学校— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and a bit long. Try to be more concise and avoid repeating the same information. Also, use linking words to make your answer flow better.

範例: My school is located in Chengdu, close to Shangriu International Airport, which makes it very convenient for me to travel home during vacations.

建議: Your answer is clear but could be improved by correcting grammar and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, provide more specific details about the improvements made.

範例: Absolutely, I like my school because it listens carefully to students' suggestions and improves accordingly. For instance, when I found the breakfast unhealthy during a camping trip, I suggested adding more variety, and they made changes based on that feedback.

建議: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use correct verb forms and clarify your points. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas.

範例: Definitely yes. As I mentioned, my school is located in a suburban area, far from the bustling city, which provides a quiet environment for studying and minimizes distractions.

建議: Your answer has repetition and unclear phrases. Avoid repeating words and make sure your sentences are clear. Also, provide more specific descriptions and use linking words.

範例: I think the environment at my school is wonderful because it has many green plants and a big lake on campus, which creates a peaceful and refreshing atmosphere.

建議: Your answer has grammar errors and could be more developed. Use correct verb forms and expand your explanation with linking words and examples.

範例: Interest plays an important role in studying because when you are interested in a subject, you are more motivated and can perform better.

× My school is located in Chengdu near the Shangriu Airport near the Shangriu International Airport, and it is very convenient for me to go to the airport and come back home in the summer or winter vacation.

✓ My school is located in Chengdu near the Shangriu International Airport, and it is very convenient for me to go to the airport and come back home during the summer or winter vacation.

The phrase 'in the summer or winter vacation' is incorrect because we use 'during' to indicate a period of time when something happens. Also, 'near the Shangriu Airport near the Shangriu International Airport' is redundant; it should be simplified to 'near the Shangriu International Airport' for clarity.

× Absolutely yes because my school tried to listen carefully from students suggestion and improve from the feedback.

✓ Absolutely yes because my school tries to listen carefully to students' suggestions and improve based on the feedback.

The verb 'tried' should be in present tense 'tries' to match the current ongoing action. The preposition 'from' is incorrect here; it should be 'to' after 'listen'. Also, 'students suggestion' should be plural possessive 'students' suggestions' to indicate suggestions belonging to students. 'Improve from the feedback' should be 'improve based on the feedback' for correct usage.

× For example the last time I came to the camping and find the breakfast is unhealthy so I suggest them to change the variety.

✓ For example, the last time I went camping, I found the breakfast was unhealthy, so I suggested they change the variety.

The verb tenses need to be consistent in past tense: 'came to the camping' should be 'went camping'; 'find' should be 'found'; 'is' should be 'was'; 'suggest' should be 'suggested'. Also, 'them to change the variety' is better expressed as 'they change the variety'.

× And far away from the bustling city, it provide a quiet environment to study and advise destruction.

✓ And far away from the bustling city, it provides a quiet environment to study and avoid distraction.

The verb 'provide' must agree with the singular subject 'it', so it should be 'provides'. Also, 'advise destruction' is incorrect; the intended phrase is likely 'avoid distraction'.

× I think it is very great because there are many, many green green plants in it and there are a Big Lake inside my school.

✓ I think it is very nice because there are many green plants in it and there is a big lake inside my school.

The word 'great' is not typically used to describe environment; 'nice' or 'beautiful' is more appropriate. Repetition of 'many, many' and 'green green' is unnecessary. 'Big Lake' should not be capitalized unless it is a proper noun; here it should be 'big lake'. Also, 'there are a Big Lake' is incorrect; it should be 'there is a big lake' because 'lake' is singular.

× The wheels very great.

✓ The views are very great.

The sentence 'The wheels very great' is incorrect and unclear. It is likely a mishearing or typo for 'The views are very great.' The corrected sentence includes a subject 'views' and verb 'are' to form a complete sentence.

× Interest play plays a important role in study.

✓ Interest plays an important role in study.

The subject 'Interest' is singular, so the verb should be 'plays' not 'play'. Also, 'a important' is incorrect; 'important' starts with a vowel sound, so the article should be 'an'.

× Only you have interest in something.

✓ Only if you have interest in something,

The sentence 'Only you have interest in something.' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'if' makes it a conditional clause, which fits better with the following sentence.

× You can do it better, do it well.

✓ you can do it better and do it well.

The two clauses should be connected with a conjunction 'and' to form a proper compound sentence.