学校— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer provides relevant information but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use simpler, clearer sentences and correct prepositions. Also, avoid redundancy and be more concise.

範例: I attend Lexium High School of Economics, which has five campuses around Moscow. My campus is located in the city center.

建議: Your answer is enthusiastic but somewhat repetitive and unclear. Avoid repeating phrases like 'I really like' and clarify your points. Also, correct the name of your school if needed and improve sentence structure for clarity.

範例: Yes, I love my school. I transferred here in 9th grade, and I enjoy studying at Latium because of the supportive teachers and friendly classmates.

建議: Your answer shows confidence but has grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Avoid awkward expressions like 'which are where we support it.' Use clear, simple sentences and provide specific reasons.

範例: Yes, definitely. I think it's one of the best schools in Moscow because the teachers are very supportive, and the students are friendly.

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by using better sentence structure and linking words. Also, correct subject-verb agreement and add more specific details.

範例: The environment at my school is friendly yet serious because the school focuses on academic performance. Therefore, we study hard to achieve good results.

建議: Your answer conveys a good idea but has awkward phrasing and grammar issues. Try to express your thoughts more clearly and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I believe interest in studying is very important because motivation alone may fade over time. However, if you are genuinely interested in your subject, learning becomes more enjoyable and effective.

× I'm starting in Lexium of High School of Economics which contains 5 campuses around the Moscow, but my campus is located in the city center.

✓ I'm starting at Lexium High School of Economics which has 5 campuses around Moscow, but my campus is located in the city center.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'starting' and 'around the Moscow'. The correct preposition for attending a school is 'at'. Also, 'around Moscow' does not require 'the' before 'Moscow' because it is a proper noun. Additionally, 'contains' is better replaced with 'has' when referring to campuses.

× I'm starting in Lexium of High School of Economics which contains 5 campuses around the Moscow, but my campus is located in the city center.

✓ I'm starting at Lexium High School of Economics which has 5 campuses around Moscow, but my campus is located in the city center.

The word 'campuses' is plural and correctly used, but 'contains' is less appropriate than 'has' when referring to the number of campuses a school has. 'Has' is more natural and commonly used in this context.

× I changed it when I was in 9th grade and currently I'm studying in Latium and I really like it because of the people around me and teachers.

✓ I changed it when I was in 9th grade and currently I'm studying at Latium and I really like it because of the people around me and the teachers.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to studying at a school; 'at' is the correct preposition. Also, 'teachers' should be preceded by 'the' to specify the particular group of teachers at the school.

× I changed it when I was in 9th grade and currently I'm studying in Latium and I really like it because of the people around me and teachers.

✓ I changed it when I was in 9th grade and currently I'm studying at Latium and I really like it because of the people around me and the teachers.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'teachers' to specify the particular teachers at the school. Omitting 'the' makes the sentence sound incomplete or general.

× Yes, definitely. And if I can say it's the best school in Moscow because of the teachers here, which are where we support it and also students which are very friendly.

✓ Yes, definitely. And if I can say, it's the best school in Moscow because of the teachers here, who support us, and also the students who are very friendly.

The relative pronouns 'which' and the phrase 'which are where we support it' are incorrect. 'Who' should be used for people, and the phrase should be corrected to 'who support us' to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× Environment in my school is really friendly but serious at the same time because school focus on its academic performance, so we're studying really hard there.

✓ The environment at my school is really friendly but serious at the same time because the school focuses on its academic performance, so we're studying really hard there.

The phrase 'Environment in my school' should be 'The environment at my school' because 'at' is the correct preposition for locations like schools. Also, 'school focus' should be 'school focuses' to agree with the singular subject.

× Environment in my school is really friendly but serious at the same time because school focus on its academic performance, so we're studying really hard there.

✓ The environment at my school is really friendly but serious at the same time because the school focuses on its academic performance, so we're studying really hard there.

The verb 'focus' must agree with the singular subject 'school', so it should be 'focuses' in the third person singular form.

× I believe that interest in study is really important because only on motivation you won't go far as it would disappear someday.

✓ I believe that interest in studying is really important because relying only on motivation, you won't go far as it will disappear someday.

The phrase 'interest in study' is better expressed as 'interest in studying'. Also, 'only on motivation' is awkward; 'relying only on motivation' is clearer. 'Would disappear' should be 'will disappear' to indicate future certainty.

× I believe that interest in study is really important because only on motivation you won't go far as it would disappear someday.

✓ I believe that interest in studying is really important because relying only on motivation, you won't go far as it will disappear someday.

The modal verb 'would' is incorrectly used here to express a future event. 'Will' is the correct modal verb to indicate a future certainty.