视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like taking pictures, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct small grammatical errors (e.g., plural/singular agreement and tense).

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, since my parents gave me a phone, I have filled my gallery with pictures from trips, including landscapes and candid family moments. I especially like capturing small, meaningful scenes because they bring back memories when I look at them later.

建議: Start with a direct statement of preference, then give specific reasons and use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Correct grammar (articles, plural forms) and avoid filler words like 'yeah.' Keep to 2–3 sentences to be concise and natural.

範例: I prefer rural views because I love nature and peaceful scenery. For instance, when I visit fields or rivers I often photograph sunrises and sunsets since the light and colours are more beautiful there than in the city.

建議: Give a clear opening statement and follow with one or two specific reasons or examples. Fix grammar and word choice (e.g., 'where there are', 'I haven't visited all the destinations'). Avoid repetition. Keep sentences cohesive with linking words like 'because' and 'however'.

範例: I prefer views in my country, Vietnam, because it has many magnificent landscapes and unique cultural sites. Moreover, I haven't visited all the beautiful destinations yet, so I enjoy exploring different regions and photographing their varied scenery.

× From the day my parents bought me a phone, my photo storage is full of pictures from different places that I have ever travelled.

✓ Since my parents bought me a phone, my photo storage has been full of pictures from different places I have travelled to.

Problems: incorrect tense combination and sentence structure. 'From the day' -> 'Since' with present perfect continuous/state ('has been') to show a condition from past until now. 'That I have ever travelled' is awkward and missing 'to' after 'travelled'. Suggestion: use 'has been full' and 'I have travelled to' or simply 'I have travelled' without 'ever'.

× Little moments like my family or with my friends.

✓ They include small moments with my family or my friends.

Problem: sentence fragment lacking a main verb and incorrect preposition usage. The original is not a complete sentence. Suggestion: add a subject and verb ('They include') and use 'with' for people ('with my family or my friends').

× I love taking pictures of little memory moments.

✓ I love taking pictures of little memorable moments.

Problem: 'memory moments' is unnatural collocation. Use adjective 'memorable' to modify 'moments'. Suggestion: replace with 'memorable moments' to sound natural and grammatically correct.

× I love nature, so I usually take picture of my countryside sceneries when I go to the the field or the river, and usually I take a picture of the sunrise and the sunset.

✓ I love nature, so I usually take pictures of the countryside scenery when I go to the fields or the river, and I usually take pictures of the sunrise and the sunset.

Problems: singular/plural and article errors. 'take picture' should be 'take pictures' (plural). 'countryside sceneries' is awkward; use 'countryside scenery' or 'countryside scenes'. 'the the field' duplicate 'the'. 'fields' is more natural than singular 'the field'. Also repeat 'I' for clarity and make 'sunrise and sunset' consistent as plural 'pictures'. Suggestion: use plural nouns and correct articles.

× Absolutely my country Vietnam, where have a lot of magnificent sceneries and beautiful places to visit.

✓ Absolutely my country, Vietnam, which has a lot of magnificent scenery and beautiful places to visit.

Problems: sentence fragment and incorrect relative clause. Use 'which has' to introduce a clause describing the country; 'scenery' is usually uncountable, not 'sceneries'. Add commas around 'Vietnam'. Suggestion: write a complete sentence with proper relative pronoun and verb.

× I I haven't I haven't go all of the destination or beautiful destination of my country.

✓ I haven't been to all the destinations or beautiful places in my country yet.

Problems: repeated words and wrong verb form. 'haven't go' is incorrect; after 'haven't' use past participle 'been' and the phrase 'been to' for visiting places. Use 'destinations' plural and 'places' rather than repeating 'destination'. Add 'yet' to indicate incompleteness. Suggestion: use 'haven't been to' + plural noun.