学校— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas and remove filler words like 'uh'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide more specific details about the location.

範例: My school is located in the centre of Surrey, just a 10-minute walk from my house, which makes it very convenient. Additionally, it's well-served by public transport. The area around the school is peaceful, with several parks and shops nearby, creating a pleasant environment for students.

建議: Improve your answer by using more precise vocabulary and linking words. Also, specify what kind of fun activities are available to make your answer more vivid and engaging.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy going to school because the professors are excellent at teaching. Moreover, the college offers many facilities such as a well-stocked library and a cozy café. There are also various extracurricular activities like sports and art clubs that students can participate in during their free time.

建議: Work on grammar and sentence structure to make your answer clearer. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples of courses and facilities to enrich your response.

範例: Yes, I definitely think my school is a good place to study because it offers a wide range of courses across different streams, catering to various strengths. Furthermore, the library has an extensive collection of books related to our subjects, and the school provides many facilities such as study rooms and computer labs to support students' learning.

建議: Enhance your answer by using more descriptive vocabulary and linking words. Also, correct minor grammatical errors and provide a clearer picture of the environment.

範例: The environment at my school is very peaceful, with plenty of greenery and plants. In fact, there is a small forest located in the centre of the campus where many students like to sit and enjoy the sunshine during breaks.

建議: Avoid filler words like 'umm' and improve grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide more detailed reasons or examples to support your opinion.

範例: I believe that having an interest in studying is very important because it helps us stay focused and passionate about the subjects we learn. As a result, studying becomes easier and more enjoyable.

× My school is located in center of Surrey, which is quite convenient to reach by public transport.

✓ My school is located in the center of Surrey, which is quite convenient to reach by public transport.

The phrase 'in center of Surrey' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'center'. In English, when referring to a specific place like 'the center' of a city or area, the definite article 'the' is required to specify that particular location.

× Moreover, it's just 10 minutes walk from my house, so it's quite convenient for me.

✓ Moreover, it's just a 10-minute walk from my house, so it's quite convenient for me.

The phrase '10 minutes walk' is incorrect because 'walk' should be a singular noun modified by '10-minute' as a compound adjective. Also, 'a' is needed before '10-minute walk' to indicate one instance of the walk.

× It has a lot of uh parks and shops around it, making it quite a peaceful environment for students.

✓ It has a lot of parks and shops around it, making it quite a peaceful environment for students.

The filler 'uh' is unnecessary and informal in this context and should be omitted for clarity and formality.

× Also, my college has a lot of facilities like library, cafe and a lot of fun activities that we can do in our alone time.

✓ Also, my college has a lot of facilities like a library, a cafe, and a lot of fun activities that we can do in our alone time.

The nouns 'library' and 'cafe' are countable singular nouns and require the indefinite article 'a' before them. Also, a comma is needed before 'and' in the list for clarity.

× Also in our library we have a lot of different books related to our subject and it provide a lot of facilities to students to.

✓ Also, in our library we have a lot of different books related to our subject and it provides a lot of facilities to students too.

The verb 'provide' does not agree with the singular subject 'it'; it should be 'provides'. Also, 'to' at the end is incorrect and should be 'too' to mean 'also'. A comma after 'Also' improves readability.

× My school has quite a peaceful environment. It has a lot of greeneries and plants.

✓ My school has quite a peaceful environment. It has a lot of greenery and plants.

The word 'greeneries' is incorrect; 'greenery' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. Therefore, 'a lot of greenery' is correct.

× Moreover, there is a small forest which is located in the center of our school and there are a lot of students sitting enjoying in sunshine.

✓ Moreover, there is a small forest which is located in the center of our school and there are a lot of students sitting and enjoying the sunshine.

The phrase 'enjoying in sunshine' is incorrect; the correct preposition is omitted and should be 'enjoying the sunshine'. Also, 'sitting enjoying' needs 'and' to connect the two actions.

× I think umm interest in study is quite important.

✓ I think umm interest in studying is quite important.

The phrase 'interest in study' is awkward; the correct form is 'interest in studying' where 'studying' is a gerund acting as a noun.

× It help us to keep focused and have more passion about what we study.

✓ It helps us to keep focused and have more passion about what we study.

The verb 'help' does not agree with the singular subject 'It'; it should be 'helps' to maintain subject-verb agreement in present tense.

× So this makes really studies really easy.

✓ So this really makes studies really easy.

The adverb 'really' is misplaced; it should modify the verb 'makes' rather than 'studies'. The corrected sentence places 'really' before 'makes' for proper adverb placement.