学校— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và trật tự từ. Nên dùng câu đầy đủ (subject + verb), bổ sung liên từ hoặc cụm trạng ngữ để câu mạch lạc hơn. Tránh lỗi thiếu động từ và rút gọn không chính xác.

範例: My school is on 32nd Street, which is near my house, so I walk there every day.

建議: Cải thiện chia thì và từ vựng cảm xúc; nói rõ nguyên nhân bằng cách dùng linking words (e.g., however, because, so). Tránh dùng từ không chuẩn như "excited" thay cho "excitement" và giảm tiếng ững ừ (umm). Giữ câu ngắn gọn (tối đa 3–4 câu).

範例: I liked the school at first because I passed an entrance exam to get in. However, now I don't feel excited about it because the workload is very heavy and it is less enjoyable than before.

建議: Lưu ý sử dụng thì đúng và tránh lặp từ; nêu rõ quan điểm kèm lý do cụ thể. Sử dụng linking words như "but" hoặc "however" để đối lập ý. Sử dụng danh từ số nhiều/quá khứ/hiện tại phù hợp (e.g., "doesn't have" chứ không phải "don't have").

範例: Yes, academically it can be a good place to study, but it lacks facilities for sports and arts, so I don't like it much.

建議: Rõ ràng hơn khi mô tả môi trường: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rồi đưa ra chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: classroom size, attitude of teachers, extracurriculars). Dùng liên từ để kết nối ý. Tránh cấu trúc mơ hồ và lỗi ngữ pháp như "teachers mind is different".

範例: The environment is focused on academic achievement: teachers expect students to study hard and aim for high grades. However, many students prefer more sports and art activities, which are limited at my school.

建議: Cải thiện phát âm/diễn đạt một vài chỗ và sửa lỗi nhỏ để câu mạch lạc (ví dụ "Interesting study" → "Interest in studying"); tiếp tục dùng ví dụ cụ thể. Giữ cấu trúc rõ ràng: khẳng định + lý do + ví dụ.

範例: Interest in studying is very important because when you are interested you invest more time and effort, which improves your grades. For example, I study English more regularly when I enjoy the topics, and my confidence and results improve as a result.

× My school at 32 St. that's near my house and I walk to school every day.

✓ My school is at 32 St.; it's near my house and I walk to school every day.

The original sentence lacks the verb 'is' after the subject (sentence structure/there be/verb issue). Use 'is' to state location and separate clauses with a semicolon or conjunction for clarity. Suggestion: include the verb 'is' after 'My school' and connect independent clauses correctly.

× At first I like it, I did an exams to come into the school but now I don't have any excited for this goal.

✓ At first I liked it; I took exams to get into the school, but now I am not excited about this goal.

Mixed and incorrect tenses: 'At first' requires past tense 'liked'. 'Did an exams' is incorrect: use 'took exams' (past tense and plural agreement). 'Don't have any excited' is incorrect phrasing; use 'am not excited about'. Suggestions: match past tense for past events and use correct verb collocations (take exams) and prepositions ('excited about').

× I feel it too umm hard and it's not funny or comfortable like I guess before.

✓ I find it too hard, and it's not enjoyable or comfortable like it was before.

Incorrect use of 'feel it too hard' (use 'find it too hard') and 'funny' is wrong for enjoyable; 'like I guess before' is awkward — use 'like it was before'. Suggestion: use 'find' with adjectives, choose appropriate adjective 'enjoyable', and use comparative clause with 'was'.

× Yes, it changed to to be a good place to study and it don't have any place for sport, for art and it's just a study on books and TV or anything.

✓ Yes, it has changed to become a good place to study, but it doesn't have any facilities for sport or art; it's just about studying from books and watching TV.

Incorrect verb forms and structure: 'changed to to be' should be 'has changed to become'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it don't' should be 'it doesn't'. 'Place for sport' should be 'facilities for sport or art'. Suggestion: use present perfect for change over time ('has changed'), correct negative verb form, and use appropriate nouns ('facilities').

× Maybe it's good because UH students might and teachers mind is different teacher with one the student to study hard and be success and be good at every subjects.

✓ Maybe it's good, because students and teachers have different views: teachers want students to study hard, be successful, and do well in every subject.

Pronoun and noun phrase confusion: 'UH students might and teachers mind is different' is unclear. Use 'students and teachers have different views'. 'Be success' should be 'be successful'. 'Every subjects' should be 'every subject'. Suggestion: simplify by stating 'students and teachers have different views' and correct adjective/adverb forms and singular/plural nouns.

× But a student like a sport and art more.

✓ But students like sports and art more.

Singular/plural mismatch: 'a student like' should be 'students like' or 'a student likes'. Also 'sport' should be plural 'sports' when speaking generally. Suggestion: match subject and verb in number and pluralize countable nouns when appropriate.

× Interesting study is very important because when you are interested, you spend more time and effort on studying.

✓ Being interested in your studies is very important because when you are interested, you spend more time and effort studying.

Awkward noun phrase 'Interesting study' should be 'Being interested in your studies' or 'interest in study'. 'On studying' can be simplified to 'studying'. Suggestion: use gerund phrase 'being interested in' or 'interest in' to express the concept.

× Watch improve your academic performance.

✓ This improves your academic performance.

'Watch' is incorrect verb here; likely intended 'which' or 'this'. Sentence lacks clear subject and verb. Suggestion: use 'This improves your academic performance' or 'That will improve your academic performance' to convey result.

× For example, I study English more regularly when I enjoy the topics and my grades and confidence improve as a result.

✓ For example, I study English more regularly when I enjoy the topics, and my grades and confidence improve as a result.

This sentence is mostly correct; only needs a comma before 'and' to join clauses clearly. Tense usage is appropriate (present simple for habitual actions). Suggestion: add punctuation for clarity.