视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more natural and concise, correct grammatical mistakes, and add one specific example. Keep to 2–4 sentences and use linking words for clarity.

範例: Yes, I do. I often take photos with my phone or a small camera because they help me remember special moments. For example, I take landscape shots when I travel so I can look back and remember the places and feelings I had at the time.

建議: Answer directly with a clear preference or balanced comparison, remove fillers, correct grammar and use linking phrases (e.g., "on the other hand", "for example"). Add a concrete detail to support your view.

範例: I like both, but I prefer rural views overall because they feel peaceful and natural. Urban areas are interesting for their modern architecture and busy streets, but on the other hand, rural landscapes—such as rolling hills and rivers—help me relax and take better photos.

建議: Give a clear, concise comparison, fix grammar and incomplete sentence, and include a specific example of what interests you abroad. Use linking words like "however" and "for example" correctly.

範例: Views in my own country are special because they remind me of home. However, I prefer views in other countries when I travel because they feel new and teach me about different cultures—for example, seeing ancient temples in Japan taught me about local history and traditions.

× I am very much a person who enjoy using cameras on my phone or actual cameras to take photos because they are memories to me and I enjoy looking them back when I have a moment in the future.

✓ I am very much a person who enjoys using the camera on my phone or a real camera to take photos because they are memories to me and I enjoy looking back at them when I have a moment in the future.

The relative clause 'who enjoy' must agree with the singular subject 'a person', so use 'enjoys' (subject-verb agreement). 'Cameras on my phone or actual cameras' is awkward and inconsistent in number and article use; use 'the camera on my phone or a real camera' for clarity. 'Looking them back' is incorrect word order; use 'looking back at them'. Suggestion: ensure singular subjects take singular verbs, use consistent articles, and correct verb + preposition order.

× I think urban areas shows how advanced buildings and technologies can be.

✓ I think urban areas show how advanced buildings and technologies can be.

The plural subject 'urban areas' requires the plural verb 'show' (subject-verb agreement). Suggestion: pair plural nouns with plural verb forms (no -s in present simple).

× However, rural areas show the real beauty and how the natural views.

✓ However, rural areas show real beauty and natural scenery.

The original sentence has an incomplete and awkward phrase 'how the natural views.' This is a sentence structure issue: the clause is ungrammatical and lacks a verb or clear noun phrase. Replace with a concise noun phrase 'natural scenery' to convey the intended meaning. Suggestion: complete ideas with proper noun phrases or clauses and avoid dangling fragments.

× However, as someone who enjoyed travels, I will prefer views in other countries because they're new and from pictures and capturing moments.

✓ However, as someone who enjoys traveling, I prefer views in other countries because they're new and offer opportunities for pictures and capturing moments.

Several issues: 'who enjoyed travels' is awkward—use present habit 'enjoys traveling' (subject-verb agreement and correct verb+ -ing form). 'I will prefer' is odd for a general preference; use present simple 'I prefer'. 'From pictures and capturing moments' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'offer opportunities for pictures and capturing moments.' Suggestion: use present simple for habitual preferences, use 'enjoys traveling' or 'likes to travel', and restructure phrases for clarity.

× It also is an opportunity for me to learn about the history, umm and the stories of the.

✓ It is also an opportunity for me to learn about the history and the stories of the place.

The original sentence is incomplete ('the stories of the.') and contains a filler 'umm'. This is a sentence structure error: missing the object after 'of the'. Adding 'place' completes the idea. Also place 'also' in a natural position and remove fillers. Suggestion: avoid fillers in formal responses and ensure prepositional phrases have clear objects.