学校— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“it's China Normal University”应为“China Normal University”。内容有些冗余且不够具体，建议简洁明了地回答问题，并用连词使句子更连贯。

範例: I graduated from China Normal University, which is located in Shanghai. Shanghai is an international city known for landmarks like the Shanghai Tower, and it offers convenient transportation.

建議: 回答表达基本清晰，但句子结构不够自然，且部分词汇使用不当，如“excellent sports systems”应为“excellent sports facilities”。建议使用更自然的表达，并注意语法和词汇的准确性。

範例: Yes, I love my school. It has a beautiful campus with many flowers and trees, excellent sports facilities, and complete infrastructure, which helped me learn a lot.

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，如“professors which has amount of teaching experiments”表达不清晰。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的语法，并具体说明学校的优势。

範例: Yes, I think my school is a great place to study because it has many experienced professors who conduct various teaching and scientific experiments, which enrich our learning.

建議: 回答不够连贯，部分表达不清楚，如“combined national environment and modern environment”及“we have a rather across our campus”。建议使用更清晰的句子，描述环境时具体且连贯。

範例: The environment at my school blends traditional and modern elements. Around the teaching buildings, there are many trees and beautiful flowers, creating a pleasant atmosphere across the campus.

建議: 回答不完整且表达混乱，句子结构不正确。建议完整回答问题，使用清晰的句子表达观点，并提供具体理由。

範例: Interest in study is very important because it motivates people to learn. For those who don't enjoy studying, developing interest can help improve their motivation and performance.

× I just got my master's degree from it's China Normal University.

✓ I just got my master's degree from China Normal University.

句中“it's”用法错误，应该直接使用学校名称。这里不需要使用“it's”，因为“it's”是“it is”的缩写，不能用来表示所属关系。

× It's a very great school.

✓ It's a great school.

“very great”搭配不当，great本身表示程度较高，不需要very修饰。

× Shanghai has a famous in size named Shanghai Tower and it's a very convenient city.

✓ Shanghai has a famous building called Shanghai Tower, and it's a very convenient city.

“a famous in size”结构不正确，应改为“a famous building called”。

× My school has excellent campus which has beautiful flowers, trees, excellent sports systems and the complete infrastructure facilities so that I learned a lot of knowledge from.

✓ My school has an excellent campus which has beautiful flowers, trees, excellent sports facilities, and complete infrastructure, so I have learned a lot of knowledge from it.

“excellent campus”前缺少冠词“an”；“sports systems”应为“sports facilities”；句尾“so that I learned a lot of knowledge from”结构不完整，需调整。

× My school has a lot of professors which has amount of teaching experiments and scientific experiments so that we can learn a lot knowledge from them.

✓ My school has a lot of professors who have a great amount of teaching and scientific experience, so we can learn a lot from them.

“professors which has”应为“professors who have”；“amount of teaching experiments and scientific experiments”表达不当，应为“a great amount of teaching and scientific experience”；“learn a lot knowledge”应为“learn a lot”。

× Well, my school combined national environment and modern environment around our teaching building, there are many trees and beautiful flowers.

✓ Well, my school combines national and modern environments. Around our teaching building, there are many trees and beautiful flowers.

原句结构混乱，需拆分为两句，动词时态和主谓一致需调整。

× Moreover, we have a rather across our campus.

✓ Moreover, we have a river across our campus.

句子不完整，“a rather”后缺少名词，推测应为“a river”。

× Actually the interest in study is very important for the people who don't like the study, it's very important to culture their interest in study.

✓ Actually, interest in study is very important for people who don't like studying; it's very important to cultivate their interest in study.

“the people”改为“people”；“the study”改为“studying”；“culture”误用，应为“cultivate”。

× That can promote the motive of them.

✓ That can promote their motivation.

“the motive of them”表达不自然，应改为“their motivation”。