学校— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer provides specific location details, which is good. However, avoid unnecessary or confusing information like the political status change of Jammu, as it is not directly relevant to the question. Also, try to make your sentences more concise and natural.

範例: My school is located in Katwa, the largest district in the northern region of Jammu. It's a well-known area with a peaceful environment.

建議: Your answer shows enthusiasm, which is great. However, avoid filler words like 'umm' and unclear phrases such as 'every weird memories'. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and keep your sentences clear and concise.

範例: Yes, I absolutely love my school, Saint Xavier's Convent School. I have been studying there since kindergarten, and I have many fond memories. If I had the chance, I would definitely relive those experiences.

建議: Your answer is positive but contains some unclear and awkward phrases like 'whoever I am today' and 'still in going to the school'. Try to use clearer expressions and avoid informal fillers like 'you know'. Also, organize your ideas logically with linking words.

範例: Yes, I believe my school is an excellent place to study. I owe much of who I am today to my teachers and the education I received. In fact, my younger siblings and cousins also attend the same school, which shows my strong recommendation.

建議: Your answer includes good descriptive details, but some phrases are awkward, such as 'basic educates' and 'moral crowd'. Try to use more precise vocabulary and link your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating location information already mentioned.

範例: The school is surrounded by lush green landscapes, creating a peaceful atmosphere. The weather in northern Jammu is pleasant, which adds to the comfort. People at school are friendly and approachable, yet they maintain strict discipline and uphold strong ethical values.

建議: Your answer conveys your opinion well, but avoid filler phrases like 'if I had my opinion to be shared' and informal words like 'yeah'. Also, try to organize your ideas with linking words and use more precise vocabulary.

範例: I believe having an interest in studying is very important. It doesn't have to be limited to academic subjects; it can include areas like dancing or other skills. Without genuine interest, it's difficult to build a career or achieve success.

× Now it's a no longer a state, it's a union territory.

✓ Now it is no longer a state; it is a union territory.

The phrase 'a no longer a state' is incorrect because 'no longer' is an adverbial phrase and should not be preceded by the article 'a'. The correct structure is 'no longer a state'. Also, the sentence is better separated with a semicolon or period to improve clarity.

× It's a Catholic Christian School which is named as Saint Xavier's convent school.

✓ It's a Catholic Christian school named Saint Xavier's Convent School.

The phrase 'named as' is incorrect; the correct usage is 'named' without 'as'. Also, 'school' should not be capitalized unless part of a proper noun, and 'Convent' is part of the proper noun and should be capitalized.

× And ever since my kindergarten I've been in this school and I have so many, umm, every weird memories of the school so.

✓ And ever since kindergarten, I've been in this school and I have so many, um, weird memories of the school.

The phrase 'every weird memories' is incorrect because 'every' is used with singular countable nouns. The correct quantifier here is 'so many' or simply 'many'. Also, 'my kindergarten' is better expressed as just 'kindergarten'.

× And undoubtedly if I had the chance to revel, relive all the experiences I did as a child, I would go for it.

✓ And undoubtedly, if I had the chance to relive all the experiences I had as a child, I would go for it.

The word 'revel' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'relive'. Also, 'did as a child' is better expressed as 'had as a child' to indicate past experiences.

× And if somebody would ask me for my recommendations, I would certainly tell them to let their children study since it is convent school.

✓ And if somebody were to ask me for my recommendations, I would certainly tell them to let their children study since it is a convent school.

The phrase 'ask me for my recommendations' is acceptable but 'if somebody would ask' is better expressed as 'if somebody were to ask' for conditional mood. Also, 'convent school' requires the article 'a' before it.

× My very own younger siblings and my cousins are still in going to the school.

✓ My very own younger siblings and my cousins are still going to the school.

The phrase 'still in going to the school' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'still going to the school'. The preposition 'in' is unnecessary here.

× So it's a very live example of yes, I would promote my school 10 on 10.

✓ So it's a very live example of why I would promote my school 10 out of 10.

The phrase 'live example of yes' is awkward and incorrect. It should be 'live example of why'. Also, '10 on 10' is better expressed as '10 out of 10' to indicate a perfect score.

× Inside the school, the people are really hospitable and approachable, but at the same time they are very strict when it comes to manners and basic educates, so they do not compromise on their ethics and on the moral crowd they have.

✓ Inside the school, the people are really hospitable and approachable, but at the same time they are very strict when it comes to manners and basic education, so they do not compromise on their ethics and the moral code they have.

The word 'educates' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'education'. Also, 'moral crowd' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'moral code'.

× Well, it's a subjective question, but I think, yeah, if I had my opinion to be shared, it is very important to have interest in studies.

✓ Well, it's a subjective question, but I think, yeah, if I were to share my opinion, it is very important to have an interest in studies.

The phrase 'if I had my opinion to be shared' is awkward and incorrect. The correct expression is 'if I were to share my opinion'. Also, 'interest in studies' should be preceded by the article 'an'.

× It is not certain to a specific field.

✓ It is not certain to a specific field.

This sentence is unclear and awkward. A better expression would be 'It is not limited to a specific field.' However, since the instruction is to correct only mistakes listed in the grammar problem type list, and this is more about word choice, no correction is made here.

× It could be anything like English, math, science, dancing, learning, but as long as you're not at all interested in anything, you cannot make a career or pursue anything further.

✓ It could be anything like English, math, science, dancing, learning, but as long as you're not at all interested in anything, you cannot make a career or pursue anything further.

This sentence is grammatically correct according to the given grammar problem types, so no correction is needed.