视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar and avoid redundant or unclear phrases (e.g. “all too strong winds,” “They often key”). Describe a concrete example of a recent beach photo to be specific.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially at the beach. For example, last month I photographed a sunset where the warm light reflected off small waves and wet sand, creating vivid colors and dynamic lines. However, strong winds can make it hard to keep the camera steady, so I often use a tripod or wait for calmer moments.

建議: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and one specific supporting reason. Use linking words like “because” and “for example,” and give a concrete, correctly described example. Fix unclear words (e.g. “film” and “reduced it”).

範例: I prefer views in rural areas because the open landscape and greenery help me relax. For example, I like standing on a country lane and looking at the rolling hills and distant farms, which is much more peaceful than crowded city streets.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and correct vocabulary. Avoid confusing fragments and pronoun errors (e.g. “wheels,” “She who trip”). Use linking words like “because” and “however,” then provide one concrete example of a local memory and one example of what you like abroad.

範例: I generally prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and bring back personal memories. For instance, I often visit nearby mountains and lakes where I grew up, and those places remind me of family trips. However, I also enjoy scenery abroad because new landscapes and cultures offer fresh perspectives.

× Yes, I love taking photos of different views, especially at the beach because the light and colors are beautiful as the light and sunset all too strong winds can be uncomfortable.

✓ Yes, I love taking photos of different views, especially at the beach, because the light and colors are beautiful, and the sunset is stunning, although strong winds can be uncomfortable.

Sentence has awkward and incorrect adjective/adverb use and a run-on structure. 'as the light and sunset all too strong winds can be uncomfortable' is ungrammatical. Correct by using conjunctions and appropriate adjectives: 'the sunset is stunning' (adjective 'stunning' describing sunset) and 'although strong winds can be uncomfortable' (subordinating conjunction to show contrast). Also add commas to separate clauses.

× They often key a dramatic wave and movement in the sand that make peak.

✓ They often create a dramatic wave and movement in the sand that make the scene striking.

The verb/adverb placement and word choices are incorrect: 'key' is wrong verb here and 'make peak' is ungrammatical. Use 'create' as the verb and place descriptive words correctly. Add 'the scene' to clarify the object and 'striking' as an adjective to describe impact.

× I prefer views in rural areas because the open landscape and greenery are more relaxing and refreshing, which help me unwind after a busy week.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because the open landscape and greenery are more relaxing and refreshing, which helps me unwind after a busy week.

Subject-verb agreement: relative clause refers to 'the open landscape and greenery' treated as a singular idea (or the clause requires singular verb 'helps' to agree with the idea of the scenery helping). Use 'helps' for correct present tense agreement.

× For example, seeing film and distant hills reduced it compared to crowded.

✓ For example, seeing fields and distant hills is more relaxing than being in a crowded place.

Original sentence has word choice and structure errors: 'film' should be 'fields'; 'reduced it compared to crowded' is ungrammatical. Reconstruct sentence to compare two situations using 'more ... than' structure and include 'being in a' before 'crowded place' for clarity.

× I generally prefer wheels in my own country because they are familiar and evoke personal memories, such as She who trip to nearby mountains and lakes.

✓ I generally prefer views in my own country because they are familiar and evoke personal memories, such as a trip to nearby mountains and lakes.

Multiple errors: 'wheels' is wrong word; should be 'views'. 'She who trip' is incorrect and likely intended 'a trip' or 'short trips'. Also article 'a' is needed before 'trip'. Fixing these makes the sentence grammatical and meaningful.

× However, I also enjoy foreign landscape for their novelty.

✓ However, I also enjoy foreign landscapes for their novelty.

Adjective/noun agreement: 'foreign landscape' should be plural 'foreign landscapes' to match 'their novelty'. Also 'landscapes' better agrees with plural possessive 'their'. If singular, change pronoun to 'its'.