教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce hesitations and clarify the relationship and qualities with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples. Use linking words to make it coherent.

範例: Yes, I do. She is a colleague of mine who also teaches English. She makes lessons very engaging by using role-plays and group activities, so students who usually find lessons difficult have fun and participate more.

建議: Remove repetition, correct verb forms, and structure the response: state current status, explain why, and give a brief future aim with linking words.

範例: Yes. I currently work as an English teacher and I really enjoy helping students improve. In the future, I would like to train other teachers so I can share methods that help learners gain confidence.

建議: Avoid repetition and vague phrases. Give a clear topic sentence, then add a specific memory or example of how she inspired you, using linking words.

範例: Yes, I remember one English teacher in particular. She inspired me by encouraging me to read challenging books and by giving constructive feedback on my essays, which motivated me to study harder.

建議: Be concise and correct tense and grammar. Start with a direct answer, then briefly explain who you are in contact with and why, using linking words for clarity.

範例: No, I'm not in contact with my primary school teachers. However, I still keep in touch with my junior high English teacher because she still works at my old school and we exchange teaching ideas occasionally.

建議: Use a clear topic sentence and give one specific example of a method and its result. Use linking words to connect cause and effect.

範例: She helped me by asking probing questions that made me reflect on my goals. As a result, I understood my strengths and decided on a career path that suited my interests.

建議: Correct unclear language and avoid hesitation. State a clear preference, give specific reasons and a short concluding comment about influence on your career goal.

範例: I prefer my high school teachers because they encouraged discussion and critical thinking. Consequently, I felt more confident expressing my ideas, and their teaching style inspired me to become a teacher myself.

× Yes, I do, uh, she is my colleague and also she teaches English as well as I do.

✓ Yes, I do. She is my colleague and she also teaches English, like I do.

Pronoun and sentence structure: the original combined clauses awkwardly and repeated subjects. Split into two sentences and use 'she also teaches English, like I do' to show similarity. This corrects unclear reference and improves flow.

× Uh, she's a great teacher to evolve, engage, uh, let students engage in their, uh, hard class.

✓ She is a great teacher who helps students become more engaged in difficult classes.

Incorrect verb choice and word order: 'to evolve' and repeated 'engage' are incorrect here. Use a relative clause 'who helps students become more engaged' and 'difficult classes' instead of 'hard class' to convey intended meaning clearly.

× They are having so much fun hard class.

✓ They have so much fun in those difficult classes.

Sentence structure and missing preposition: 'so much fun hard class' is ungrammatical. Add preposition 'in' and use noun phrase 'those difficult classes' to form a correct sentence.

× Yes I do actually. I current uh currently work as a teacher and I really enjoy teaching English at school and also I want to be an instructor to uh build teachers knowledge about English learning.

✓ Yes, I do. I currently work as a teacher and I really enjoy teaching English at school. I also want to be an instructor to build teachers' knowledge about English learning.

Tense and form issues: 'current uh currently' is redundant and 'current' incorrectly placed. Use 'I currently work'. Possessive needed: 'teachers' knowledge'. Split into two sentences for clarity.

× Yes, I do. I have lots of teachers. I still remember.

✓ Yes, I have had many teachers whom I still remember.

Pronoun/reference and tense: 'I still remember' as a fragment after 'I have lots of teachers' is awkward. Combine into one sentence and use 'whom' to refer to teachers; 'have had' or 'have' acceptable—'have had' emphasizes past experience.

× Uh, one of the, the teachers I remember is our, is an English teacher.

✓ One of the teachers I remember is our English teacher.

Redundant words and article placement: remove repeated 'the' and extra commas. Use simple noun phrase 'our English teacher' for correctness and fluency.

× Uh, she inspired me a lot to motivate to study and also she gave me some in inspirations, uh, inspirations.

✓ She inspired me a lot and motivated me to study; she also gave me some inspiration.

Verb and noun usage: 'inspired me a lot to motivate to study' is incorrect and repetitive. Use parallel verbs 'inspired' and 'motivated' correctly and correct noun 'inspiration' singular.

× No, I'm not. I'm not. So uh, keep in touch with them, but I still make contact with a teacher from junior high school.

✓ No, I'm not. I don't keep in touch with them, but I am still in contact with a teacher from junior high school.

Pronoun/verb omission and tense: 'So uh, keep in touch with them' lacks subject and correct verb form. Use 'I don't keep in touch' and 'I am still in contact' for correct structure.

× As I said, she is an English teacher and she is still work works at the school I used to go when I was a student.

✓ As I said, she is an English teacher and she still works at the school I used to attend when I was a student.

Subject-verb agreement and verb choice: use 'works' (third person singular) and 'attend' instead of 'go' for formality. Remove duplicate 'work'.

× Giving me a lot of questions to identify what I'm thinking about.

✓ She gave me a lot of questions to help me identify what I was thinking about.

Sentence fragment and tense: original lacks subject and is a fragment. Add subject 'She' and use past tense 'gave' and 'was thinking' to match the context of a past event.

× Uh, it was quite effective and helpful for me to find out what I want to do in the future at that time.

✓ It was quite effective and helpful for me to find out what I wanted to do in the future at that time.

Tense sequence: when reporting past perspective, use past tense 'wanted' not present 'want'. Maintain consistent past narration.

× Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

✓ Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

This question sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed.

× I like high school teachers more because I could have refracted my thoughts with them talking and like, uh, interacting with each other so, and also I want to be a teacher like uh.

✓ I prefer high school teachers because I could reflect on my thoughts by talking and interacting with them, and I also want to be a teacher like that.

Word choice and verb form: 'refracted' is incorrect; correct verb is 'reflect'. Rearrange phrase to 'reflect on my thoughts by talking and interacting with them'. 'Like that' clarifies 'a teacher like [them]'.