视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words and repetition, and add one specific detail using a linking word. Aim for 2–3 sentences total. Pronunciation and fluency can improve by removing hesitations (e.g., "uh") and repeated words.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, I often photograph mountain panoramas and river valleys because their colors and textures change dramatically with the light.

建議: Give a clear direct answer and support it with specific reasons and examples. Avoid vague phrases like "a lot of various views" and filler phrases like "moreover when I talk about that." Use linking words (e.g., "because," "for example"). Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

範例: I prefer urban views because cities offer diverse scenes to photograph. For example, I like capturing lively streets, interesting restaurant facades and modern shopping malls, which provide varied subjects and lighting conditions.

建議: Answer directly and give a specific reason with one short example. Remove redundancy (e.g., "I have to see" and "I really decide to click"). Use linking words like "because" or "for example" and keep within 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer photographing views in other countries because travel exposes me to different landscapes and cultures. For example, I once photographed coastal villages abroad and collected unique scenes that I wouldn't find at home.

× First of all, thank you so much for giving me this opportunity to talk about it yes, I love to take pictures of various uh, beautiful and extraordinary views, such as the views of mountains, the valleys and some other good places because because.

✓ First of all, thank you so much for giving me this opportunity to talk about it. Yes, I love to take pictures of various beautiful and extraordinary views, such as mountains, valleys, and other interesting places.

The original contains run-on sentences, repeated words ('because because'), filler sounds ('uh'), and unnecessary articles ('the views of mountains'). Split into two sentences to fix structure, remove repetition and fillers, and use plural nouns without extra articles. Suggestion: pause to plan responses, avoid fillers, and use punctuation to separate ideas.

× Yes, I always choose to take views of urban areas because I believe that when I travel in urban areas, there are a lot of various views and scenes to capture such as the beautiful restaurants, a shopping malls and moreover when I talk about that.

✓ Yes, I always choose to photograph urban areas because I believe that when I travel there, there are many different views and scenes to capture, such as beautiful restaurants and shopping malls.

Original has subject-verb and article errors: 'a shopping malls' mixes singular article with plural noun. 'a lot of various views' is awkward; use 'many different views'. 'moreover when I talk about that' is an incomplete clause causing sentence structure issues. Suggestion: use 'photograph' or 'take photos of', match articles with noun number, remove incomplete clauses, and simplify phrases.

× I prefer to take views of other countries because it would be a great experience when I travel in other country and I have to see various beautiful views there and I really decide to click and save the nature in my photos and in the form of my gallery that.

✓ I prefer to photograph views in other countries because traveling abroad is a great experience; I can see many beautiful scenes there and capture nature in my photos for my gallery.

Original has multiple structure problems: 'take views of other countries', 'travel in other country' (number mismatch), awkward phrases 'I really decide to click', and trailing 'that' making it incomplete. Correct by using 'photograph' and consistent plural forms ('other countries' or 'another country'), use concise verbs ('capture'), and end the sentence cleanly. Suggestion: plan sentences to ensure subject, verb, and object are complete and avoid literal translations like 'click' for 'take photographs' in formal speech.