视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples with brief reasons. Avoid repetition and filler words. Also correct errors (e.g., 'travelling holidays' → 'travel', 'a new trip that I a new place' → 'a trip to a new place', 'There are my most likely favorite' → 'These are my favourite views').

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs, especially when I travel to a new place. For example, I often photograph sunsets and beaches because the light is beautiful and they capture relaxing moments.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence and support it with clear, specific reasons using linking words. Fix grammar and word order (e.g., 'it's more a very calming comfortable view' → 'they are calmer and more relaxing', 'urban areas is a place that I usually live' → 'I usually live in urban areas, so they feel crowded'). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer rural areas because they are calmer and more peaceful, which makes it easier to capture natural scenes. Also, I live in a city, so countryside views feel more refreshing and different from my everyday surroundings.

建議: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Provide a clear reason and one specific example. Use linking words like 'because' and avoid vague phrases such as 'different and different'.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because travel exposes me to a wider variety of landscapes and cultures. For instance, visiting Japan allowed me to photograph both modern cityscapes and tranquil temples, which I can't find near my hometown.

× Yes, I actually like taking pictures, especially during travelling holidays or maybe a new trip that I a new place that I just recently found.

✓ Yes, I actually like taking pictures, especially during travelling holidays or when I go on a new trip and find a new place recently.

The original sentence has an incorrect and duplicated fragment 'a new trip that I a new place that I just recently found' which is a sentence structure error and misuse of verb forms. Replace with a clear clause using the present simple 'go' for habitual or recurring actions and a reduced clause 'find a new place' to make the meaning clear. This fixes sentence structure and corrects the present participle misuse.

× For example, I like to take pictures of sunset and beaches.

✓ For example, I like to take pictures of sunsets and beaches.

Singular/plural mismatch: 'sunset' should be plural 'sunsets' to match general habitual liking and parallelism with 'beaches'. Use plural nouns when speaking about things in general.

× There are my most likely favorite, uh, views to take pictures.

✓ Those are my most likely favorite views to photograph.

Incorrect use of 'there are' and awkward word order. Replace 'There are' with 'Those are' to point to specific items, remove filler 'uh', and use 'favorite views to photograph' for natural English word order.

× Well I prefer rural areas because it's more a very calming comfortable view to just capture.

✓ Well, I prefer rural areas because they are much more calming and comfortable to capture.

Pronoun and agreement: 'it's' (it is) is incorrect for plural 'rural areas'; use 'they are'. Also adjust adjective order and modifiers: 'much more calming and comfortable' is natural. Remove 'view' because 'rural areas' are the subject; use 'to capture' as verb phrase.

× Because another reason is because urban areas is a place that I usually live so it's a crowded more not.

✓ Another reason is that urban areas are places where I usually live, so they are more crowded.

Multiple errors: unnecessary 'Because' repetition, subject-verb agreement ('urban areas is' should be 'urban areas are'), incorrect clause structure ('a place that I usually live' should be 'places where I usually live'), and awkward phrase 'it's a crowded more not' corrected to 'they are more crowded'.

× Well, I actually prefer other countries since you get to venture more different places and views every single day.

✓ Well, I actually prefer other countries since you get to visit more different places and see different views every single day.

Verb choice: 'venture' is awkward in this context; native speakers use 'visit' and 'see' for places and views. Use parallel verbs 'visit' and 'see' to clearly express activities during travel.

× You just get to adventure different and different places every day especially.

✓ You just get to explore different places and see different views every day, especially when traveling.

'Adventure' is used incorrectly as a verb here; 'explore' is more appropriate. The original word order is awkward and repetitious ('different and different'); revise to 'explore different places and see different views', and add 'when traveling' for clarity and natural phrasing.