrete reasons using linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example”). Replace unclear phrase “royal Aurelius” with “rural areas.”

範例: I prefer rural areas because they offer natural beauty and quieter scenes. For example, I enjoy photographing rolling fields and forests, which let me focus on textures and natural light.

建議: Be specific and expand slightly with one or two concrete examples. Begin with a direct answer, then explain why using linking words and correct plural forms (e.g., “historical places”). Avoid hesitation and use richer vocabulary like “heritage sites” or “architectural landmarks.”

範例: I prefer photographing views in my own country because it has many historical places and unique architectural landmarks. For instance, I often visit old forts and temples to capture their intricate details and the stories they convey.

× Yes I do, because different views are good for background and I like to take different pictures in different views.

✓ Yes, I do, because different views make good backgrounds, and I like to take different pictures of different scenes.

The sentence uses 'good for background' which is awkward; 'make good backgrounds' is clearer (incorrect adjective/adverb usage). Also 'in different views' is repetitive and unnatural; 'of different scenes' or 'of different views' is better. Add commas for clarity and parallel structure. Suggested improvement: use 'make good backgrounds' and replace the second 'in different views' with 'of different scenes' and add commas to separate clauses.

× Uh, I do prefer royal Aurelius because, uh, there is no, there is, uh, natural beauty. So, uh, I, I like to capture pictures in, uh, rural areas. That's why.

✓ I prefer rural areas because there is more natural beauty, so I like to take pictures in the countryside.

Several issues: 'royal Aurelius' appears to be incorrect word choice (possibly meant 'rural areas'); this is a word/phrase error (adjective/noun usage). 'There is no, there is natural beauty' is contradictory and ungrammatical; use 'there is more natural beauty' or 'there is natural beauty'. 'Capture pictures in rural areas' is awkward; 'take pictures in the countryside' is natural. Remove filler words and repeated pronouns for fluency. Suggested improvement: replace incorrect term with 'rural areas', use 'there is more natural beauty' and say 'take pictures in the countryside'.

× I prefer my country because there is a lot of, uh, historical place. So I like to do photography in that kind of, uh, areas.

✓ I prefer my country because there are a lot of historical places, so I like to do photography in those kinds of areas.

The original has a number mismatch with 'there is' + 'a lot of historical place'. When indicating many countable items you must use 'there are' and plural 'places' (There be issue and singular/plural). Also 'that kind of areas' is inconsistent; use 'those kinds of areas' or 'that kind of area'. Remove fillers and combine into one clear sentence. Suggested improvement: use 'there are a lot of historical places' and 'those kinds of areas' or 'that kind of area' for grammatical agreement.