视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear, relevant and mostly natural. To improve, remove fillers (like “uh”), combine short sentences for fluency, and add one specific detail or short example to make it more vivid. Use a linking phrase to connect ideas smoothly (e.g., “For instance,” “Also,” “because”).

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs in different places because I like to keep memories on my phone. For instance, when I visit a forest I focus on the light through the trees, while at a city viewpoint I shoot skyline panoramas. I usually take several shots and then edit them using an app, which helps me notice small details and improve composition.

建議: Good content and clear contrast, but improve grammar and cohesion. Avoid repetition (“both”) and correct phrases (“urban areas,” “rural areas,” “in different ways”). Add a linking phrase to compare (e.g., “whereas,” “however”) and one specific detail to support each preference.

範例: It depends because I appreciate both for different reasons. In urban areas I enjoy photographing skyscrapers and busy streets, whereas in rural areas I prefer capturing forests, wildlife and peaceful landscapes. Each offers unique subjects and lighting conditions that I find inspiring.

建議: Answer is relevant but contains repetition and some grammar errors (“I would say I would say,” “in each ways”). To improve, remove repeated phrases, use a clear topic sentence, and add a concise reason or specific example for each option. Use linking words like “also” and “however” to structure the comparison.

範例: I prefer both. My country, Thailand, offers a wide range of scenery from beaches to mountains, so I often photograph local landscapes. However, I also enjoy views in other countries like the UK because they offer different architecture and seasonal light, which feels refreshing and inspiring.

× I usually take several photos and edit uh by using an app.

✓ I usually take several photos and edit them by using an app.

The original sentence omits the object of the verb 'edit'. In English, 'edit' is a transitive verb here and requires an object (what is edited). Add 'them' to refer to the photos. Also keep 'by using an app' to indicate method. Suggestion: 'I usually take several photos and edit them using an app.'

× If I visit urban area, I find it interesting because I can see many skyscrapers.

✓ If I visit an urban area, I find it interesting because I can see many skyscrapers.

The noun phrase 'urban area' needs an article. Use the indefinite article 'an' before 'urban area' because it is a singular, countable noun and not specific. Alternatively use 'the' if referring to a specific urban area.

× On the other hand, if I go through rural area, I can enjoy nature, animals and forests.

✓ On the other hand, if I go to a rural area, I can enjoy nature, animals, and forests.

'Rural area' is a singular countable noun and requires an article: 'a rural area'. Also 'go through' suggests passing across; use 'go to' when visiting. Add a comma before the final item in the list for clarity.

× Both are appealing to me in different own ways.

✓ Both are appealing to me in their own different ways.

The phrase 'different own ways' is ungrammatical. Use 'their own different ways' or 'in different ways' to show possession and variety. 'Their' agrees with 'both'.

× I would say I would say I prefer both as my country has a variety of fascinating views in many parts of Thailand.

✓ I would say I prefer both, as my country has a variety of fascinating views in many parts of Thailand.

The phrase repeats 'I would say' twice; remove the duplicate. Also add a comma before the conjunction 'as' to link the two clauses and improve clarity.

× It makes me feel new and different.

✓ It makes me feel renewed and different.

The adjective 'new' is unusual to describe the feeling of visiting other countries. 'Renewed' or 'refreshed' fits better to express feeling different from routine. This is a word choice issue tied to present-tense description; use 'renewed' to convey the intended meaning. Alternatively, 'It feels new and different to me.'

× I find it interesting because it helps me notice more detail.

✓ I find it interesting because it helps me notice more details.

'Detail' in this context should be plural 'details' because you mean multiple small elements. Using the plural matches 'more' which typically collocates with plural nouns. Suggestion: 'notice more details'.