教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Clarify and correct basic mistakes, use a clear topic sentence, avoid irrelevant words, and provide specific details. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences) and use linking words for coherence. For example, state who the teacher is, what subject they taught, and one or two specific reasons with simple linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

範例: My favorite teacher is Juliana, my college agricultural research supervisor. She was very kind and patient because she explained difficult concepts clearly and gave constructive feedback on my experiments. For example, she helped me design a successful field trial that improved my results.

建議: Start with a direct statement, avoid repetition, and give coherent reasons using linking words. Use clear, relevant vocabulary to explain why not, and keep it to 2–3 sentences. Mention specific negatives (workload, hours, stress) with brief examples.

範例: No, I do not want to be a teacher in the future because the workload and long hours would be stressful for me. For example, preparing lessons and grading often means working late into the evening, which I would find exhausting.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence naming the remembered teacher, correct unclear words, and give specific, consistent descriptions. Avoid contradictory adjectives. Use linking words like 'and' or 'because' to connect reasons you remember them.

範例: Yes, I still remember my childhood mentor, Mr. Fuku. He was both strict and caring because he expected high standards but also supported me after I made mistakes, which helped me improve.

建議: Answer directly and describe current contact clearly. Use past and present tenses correctly, and give one or two specific examples of how you keep in touch. Keep sentences short and logically connected with linking words like 'recently' or 'often'.

範例: Yes, I am still in touch with one of my primary school teachers. Recently I visited his home where he invited former students and gave us snacks, and we chatted about old memories.

建議: Use past tense for past events, state clearly how the teacher helped, and give a concrete example. Use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' to show cause and effect. Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

範例: A few days before an important exam I was very stressed and could not concentrate. My teacher visited my hostel and gave me study tips and a clear summary of key topics, which helped me feel more confident and focused.

建議: Give a direct comparison sentence and specific reasons for your preference. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' and correct plural/singular forms. Provide one or two specific examples of care or support from primary teachers.

範例: I prefer my primary school teachers because they cared for me personally and created a warm learning environment. However, I also respected my high school teachers for their subject knowledge and stricter teaching style.

× Yes, I have a favorite dessert. He is my college teacher and his name is Juliana.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher. She is my college teacher and her name is Juliana.

The student used dessert instead of teacher (wrong word) and used masculine pronouns for a feminine name. Replace 'dessert' with 'teacher' and use 'she/her' for Juliana. Also ensure noun matches meaning.

× He was reading Li our agricultural research and she was very kind and P polite.

✓ She taught us agricultural research and she was very kind and polite.

'Reading' is incorrect context; use 'taught' or 'was teaching'. 'Li' appears to be a typo; likely 'us'. 'P' is extraneous. Also maintain consistent pronoun 'she' for Juliana. Correct tense to past simple for a past action.

× That's why I like him.

✓ That's why I like her.

Pronoun should agree with the teacher's gender and the preceding sentence which uses 'she'. Change 'him' to 'her' for consistency.

× No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future because I'm not interested in teaching because this fashion is so painful and you cannot sleep peacefully.

✓ No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future because I'm not interested in teaching; this job is very demanding and you cannot sleep peacefully.

'Fashion' is the wrong word; use 'job' or 'profession'. Replace with 'job' and use adjectives 'demanding' for correct meaning. Combine clauses with a semicolon for clarity.

× Also you have a lots of work and after a day you can 6:00 to.

✓ Also you have a lot of work and after a day you may finish at 6:00.

Use 'a lot of' not 'a lots of'. The second part is unclear; rewrite to indicate finishing time: 'may finish at 6:00'. Use modal 'may' or 'might' for possibility.

× Yes, I have a teaser from my boss that I still remember.

✓ Yes, I have a teacher from my past that I still remember.

'Teaser' is incorrect; should be 'teacher'. 'From my boss' is confusing; context suggests a past teacher. Change to 'from my past'.

× His name is Fuku. He is my Madison on my childhood.

✓ His name is Fuku. He was like a mentor in my childhood.

'Madison' is incorrect word; likely meant 'mentor' or 'guardian'. Use 'was' for past and 'like a mentor' to express similarity. 'On my childhood' should be 'in my childhood'.

× He is very dangerous and more friendly.

✓ He was very kind and very friendly.

'Dangerous' contradicts friendliness; likely intended 'kind'. Use past tense 'was' if referring to childhood. 'More friendly' should be 'very friendly' or 'more friendly than others' with comparison object.

× Yes, I still in touch with my primary school teacher few days ago on each day I will go my a teacher home and he will invited us then he he was give some force and fruits and we are eating and.

✓ Yes, I was still in touch with my primary school teacher until a few days ago. Every day I would go to my teacher's home; he invited us, gave us food and fruits, and we would eat together.

Original mixes tenses and has many errors: 'still in touch' needs auxiliary 'am' or 'was'; 'few days ago' implies past so use past 'was'. 'on each day I will go my a teacher home' should be 'Every day I would go to my teacher's home'. 'he will invited' incorrect auxiliary and tense; use 'he invited'. 'give some force' 'force' is wrong word; use 'food'. Ensure possessive 'teacher's'.

× Few days before on my exam I'm really stressful and not concentrate on my ICD subject.

✓ A few days before my exam I was really stressed and could not concentrate on my ICT subject.

Use 'A few days before my exam' and past tense 'was'. 'Stressful' describes a situation; to describe a person use 'stressed'. 'Not concentrate' should be 'could not concentrate'. 'ICD' likely 'ICT' (information and communications technology) or keep original subject name correctly.

× Then my teacher is coming on my hostel.

✓ Then my teacher came to my hostel.

Use past tense 'came' to match context. Preposition 'on' is incorrect with 'hostel'; use 'to'.

× Then she will he will teasing some important talk.

✓ Then she would tell me some important things.

Original mixes pronouns and tenses. Use consistent past conditional 'would' or past 'told'. 'Teasing' is wrong; use 'tell' or 'discuss'. 'Some important talk' should be 'some important things' or 'some important advice'.

× I'd like my primary school teacher because they were my childhood teacher and also they would care and love so much.

✓ I prefer my primary school teachers because they taught me during my childhood and they cared for me and showed a lot of love.

Use plural 'teachers' consistently. 'They were my childhood teacher' incorrect; use 'taught me during my childhood'. 'Would care and love so much' should be 'cared for me and showed a lot of love'. Keep past tense.

× But high school teacher was loved by others and this boy there.

✓ But high school teachers were more strict and focused on academics.

Original is unclear: 'loved by others and this boy there' is ungrammatical. Provide a coherent contrast: high school teachers were more strict/focused on academics. Match plural and past tense.