教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 문법·어휘 오류가 있습니다. 먼저 문장 연결과 어순을 바로잡고 성격을 묘사할 때 적절한 형용사를 사용하세요. 예: 'He teaches history' 다음에 'He is very kind and well-liked by students'처럼 명확한 주제문과 구체적 세부사항(어떤 점이 좋았는지)을 한두 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 또한 불필요한 단절(마침표 남발)을 피하고 3~4문장 내로 답변을 구성하세요.

範例: Yes, I do. My favorite teacher was my history teacher. He was incredibly kind and very well-liked by students because he explained difficult events clearly and always helped us after class.

建議: 의도를 명확히 표현해야 합니다. 'I want to be a teacher'라는 주제문을 먼저 말하고 이유를 1~2개 구체적으로 제시하세요. 어휘 선택(‘notion’, ‘satisfaction’)이 어색하므로 'ideas' 또는 'concepts', 'I enjoy teaching' 등 자연스러운 표현으로 바꾸세요. 연결어(For example, because, and)로 문장을 매끄럽게 이어주세요.

範例: Yes, I do. I want to be a teacher because I enjoy explaining ideas to others and helping them understand difficult topics. For example, I often tutor classmates and feel proud when they improve.

建議: 대상(단수/복수)와 대명사 일치에 주의하세요. 'my high school teachers'라면 복수로 설명하거나 한 명을 말한다면 'teacher'를 사용하세요. 또한 이유를 구체화하고 연결어로 세부사항을 덧붙이세요. 예: 어떤 행동 때문에 기억에 남는지(도움, 성격, 수업 방식)를 설명하세요.

範例: Yes, I still remember my high school teacher. He was very kind and cheerful, and he stayed after class to help me with difficult topics, which made a big difference for my studies.

建議: 의미 전달이 불명확하고 'I don't trust them' 이유가 모호합니다. 연락 여부를 분명히 말한 뒤 이유(번호 변경 등)를 논리적으로 연결하세요. 신뢰 문제를 말할 때 구체적인 상황을 덧붙이면 설득력이 높아집니다. 연결어를 사용해 문장을 매끄럽게 만드세요.

範例: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers. I would like to contact them, but they changed their phone numbers and I couldn't find any updated contact information online.

建議: 문장 구성과 문법이 많이 어색합니다. 먼저 한 문장으로 요지를 밝히고, 이어서 구체적 예시를 하나 들어 설명하세요. 올바른 동사 표현(eg. 'listen to my worries', 'support me')과 시제·관사 사용을 신경 쓰세요. 문장 연결에는 'for example'나 'for instance'를 적절히 사용하세요.

範例: He helped me a lot by listening to my worries and encouraging me. For example, when I was anxious about an exam, he stayed after school to explain the material and gave me tips to study, which made me feel more confident.

建議: 비교 질문에는 명확한 비교문과 이유를 제시하세요. 'prefer A to B' 구조를 사용하고 동사구( 'keep in contact', 'listen to my worries', 'support me')를 문법적으로 정확하게 쓰세요. 또한 1~2개의 구체적 이유로 뒷받침하세요.

範例: I prefer my high school teachers to my primary school teachers because I am still in contact with them and they always listen to my worries and support me when I need help.

× He teaches history and he is. Very kindly and widespread.

✓ He teaches history and he is very kind and well-known.

The original has sentence fragments and incorrect adjective use. 'He is.' is a fragment; combine clauses. 'Kindly' is an adverb; use adjective 'kind'. 'Widespread' is incorrect for a person; 'well-known' expresses being popular. Suggestion: link clauses into one sentence and use correct adjective forms.

× Yes, I want to be your teacher because I'm going.

✓ Yes, I want to be a teacher in the future because I'm going to teach.

'I'm going' is incomplete and likely intended as future 'I'm going to...'. Also 'your teacher' is incorrect in context; use 'a teacher'. Use full future construction 'going to teach'. Suggestion: complete the future expression and choose correct article.

× I like to explain the notion to other people.

✓ I like explaining concepts to other people.

'Explain the notion' is unnatural; use 'explain concepts' or 'explain ideas'. Both 'like to explain' and 'like explaining' are possible; 'explaining' sounds more natural here. Suggest using plural 'concepts' to generalize.

× Additionally, I have a satisfaction to teach.

✓ Additionally, I get satisfaction from teaching.

'Have a satisfaction to teach' is ungrammatical. Use 'get satisfaction from' or 'find teaching satisfying'. Use gerund 'teaching' after preposition 'from'.

× Yes, in my case. I remember my high school teachers because he is very kindly and cheerful for me.

✓ Yes, I remember my high school teacher because he was very kind and cheerful to me.

'Yes, in my case.' is unnecessary; remove it. 'Teachers' then 'he' is inconsistent; use singular 'teacher' if referring to one. 'He is very kindly' uses adverb 'kindly' incorrectly; use adjective 'kind'. Also past memory uses past tense 'was'. Use 'cheerful to me' rather than 'for me'.

× Oh no, actually I want to talk with my primary school teachers.

✓ Oh no, actually I wanted to talk with my primary school teachers.

Context refers to a past attempt, so past tense 'wanted' is more appropriate. If meaning current desire, use 'want to talk to' not 'talk with'. Also 'talk to' is more natural for communicating with someone.

× However they changed their phone number.

✓ However, they changed their phone numbers.

Add comma after 'However'. If referring to multiple teachers, use plural 'phone numbers'. The original is close but needs plural and punctuation. If one number collectively, 'their phone number' could be correct but context implies multiple people.

× And I don't trust them.

✓ And I don't have their contact information anymore.

Saying 'I don't trust them' changes meaning; context likely means 'can't contact them' or 'lost contact'. Replace with clearer phrase 'don't have their contact information anymore' to reflect inability to reach teachers.

× He is very rare listened by worried.

✓ He listened to my worries very carefully.

Original is ungrammatical. Intended meaning is that he listened carefully to concerns. Use past tense 'listened' if referring to past, adverb 'carefully' or 'attentively', and object 'my worries'.

× For example, when I have. All worried for test.

✓ For example, when I was worried about a test,

Fragments and wrong tense. Combine into one clause: 'when I was worried about a test'. Use 'worried about' not 'worried for'.

× He is support and cheerful for me.

✓ he supported me and was cheerful.

Use past tense to match context: 'supported me' and 'was cheerful'. 'Support' as noun/verb must be inflected; include pronoun object 'me'. 'Cheerful for me' should be 'cheerful' or 'cheerful towards me'.

× I prefer my high school teachers because I still contact with him and he is always listen to my worries and support.

✓ I prefer my high school teacher because I am still in contact with him and he always listens to my worries and supports me.

Multiple issues: 'teachers' vs 'him' inconsistent—use singular 'teacher'. Use correct expression 'in contact with him'. Verb agreement: 'listens' and 'supports' for third person singular. Use 'supports me' with object pronoun. Also 'prefer' is fine but sentence needed subject-verb agreement and preposition corrections.