学校— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there is a small error in word choice: 'neighbor' should be 'neighborhood'. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly, for example, 'because' and 'so'.

範例: My school is located in Kathmandu, which is a developing city. It is not far from my house, so it only takes about 10 minutes to walk there. I really like the neighborhood because it is peaceful and safe, making it a convenient place for me.

建議: The word 'handsome' is not appropriate to describe a school. Instead, use words like 'beautiful' or 'well-maintained'. Also, avoid contractions like "it's" in formal speaking and try to expand your answer with more details or examples.

範例: Yes, I really like my school because it is beautiful and well-maintained. This creates a pleasing environment for studying and spending time after class, which makes me feel comfortable and motivated.

建議: Your answer is relevant but incomplete and slightly repetitive at the end. Try to avoid redundancy and finish your sentences clearly. Also, use linking words to connect your points smoothly.

範例: I firmly believe that my school is a good place to study because it is beautiful and quiet. Moreover, the surroundings are very pleasant, which helps me concentrate better.

建議: Your answer covers many points but has some awkward phrasing such as 'well occupied' and 'learn effective overall'. Try to use more precise vocabulary and avoid repetition of 'overall'. Also, organize your ideas with clear linking words.

範例: The environment at my school is peaceful, beautiful, quiet, and safe. Additionally, the classrooms are well-equipped, and the teachers are very supportive, which makes learning easier. Therefore, the calm atmosphere and excellent facilities create a perfect environment for studying.

建議: Your answer is repetitive and contains grammatical errors such as 'we can we can' and awkward phrasing. Try to avoid repetition, use varied vocabulary, and organize your ideas clearly with linking words. Also, keep your answer concise and within 5 sentences.

範例: Interest in study is very important because it motivates us to learn and achieve success. When we are interested, we can build a strong career and improve our future. Moreover, studying with interest helps us live the life we desire and raise our living standards.

× I really like the neighbor because it's peaceful and safe.

✓ I really like the neighborhood because it's peaceful and safe.

The word 'neighbor' refers to a person living nearby, but the intended meaning is the area around the school, which is 'neighborhood'. Using 'neighbor' here is incorrect.

× Yes, I really like my school because it's quite handsome which makes it's a pleasing environment for study and spending time after class.

✓ Yes, I really like my school because it's quite beautiful, which makes it a pleasing environment for studying and spending time after class.

The adjective 'handsome' is typically used for people, not places like schools. 'Beautiful' is more appropriate. Also, 'it's' should be 'it' as the possessive is not needed here. 'Study' should be in gerund form 'studying' to function as a noun.

× I firmly believe that my school is a good place to study because it is beautiful, quiet and the surrounding around it is very pleasant. It is.

✓ I firmly believe that my school is a good place to study because it is beautiful, quiet, and the surroundings are very pleasant.

The phrase 'the surrounding around it' is redundant; 'surroundings' alone is sufficient. Also, 'surroundings' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. The last sentence 'It is.' is unnecessary and incomplete.

× The environment is so peaceful and beautiful, and it is so quiet and safe. Additionally, the classrooms are well occupied, and the teachers are very supportive, making it easier to learn effective overall. Overall, the calm atmosphere and excellent facility create a perfect environment for study.

✓ The environment is peaceful and beautiful, and it is quiet and safe. Additionally, the classrooms are well-equipped, and the teachers are very supportive, making learning more effective overall. The calm atmosphere and excellent facilities create a perfect environment for studying.

The phrase 'well occupied' is incorrect; 'well-equipped' is appropriate for classrooms. 'Making it easier to learn effective overall' is awkward; 'making learning more effective overall' is clearer. 'Facility' should be plural 'facilities' to match the context. 'Environment for study' should be 'environment for studying' to use the gerund form.

× It is very important to keep interest in study because study is the key to success and everyone should study and have interest in study because it helps a lot in future and it builds our career and we can we can have a life we want and it uplift our living standard.

✓ It is very important to maintain interest in studying because studying is the key to success. Everyone should study and have interest in studying because it helps a lot in the future, builds our career, and allows us to have the life we want. It uplifts our living standards.

The phrase 'keep interest in study' is awkward; 'maintain interest in studying' is better. 'Study' as a noun should be 'studying' to function properly. 'Helps a lot in future' needs the article 'the' before 'future'. The sentence was run-on and needed to be split for clarity. 'Uplift' should be 'uplifts' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'Living standard' should be plural 'living standards'.