视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar while keeping details. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct common errors (e.g., 'taking pictures of views', 'it relaxes me', 'I have liked photographing since I was 13', 'coastals' -> 'coasts'). Avoid repetition like 'so that I can remember' and 'I can save this memory for me'.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because natural landscapes relax me. For example, I have been photographing scenery since I was 13, and I often capture mountains and coastal scenes to preserve memories of places I visit.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give specific reasons with correct vocabulary and linking words. Fix grammar problems (e.g., 'there aren't many', 'scenery' not 'scanner', 'natural features' without repetition, 'those places' plural). Use one or two concrete examples and avoid vague statements.

範例: I prefer rural views because there are fewer buildings and more natural scenery. For example, quiet farmland and forests let me focus on mountains and rivers, which I find much more relaxing than noisy, industrial city views.

建議: Use present tense for general preferences and be specific about contrasts. Begin with a clear statement, then compare with concise reasons using linking words (e.g., 'however', 'on the other hand'). Fix grammar and plurals ('beautiful mountains', 'I enjoy'). Avoid redundancy like 'so that I can enjoy it because'.

範例: I prefer the views in my own country because we have many beaches and beautiful mountains that feel familiar. However, I would also like to visit other countries to experience different landscapes and clear skies, and to learn about new cultures.

× I really enjoy taking pictures views because I like to see natural landscapes and it makes me relax.

✓ I really enjoy taking pictures of views because I like to see natural landscapes and they make me relax.

Missing preposition 'of' after 'pictures' and incorrect verb agreement with 'it' referring to plural 'landscapes'. Use 'of' to link 'pictures' and 'views', and use plural pronoun 'they' with 'make' to agree with plural noun 'landscapes'. Suggestion: say 'taking pictures of views' and use 'they make me relax'.

× So I take pictures so that I can remember.

✓ So I take pictures so that I can remember them.

The verb 'remember' here needs an object; 'them' refers back to 'pictures' or the scenes. Add the pronoun 'them' to complete the verb phrase. Suggestion: include explicit object after 'remember'.

× I can save this memory for me and I've liked it photographing views since I was 13.

✓ I can save these memories for myself and I've liked photographing views since I was 13.

'This memory' is singular while talking about multiple pictures; use plural 'these memories'. 'For me' is less natural than reflexive 'for myself'. 'I've liked it photographing views' is ungrammatical: remove 'it' and use gerund 'photographing'. Suggestion: 'save these memories for myself' and 'I've liked photographing views since I was 13'.

× I often take photos of mountains and coastals.

✓ I often take photos of mountains and coasts.

'Coastals' is not a correct plural noun. Use 'coasts' or 'the coast' or 'coastal areas'. Ensure parallel plural nouns: 'mountains and coasts' or 'mountains and coastal areas'. Suggestion: use 'coasts' or 'coastal areas'.

× I really enjoy the views in rural areas because there's aren't many buildings or much infrastructure, so you can enjoy the scanner, the natural natural features and the landscape.

✓ I really enjoy the views in rural areas because there aren't many buildings or much infrastructure, so you can enjoy the scenery, the natural features and the landscape.

Incorrect contraction 'there's aren't' mixes singular and plural forms; use 'there aren't' for plural. 'Scanner' is incorrect word; correct word is 'scenery'. Duplicate word 'natural' was used. Suggestion: use 'there aren't many buildings' and 'scenery' and remove duplication.

× So I find those place more relaxing because it has a less industrial.

✓ So I find those places more relaxing because they are less industrial.

'Place' should be plural 'places' to match 'those'. 'It has a less industrial' is ungrammatical: use 'they are less industrial' or 'they are less industrialized'. Suggestion: match plurality and use adjective phrase 'less industrial' with 'are'.

× I really enjoyed the views in my country because we have a lot of beaches, a beautiful mountains and I enjoyed the familiar coastline.

✓ I really enjoy the views in my country because we have a lot of beaches, beautiful mountains and I enjoy the familiar coastline.

Mix of past and present tenses causes inconsistency. The question asks preference generally, so present simple 'really enjoy' and 'enjoy' should be used. Also 'a beautiful mountains' mixes article and plural; use 'beautiful mountains' without 'a'. Suggestion: maintain present tense and correct article usage.

× However, I would like to visit some places to enjoy the peaceful landscapes, the clear skies in other countries so that I can enjoy it because they offer different cultures.

✓ However, I would like to visit some places in other countries to enjoy the peaceful landscapes and clear skies because they offer different cultures.

Awkward word order and redundant phrases: 'in other countries' should follow 'places'; combining 'peaceful landscapes and clear skies' with 'and' improves flow. Remove redundant 'so that I can enjoy it' and clarify 'they' refers to those countries offering different cultures. Suggestion: streamline sentence and place 'in other countries' next to 'places'.