视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words (for example, 'because' and 'for instance') correctly and correct small grammatical issues (e.g. 'calms my nerves' rather than 'calms my nervous system'). Aim for no more than 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially beaches and seashores. I prefer water scenes because they relax me and create pleasing reflections and colors at sunrise or sunset. For example, I often photograph waves and wet sand to capture the light and movement.

建議: Clarify and shorten your response, and correct grammar and word choice. Use one linking phrase (e.g. 'because' or 'whereas') and give a concrete example of what you mean by 'untouched' to make the answer specific. Avoid repeating the same idea twice.

範例: I like both, but I prefer rural views because the landscapes often feel untouched by people and more peaceful. For example, I enjoy photographing lone fields or forests where there are no buildings or roads visible, which feels more authentic than city parks.

建議: Be careful with accuracy and word choice (e.g. 'natural' not 'na', 'deserts' not 'desserts'). Give a direct answer and one specific reason or example. Avoid hesitation and unnecessary repetition. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer the views in my country because I love our dramatic deserts and wide horizons, which are unique and familiar to me. However, I also admire places like Bali and Thailand for their lush beaches and tropical scenery.

× I do like taking pictures of different views, especially if it's a beach or a seashore.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views, especially if it is a beach or a seashore.

Using 'do like' for simple preference is grammatically acceptable but unnecessary; use of 'it's' is a contraction of 'it is' which is fine, but maintain consistent formal style by using 'it is'. Suggestion: Use simple present 'I like' to state general preferences.

× I think I prefer water in general because water brings me satisfaction to see and it just calms my nervous system immediately unlike maybe nature views.

✓ I think I prefer water in general because watching water gives me satisfaction and it calms my nervous system immediately, unlike other natural views.

Problems: 'brings me satisfaction to see' is unnatural; use 'watching water gives me satisfaction'. 'Unlike maybe nature views' is informal and unclear; use 'unlike other natural views'. Maintain simple present for general truths. Suggestion: Use clear verbs for perception (watch/watchng) and replace vague phrases with specific comparative phrases.

× Other nature views like I would say a desert.

✓ Other natural views, I would say, include deserts.

Original is a sentence fragment and ungrammatical. 'Other nature views like I would say a desert' lacks a main verb and plural agreement. Correction provides a complete sentence: 'include deserts' and uses 'natural' as adjective and plural 'deserts' for generalization. Suggestion: Ensure each sentence has a subject and verb and match singular/plural when generalizing.

× I like both, however I do prefer the rural areas because these areas have beautiful nature that it has never been touched before and when I say never been touched like human never interfered with it.

✓ I like both; however, I prefer rural areas because they have beautiful nature that has never been touched by humans.

Problems: unnecessary 'the' before 'rural areas' and awkward wording 'that it has never been touched before'. Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'rural areas' and passive with 'touched by humans'. Remove redundant 'do' in 'do prefer' unless emphasizing. Suggestion: Use concise structures and correct passive voice 'has never been touched by humans.'

× Unlike the urban areas where nature is handmade man made and they're not as authentic.

✓ Unlike urban areas, where nature is manmade and not as authentic.

Problems: 'handmade man made' is redundant and incorrect; 'manmade' is one word. 'They're' is vague for plural 'areas' but better to rephrase 'not as authentic'. Remove extra 'the' before 'urban areas' for generalization. Suggestion: Use 'manmade' and concise comparative phrase.

× I like the views in my country, although views in other countries, especially countries where they're famous with na natural views such as Bali for instance, or Thailand.

✓ I like the views in my country, although views in other countries—especially those famous for natural scenery, such as Bali or Thailand—are attractive.

Problems: 'they're famous with na natural views' contains typos ('na') and incorrect preposition 'famous with'; correct form is 'famous for'. Sentence is also a fragment; add a main verb like 'are attractive' to complete it. Suggestion: Use 'famous for' and add a predicate to complete the thought.

× However, I like or I would say my favorite thing about my country is the beautiful desserts that you could see from afar.

✓ However, I would say my favorite thing about my country is the beautiful deserts that you can see from afar.

Problems: 'desserts' (sweet food) is a spelling error for 'deserts' (landscapes). 'I like or I would say' is hesitating and redundant; use 'I would say' or 'my favorite thing is'. Use present simple 'you can see' for general truth. Suggestion: Correct spelling to 'deserts' and streamline the phrase to avoid hesitation.