教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the teacher, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect tense/subject agreement.

範例: My favorite teacher was Señor Bautista, my high school Filipino teacher. He made lessons interesting and encouraged every student to participate, so I always looked forward to his class. Because he was patient and showed how to study effectively, he inspired me to consider becoming a teacher in the future.

建議: Answer directly and clearly. Use correct verb tenses and fewer vague phrases. Give one specific example of a challenge and how you handled it, using linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I am already a licensed teacher with nearly three years of experience. For example, I learned to adapt my lessons for quieter students by using small-group work, which improved their participation and made teaching more rewarding.

建議: Be specific about one memorable teacher and describe clearly why you remember them. Use linking words and correct grammar; avoid unclear phrases like “I’m applying.”

範例: Yes, I still remember my high school Filipino teacher, Mr. Bautista, because he encouraged me to study harder and gave personalized feedback. As a result, I developed confidence and later applied his methods in my own teaching.

建議: Give a direct answer (Yes/No) then add a brief reason with a specific memory. Keep sentences short and grammatically correct.

範例: No, I'm not still in touch with my primary school teachers because I lost contact after moving cities. However, I fondly remember playing games with classmates during kindergarten, which feels very nostalgic.

建議: Explain clearly one or two specific ways the teacher helped you, using correct phrases and linking words. Avoid unclear expressions like “reduce myself competence.”

範例: My favorite teacher, Ernesto Bautista, helped me appreciate the Filipino language by using engaging texts and cultural examples. Because of his influence, I chose to study secondary education to teach Filipino myself.

建議: Answer directly whether you prefer primary or high school teachers, then give one specific reason with linking words. Keep sentences concise and avoid listing irrelevant activities.

範例: I prefer my high school teachers because I formed stronger friendships and shared memorable activities with classmates. For instance, we often studied together and watched films after class, which made learning more enjoyable.

× Honestly, when I was in high school, my favorite teacher is Semester Bautista.

✓ Honestly, when I was in high school, my favorite teacher was Señor Bautista.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was in high school') so the verb should be in the past tense ('was') rather than present ('is'). Also 'Semester Bautista' seems to be a name error; likely intended 'Señor' or 'Mr.' Use the correct title and past tense to match the time frame.

× He made our lessons interesting and enjoying that all students is participating of him.

✓ He made our lessons interesting and enjoyable so that all the students participated in them.

'Enjoying' is the wrong form; use adjective 'enjoyable'. 'Students is' is subject-verb agreement error and 'participating of him' is incorrect preposition and object. Use past tense 'participated' to match 'made' and 'in them' to refer to lessons.

× He all influenced me to become I mean a teacher some days because he teach me on how to be a work hard and study well in my studies and never.

✓ He also influenced me to become a teacher someday because he taught me how to work hard and study well.

Multiple issues: 'all' should be 'also'; 'I mean' is unnecessary; 'some days' should be 'someday'; verb tense 'teach' should be past 'taught' to agree with past influence; phrase 'on how to be a work hard' is ungrammatical — correct is 'how to work hard'. Remove redundant words at the end.

× Currently, I'm a licensed professional teacher without three years of experience.

✓ Currently, I'm a licensed professional teacher with three years of experience.

The phrase 'without three years of experience' contradicts likely intention. Use 'with three years of experience' to state possession of experience. Tense 'I'm' is fine for current status.

× My teacher experience have a significant impact in my life.

✓ My teaching experience has had a significant impact on my life.

'Teacher experience' is awkward; use 'teaching experience'. Subject-verb agreement: singular subject requires 'has' not 'have'. Use present perfect 'has had' to indicate impact over time and preposition 'on' rather than 'in'.

× I learned something about how to handle different types of characteristics of students with their understanding needs, although.

✓ I learned how to handle different student characteristics and their varying needs, although it was challenging.

'Types of characteristics of students' is wordy; simplify to 'student characteristics'. 'With their understanding needs' is incorrect; use 'their varying needs'. The sentence ended with 'although'—add clause to complete it ('although it was challenging').

× This is challenging, it improves me and motivates me on how to show their guidance, but it's really neat for them.

✓ Although this is challenging, it improves and motivates me to provide proper guidance, which is beneficial for them.

'Improves me' is incorrect — say 'improves me' rarely used; better 'improves my skills' or 'it improves and motivates me'. 'Motivates me on how to show their guidance' misuses pronouns; use 'to provide proper guidance'. 'Neat' is informal and unclear; 'beneficial' expresses intended meaning.

× I have a lot of teachers reminds me of a good memories that I valuable and cherish their guidance and support when I was in high school and when I am in college.

✓ I have many teachers who remind me of good memories; I value and cherish their guidance and support from high school and college.

'A lot of teachers reminds' mixes plural subject with singular verb — use 'many teachers who remind'. 'A good memories' incorrect article/number — use 'good memories'. 'I valuable' is wrong form; use 'I value'. Change 'when I am in college' to past or 'when I was in college' for consistency.

× He influenced me to become a good student so that's why I'm applying.

✓ He influenced me to become a better student, which is why I applied.

'So that's why I'm applying' is unclear and mixes tenses. If referring to past application, use 'applied'; use 'better student' for comparison. Replace 'so that's why' with 'which is why' for clarity.

× It in my teaching experience and I gained a lot of students attraction and expertise.

✓ In my teaching experience, I have gained much student engagement and expertise.

'It in my teaching experience' is ungrammatical — start with 'In my teaching experience'. 'Students attraction' should be 'student engagement' or 'students' attention'. Use 'have gained' for present perfect to show ongoing result.

× Honestly, I have not still in touch with my primary school teacher because I don't remember now when my teacher is doing well and in my kindergarten days I still remind myself playing in.

✓ Honestly, I am not still in touch with my primary school teachers because I don't remember many details from those days; I only remember playing in kindergarten.

'I have not still in touch' is incorrect order; use 'I am not still in touch' or better 'I am not in touch' with plural 'teachers'. 'I don't remember now when my teacher is doing well' is unclear—simplify to not remembering details. 'I still remind myself playing in' is ungrammatical — use 'I only remember playing in kindergarten.'

× Umm, it is very nostalgic and valuable memories with my list. Follow follow students and classmates.

✓ Those are very nostalgic and valuable memories with my classmates and friends.

Original has fragmented phrases and repetition ('Follow follow'). Combine ideas into a coherent sentence: 'Those are very nostalgic and valuable memories with my classmates and friends.'

× Since Ernesto Bautista is my favorite teacher formerly, he is my Filipino subject instructor.

✓ Ernesto Bautista was formerly my favorite teacher; he was my Filipino instructor.

'Is my favorite teacher formerly' mixes present and past. Use past tense 'was formerly my favorite teacher' and 'was my Filipino instructor' to maintain past reference.

× He helped me reduce myself competence as well as his major field is based on how to love our national language and discover our variety of.

✓ He helped me develop my confidence and competence; his main focus was encouraging us to love our national language and explore its variety.

'Reduce myself competence' is opposite of intended meaning; use 'develop my confidence and competence'. 'His major field is based on' awkward — use 'his main focus was'. Complete idea about 'variety' by saying 'explore its variety.'

× As a Filipino so that's why I interested to took a course of bachelor secondary.

✓ Because I am Filipino, I was interested in taking a Bachelor of Secondary Education course.

Tense and verb forms incorrect: 'I interested to took' should be 'I was interested in taking'. Use 'Because I am Filipino' to state reason and correct course name 'Bachelor of Secondary Education'.

× I could say that I rather choose to say that I'm gain a lot of memories when I was in high school.

✓ I would say that I have gained many memories from high school.

Awkward phrasing and tense: 'I could say that I rather choose to say' is redundant. Use conditional/modal 'I would say'. 'I'm gain a lot of memories when I was' mixes present continuous with past—use present perfect 'have gained' to link past experience to present.

× I really enjoy being a teenager. That time I spend my leisure time going outside eating together.

✓ I really enjoyed being a teenager. At that time I spent my leisure going out and eating together with friends.

If referring to past (teenage years), use past tense 'enjoyed' and 'spent'. 'Going outside eating together' needs 'going out and eating together'.

× Watching movies with my best friends as well as they are my classmates. Then it gives me umm.

✓ I watched movies with my best friends, who were also my classmates; those memories are meaningful to me.

Maintain past tense 'watched'. 'As well as they are my classmates' should be 'who were also my classmates'. 'Then it gives me umm' is fragmentary—replace with a clear statement 'those memories are meaningful to me.'