视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Focus on accuracy, clarity and relevance. Start with a clear topic sentence stating that you enjoy taking photos of different views, then give specific examples (e.g. sunsets, landscapes) with correct vocabulary and simple linking words. Avoid irrelevant or incorrect words (e.g. “wheels”, “shelf”, “this guy”) and reduce grammatical errors. Keep answers concise (1–3 sentences).

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city crowds because the colours change every day and people create interesting scenes. These moments make my photos feel lively and unique.

建議: Give a direct preference and support it with clear, specific reasons using correct vocabulary and linking words. Correct word choice (e.g. “prefer rural scenery”, “pear orchards”, “pace of life”) and grammar will improve coherence. Limit to up to 3 sentences: statement + 1–2 supporting details.

範例: I prefer rural scenery because I love open fields and wildflowers. The slow pace of life and fresh local produce help me relax and forget the stress of city life.

建議: Answer directly and avoid repetition and errors. State your preference, give specific local details and a short reason with correct grammar and vocabulary. Use linking words (e.g. “because”, “for example”) and keep sentences concise. Correct mistakes like “county” → “country”, remove duplicated words, and replace unclear words (e.g. “lag”) with accurate ones (e.g. “calming”).

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I live in Lampang, which has mountains and bright rice fields. For example, I often walk by the river; it is calming and makes me feel connected to home.

× Yes, I really enjoy taking picture of different wheels, especially this guy.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially this one.

The student omitted plural and used incorrect nouns. 'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match 'different'; 'wheels' is incorrect contextually and should be 'views'; 'this guy' is informal and mismatches 'views' so use 'this one'. Use of articles: 'a picture' would require singular context. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to multiple items and choose vocabulary that matches meaning.

× I often capture sunsets and crowd formation because the colour and shelf change every day and the woman look beautiful in photo.

✓ I often capture sunsets and crowds because the colours and light change every day and the women look beautiful in photos.

Multiple plural errors: 'crowd formation' is unnatural; use plural 'crowds'. 'colour' should be plural 'colours' if referring to changing hues; 'shelf' is incorrect word — likely 'light' or 'sky'; 'woman' should be plural 'women'; 'photo' should be plural 'photos'. Suggestion: ensure consistency between singular/plural and choose accurate nouns.

× I learning peripheral scenery because I love open fields, white flowers and the pears full atmosphere.

✓ I like peripheral scenery because I love open fields, white flowers and the peaceful atmosphere.

'I learning' is incorrect present-tense form; use simple present 'I like' or 'I am learning'. 'pears full' is incorrect word order and word choice; likely intended 'peaceful'. Suggestion: use correct present tense verbs and check word choice for meaning.

× The quiet, fast and local produce make me feel relaxed and help me forget the start of city life.

✓ The quietness, fresh local produce and pace make me feel relaxed and help me forget the stress of city life.

Adjectives used incorrectly: 'quiet' should be noun 'quietness' or 'the quiet'; 'fast' is wrong for describing pace here — 'pace' works; 'local produce' needs adjective 'fresh local produce' for clarity. 'start of city life' is unclear; 'stress of city life' fits meaning. Suggestion: match adjectives to appropriate nouns and choose words that convey intended idea.

× I prefer the view in my own county.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country.

'County' is likely a mistaken spelling for 'country'. Also 'the view' is too specific; 'views' or 'the scenery' fits general preference. Suggestion: check spelling and article/noun number for general statements.

× I live in Lampang which has a lot of beautiful natural scenery like mountains and bright fields, so I enjoy being close to that to that nature.

✓ I live in Lampang, which has a lot of beautiful natural scenery like mountains and bright fields, so I enjoy being close to that nature.

Repetition 'to that to that' is an error; comma needed before 'which'. 'that nature' is slightly awkward — 'that nature' is acceptable but 'nature' alone or 'the natural surroundings' is better. Suggestion: remove duplication and add comma before nonrestrictive clause.

× For example, an option go for walks by the river because it's healthy, lag and feel connected to my home.

✓ For example, I often go for walks by the river because it's healthy, relaxing and makes me feel connected to my home.

Sentence lacks subject and correct verb form: 'an option go' is ungrammatical. 'lag' is incorrect word choice for 'relaxing'. 'feel' should agree with subject 'it' or 'walks' — better to say 'makes me feel'. Suggestion: use a clear subject and verb and choose appropriate adjectives like 'relaxing'.