学校— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 質問に対して直接的な答えが不足しており、文法的な誤りも多いです。より自然で効果的な回答にするために、まず学校の名前を明確に述べ、その後に場所や特徴を具体的に説明しましょう。

範例: My school is called Those University, and it is located in Carlton. It has a long history of 150 years, and this year marks its 150th anniversary.

建議: 文法の誤りと不自然な表現が目立ちます。質問に対して直接的に答え、理由を明確に述べ、具体的な例を加えることで、より効果的な回答になります。

範例: Yes, I like my school because it offers a wide variety of courses. Since I major in commerce, I find many classes that match my interests very engaging.

建議: 回答は質問に答えていますが、繰り返しや曖昧な表現が多いです。より明確で簡潔に答え、接続詞を使って論理的に話を展開しましょう。

範例: Yes, I think my school is a good place to study because it has many students from diverse backgrounds, which allows me to communicate with different people. Moreover, the school offers a wide range of courses, so I can choose classes that interest me.

建議: 言いたいことは伝わりますが、語彙の選択や文法に問題があります。具体的な説明を加え、より自然な表現を使うことが重要です。

範例: The environment at my school is like a big community because there are about 1,000 students, including many exchange students. This creates a lively and diverse atmosphere.

建議: 表現が不自然で繰り返しが多いです。質問に対して明確に答え、理由を簡潔に述べ、適切な語彙を使いましょう。

範例: I think having interest in studying is very important because it motivates you to work hard and keep learning consistently.

× Yeah, my school is those university.

✓ Yeah, my school is that university.

The demonstrative pronoun 'those' is used for plural nouns, but 'university' is singular here. The correct singular form is 'that'.

× Those university is in Carlton and has a a long history of 150 years.

✓ That university is in Carlton and has a long history of 150 years.

Again, 'those' is plural but 'university' is singular. Use 'that' for singular nouns. Also, remove the repeated 'a'.

× So this year is the anniversary of Five 150.

✓ So this year is the 150th anniversary.

The phrase 'anniversary of Five 150' is incorrect and unclear. The correct expression is '150th anniversary' to indicate the celebration of 150 years.

× Yes, I like school because they are a lot of kind, a lot kind of curriculum and actually I major in commerce and there are a lot of interesting classes about my interest.

✓ Yes, I like school because there are a lot of kinds, a lot of kinds of curriculum and actually I major in commerce and there are a lot of interesting classes about my interest.

'They are' is incorrect for 'school' which is singular; 'there are' is correct. Also, 'a lot of kind' should be 'a lot of kinds' or 'a lot of kinds of'. The phrase 'about my interest' is awkward but acceptable here.

× So it is so it.

✓ So it is so.

The phrase 'So it is so it' is redundant and incorrect. The correct phrase is 'So it is so' or better yet, 'So it is.'

× Yes, I think, uh, my school is good place to study umm, because there are a lot of students, so I can communicate with umm, uh, various kinds of people, and there are a lot of curriculum and classes, so I can choose my interesting classes.

✓ Yes, I think, uh, my school is a good place to study umm, because there are a lot of students, so I can communicate with umm, uh, various kinds of people, and there are a lot of curricula and classes, so I can choose my interesting classes.

'Good place' needs the article 'a'. 'Curriculum' is singular; the plural is 'curricula'.

× Yeah, umm, the environment at my school is like uh, uh, big communicate, big community, umm, because they're 1000 of students in my school also and exchange students, uh, also.

✓ Yeah, umm, the environment at my school is like uh, uh, a big community, umm, because there are 1000 students in my school also and exchange students, uh, also.

'Communicate' is a verb; the correct noun is 'community'. 'They're 1000 of students' is incorrect; correct is 'there are 1000 students'.

× So there is a lot of people in.

✓ So there are a lot of people in.

'A lot of people' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'.

× Yeah, I think interesting study is very important because if you don't have an interest in study, you can't study hard and continue to study.

✓ Yeah, I think interesting study is very important because if you don't have an interest in studying, you can't study hard and continue to study.

'Interest in study' is awkward; the correct phrase is 'interest in studying' because 'interest' is followed by a gerund here.

× So I think interesting study is very important factors to motivate to.

✓ So I think interesting study is a very important factor to motivate you.

'Interesting study' should be 'interest in study' or 'interesting studies'. 'Factors' is plural but the subject is singular; use 'factor'. The phrase 'to motivate to' is incomplete; it should be 'to motivate you' or 'to motivate students'.