学校— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve sentence structure and grammar for clarity and naturalness. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy. For example, use 'near my house' instead of 'placed nearby my house', and combine related ideas with conjunctions.

範例: My school is located near my house. There is also a shop where students can buy food, and a park nearby where they often discuss their studies and homework.

建議: Use more precise vocabulary and avoid repeating 'also'. Combine sentences to make the answer more coherent and natural. Add linking words to improve flow.

範例: Yes, I like my school because it has a great environment, wonderful teachers, and friendly students. Moreover, I have many friends there, which makes it enjoyable.

建議: Avoid repetition and improve sentence fluency. Use linking words like 'because' and 'furthermore' to connect ideas. Be more specific about how the school supports learning.

範例: Yes, I think my school is a good place to study because it has supportive teachers who explain everything clearly. Furthermore, students have the opportunity to choose the subjects they want to learn.

建議: Use more natural expressions and linking words to connect ideas. Replace 'big' with more descriptive adjectives. Clarify the purpose of the park and yard.

範例: The environment at my school is spacious. It has a large gym for physical education and a big yard filled with trees and plants. Additionally, there is a park where students can study and do their homework together.

建議: Correct grammar errors such as 'interesting' to 'interest'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Be concise and clear in expressing the importance of interest in study.

範例: I believe that having an interest in studying is very important because it keeps us motivated to learn more, achieve good grades, and build a successful future.

× My school placed nearby my house.

✓ My school is placed near my house.

The verb 'placed' is incorrectly used in the past participle form without an auxiliary verb. The correct form requires the verb 'is' to form the passive voice: 'is placed'. Also, 'nearby' is an adverb and should be replaced with the preposition 'near' to correctly indicate location.

× There's also shop where students buying food and place called park nearby where students can discuss their studies and their homework.

✓ There's also a shop where students buy food and a place called a park nearby where students can discuss their studies and their homework.

The sentence lacks articles before 'shop' and 'place'. The verb 'buying' should be in the base form 'buy' after 'where students'. Also, 'park' should be preceded by an article 'a'. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× Yes, I like my school because it has great environment.

✓ Yes, I like my school because it has a great environment.

The noun 'environment' is countable in this context and requires the indefinite article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct.

× Also I have a lot of friends from my school.

✓ Also, I have a lot of friends at my school.

The preposition 'from' suggests origin, but here it is more appropriate to use 'at' to indicate association or location within the school.

× I think yes because my school has supportive teachers that can explain to you everything clearly.

✓ I think yes because my school has supportive teachers who can explain everything to you clearly.

The relative pronoun 'that' is better replaced with 'who' when referring to people. Also, the phrase 'explain to you everything' is more natural as 'explain everything to you'.

× Also my my school gives students opportunity to choose which subjects they will learn.

✓ Also, my school gives students the opportunity to choose which subjects they will learn.

The noun 'opportunity' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific opportunity.

× Environment at my school is big.

✓ The environment at my school is big.

The noun 'environment' here needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific environment, that of the school.

× It has large gym for physical education.

✓ It has a large gym for physical education.

The noun 'gym' is countable and requires the indefinite article 'a' before it.

× Also it has big yard with trees, plants and park in which students can study their homework together.

✓ Also, it has a big yard with trees, plants, and a park in which students can study their homework together.

The nouns 'yard' and 'park' are countable and require the indefinite article 'a'. Also, commas are needed to separate items in a list.

× I believe that interesting in study is so important because it's what keeps us motivated to study further more and get good grades and build our future.

✓ I believe that interest in study is very important because it's what keeps us motivated to study further and get good grades and build our future.

The word 'interesting' is an adjective and incorrectly used here; the noun 'interest' is correct. 'Further more' should be 'further' as one word. Also, 'very' is more appropriate than 'so' in formal contexts.