视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and use correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler phrases like “you know” and unclear fragments. Also correct word choices (e.g. “breathtaking” instead of “breathtaking record night part”).

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing landscapes because my hometown has many mountains and beaches. For example, I often walk to the seaside at sunset to take photos for a personal collection, which helps me remember special moments.

建議: Answer directly and correct pronunciation/word choice errors (“rural areas” not “abuse”); avoid fillers and repetition. Use a linking word to compare and give one specific reason or example. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

範例: I prefer views in rural areas because the natural scenery is calmer and more varied. For instance, I enjoy photographing mountain trails and coastal parks, which feel peaceful compared with busy city streets.

建議: Be direct and use correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g. “prefer views in my own country”; “natural attractions such as waterfalls and rivers”). Give a short reason and one specific example about family activities to make the answer personal and coherent. Use linking words like “because” or “for example.”

範例: I prefer views in my own country because the Philippines has many natural attractions. For example, my family often visits waterfalls and rivers during holidays, which creates memorable photo opportunities.

× 'Like for example in my place where we have lots of, you know, mountains, beaches that I can take photos and put in my compilation as a souvenir.'

✓ 'Like, for example, in my place we have lots of mountains and beaches where I can take photos and put them in my compilation as souvenirs.'

'Error: incorrect pluralization and article usage. "lots of, you know, mountains, beaches" is awkward and missing conjunction; "photos" requires object pronoun "them"; "a souvenir" should be plural "souvenirs" to match multiple photos. Suggestion: join items with "and", use "them" to refer to photos, and use plural "souvenirs" when referring to multiple keepsakes.'

× 'This would be a very and breathtaking record night part.'

✓ 'This would be a very breathtaking record of the night.'

'Error: incorrect word order and unnecessary conjunctions; "and" is misplaced and "part" is incorrect noun. Also "record of the night" is the correct collocation. Suggestion: remove extra words and use correct noun phrase ordering.'

× 'I prefer abuse in rural areas because there are lots of you know natures around like for example mountains, beaches, parks wherein you can enjoy the scenery and and put it in very very memorable.'

✓ 'I prefer being in rural areas because there is lots of nature around, for example mountains, beaches and parks where you can enjoy the scenery and make it very memorable.'

'Error: "prefer abuse" is incorrect; likely meant "prefer being" or "prefer being in". "natures" is wrong; use uncountable "nature". "wherein" is formal/awkward; use "where". "put it in very very memorable" is ungrammatical — use "make it very memorable". Also subject-verb agreement: use "there is lots of nature" or "there are many natural places".'

× 'I prefer bus in my own country because here in the Philippines we have lots of beautiful natures bed, lots of mountains, falls, river, parks where me and my family can enjoy the scenery and put everything in very memorable events in our lives.'

✓ 'I prefer being in my own country because here in the Philippines we have lots of beautiful natural areas: many mountains, waterfalls, rivers and parks where my family and I can enjoy the scenery and create very memorable events in our lives.'

'Errors: "prefer bus" likely meant "prefer being"; "natures bed" is incorrect and unclear; use "beautiful natural areas". Word forms: "falls" should be "waterfalls"; "river" should be plural or parallelized to "rivers". Pronoun order: use "my family and I" instead of "me and my family". "put everything in very memorable events" is awkward — use "create very memorable events". Ensure parallel lists and correct word forms.'