学校— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct and clear response with proper sentence structure. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, start with a clear topic sentence about your school location, then add supporting details logically using linking words.

範例: I completed most of my studies at my high school in my home country. After moving to Canada, I pursued higher education in business management at Algoma University in Brampton, where I am currently studying.

建議: Your answer is repetitive and unclear. Try to express your feelings about your school clearly and avoid repeating the same idea. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

範例: Yes, I really like my school. I have fond memories of my high school, and I also enjoy studying at my university now because it offers many facilities that help me learn effectively.

建議: Your answer has good points but contains grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct sentence structures and linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, be specific about the amenities and environment to enrich your response.

範例: Yes, I believe my school is a good place to study because it has a peaceful and calm environment. Moreover, the professors are friendly, and there are many facilities such as a well-stocked library and sports grounds.

建議: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains unclear phrases. Try to use varied vocabulary and correct grammar to describe the environment clearly. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and avoid redundancy.

範例: The environment at my school is peaceful and comfortable, which helps me focus on my studies. There are quiet places to study without any disturbances, and the university is located in a calm area away from busy traffic.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas clearly and use correct sentence structures. Explain why interest in study is important with specific reasons and use linking words to organize your answer.

範例: Interest in studying is very important because without it, we may not perform well or achieve good grades. When we are interested, we are more motivated to learn and can build a successful career in our chosen field.

× Well, I have completed most of them study from my home country school that is seniors can re school.

✓ Well, I have completed most of my studies from my home country school, which is Senior Secondary School.

The original sentence has incorrect verb tense and unclear phrasing. 'Most of them study' should be 'most of my studies' to correctly refer to the completed work. Also, 'that is seniors can re school' is unclear and likely a mishearing or mispronunciation; it is corrected to 'which is Senior Secondary School' to clarify the school type.

× After that I moved here in Canada and completed my higher education in the business management course and I'm still pushing my study from Alcoma University in Brampton.

✓ After that, I moved here to Canada and completed my higher education in the business management course, and I'm still pursuing my studies at Alcoma University in Brampton.

The phrase 'pushing my study' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'pursuing' when referring to continuing studies. Also, 'moved here in Canada' should be 'moved here to Canada' to use the correct preposition.

× Yes, I really love my school, as does our yes I really love my school of my high school of my childhood and also the presently my yellow my universe state that for higher education and currently I'm enjoying my study.

✓ Yes, I really love my school, my high school from my childhood, and also currently my university for higher education, and I am enjoying my studies.

The original sentence is confusing and contains pronoun misuse and unclear phrases like 'my yellow my universe state that.' The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects pronoun use to properly refer to the schools and studies.

× Yes, I think my school is a good place to study because the environment of my universe stays very peace and calm full very I can enjoy my study.

✓ Yes, I think my school is a good place to study because the environment of my university is very peaceful and calm, so I can enjoy my studies.

The phrase 'peace and calm full very' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'peaceful' and 'calm.' Also, 'universe' should be 'university.' The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct adjective use.

× The professors are very nice by nature and all the amenities are available to us like library and hers sports ground.

✓ The professors are very nice by nature, and all the amenities are available to us, like the library and the sports ground.

The phrase 'hers sports ground' is incorrect; it should be 'the sports ground.' Also, 'like library' should be 'like the library' to use the definite article correctly before singular nouns.

× The environment of my school is very peace and comfort land. Peaceful and calm and helps me to focus that are understudies and there are quite places where we can enjoy your study and there is no disturbance and destruction around the university.

✓ The environment of my school is very peaceful and comfortable. It is calm and helps me to focus on my studies. There are quiet places where we can enjoy our study, and there is no disturbance or distraction around the university.

The original sentence misuses adjectives like 'peace' and 'comfort land' instead of 'peaceful' and 'comfortable.' Also, 'quite places' should be 'quiet places,' and 'destruction' is incorrect in this context; 'distraction' is appropriate. Pronouns are corrected for consistency.

× It is located at a victim go to places.

✓ It is located in a quiet place.

The phrase 'victim go to places' is incorrect and likely a mishearing. The intended phrase is 'quiet place,' which fits the context of describing the environment.

× It is very important to make interest in study because if we are don't show any interest in the field of our education, then we don't get good scores and we don't make their profession in the in the education field.

✓ It is very important to have interest in study because if we don't show any interest in our education, then we don't get good scores and we don't build a profession in the education field.

The phrase 'make interest' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'have interest.' Also, 'we are don't show' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'we don't show.' The phrase 'make their profession' is unclear and corrected to 'build a profession.'

× So bye good scoring an boy making a professional in.

✓ So by scoring well, one can become a professional.

The original sentence is unclear and contains pronoun and word choice errors. 'Bye' should be 'by,' 'good scoring' should be 'scoring well,' and 'boy making a professional' is corrected to 'one can become a professional' for clarity and correctness.