学校— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence stating location, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition ("from my school, from my home"), use correct prepositions and tense, and keep answer under 5 sentences.

範例: My school, The Educators, is in my hometown, about one kilometre from my house. I usually cycle there every day, which takes me around ten minutes.

建議: Use correct vocabulary (staff, not stuff), avoid filler words and repetition, and organise ideas: give a reason and one specific example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to make it coherent.

範例: Yes, I like my school because the staff are hardworking and supportive. For example, the school organises small events and assemblies to keep students motivated, and the assessment system helps us track progress.

建議: Be precise and avoid vague phrases and repetition. Start with a clear opinion, then give one or two concrete reasons or examples. Correct grammar (staff are, not was) and remove unclear filler like 'UH'.

範例: Yes, it is a good place to study because the teachers are very supportive. For instance, they run revision sessions before exams and give practical tips that helped many students improve their grades.

建議: Use clear descriptors and correct grammar. Start with a topic sentence describing the environment, then add a specific detail or example. Avoid fillers and redundancy.

範例: The school has a calm and friendly environment. Students rarely argue, and teachers are kind and approachable, which creates a positive atmosphere for learning.

建議: State your opinion clearly and support it with a specific reason or example. Use correct grammar and avoid unclear words like 'percentage'. Use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore'.

範例: Interest is very important because when students are interested they concentrate better and work harder. For example, I study subjects I enjoy for longer periods and get better results, whereas I struggle with topics I find boring.

× My school name is the Educators and it is in the town where I'm still living.

✓ My school's name is the Educators, and it is in the town where I still live.

Use possessive form or add the article 'the' with 'name' (My school's name). Also 'where I'm still living' is awkward for a general location; use simple present 'I still live' to match the ongoing state. This corrects article/possessive usage and tense flow.

× It was not far away from my school, from my home.

✓ It is not far from my school; it is close to my home.

The student speaks about a location that is still true, so simple present tense 'is' should be used instead of past 'was'. Also simplify phrasing: 'not far away from' -> 'not far from' for natural English.

× Probably it would be 1 kilometer away from my home, and I often go to my school by bicycle.

✓ It is probably about 1 kilometer from my home, and I often go to school by bicycle.

Using 'would be' is incorrect here; use simple present 'is' or 'is probably' for a current fact. Use 'about 1 kilometer' for approximation and omit the article before 'school' in this habitual context.

× I always love my school because the stuff there was very hard working and kind.

✓ I have always loved my school because the staff there was very hardworking and kind.

'Always love' should be present perfect 'have always loved' to indicate a lasting feeling. 'Stuff' is a misspelling for 'staff'. 'Hard working' should be one word 'hardworking'. Maintain past or present consistency: if speaking generally, present perfect fits.

× Uh, my school often organized small functions and fun prayers for the students, uh, to make sure that they're not, uh, they're to make sure that they're not, uh, that they are not getting bored.

✓ My school often organized small events and fun assemblies for the students to make sure that they did not get bored.

Reduce repetition and choose correct nouns: 'events' or 'functions' and 'assemblies' rather than 'fun prayers' if meaning school gatherings. Maintain past tense 'organized' and use past 'did not get' for consistency. Remove redundant phrases for clarity.

× And, and, and furthermore, the testing system was very good.

✓ Furthermore, the testing system was very good.

Remove filler repetition. 'Was' is acceptable if referring to the past; keep simple past for past-school description.

× Yes, I think that my school is the perfect space for a student to study and as I have already told that the staff was very hardworking and supportive and before exams the staff helped us a lot and gave us very important tips for the exams.

✓ Yes, I think that my school is the perfect place for a student to study. As I have already said, the staff were very hardworking and supportive; before exams the staff helped us a lot and gave us very important tips.

Replace 'space' with 'place' for natural collocation. Use 'have already said' instead of 'have already told that'. Agreement: 'staff' can take plural verb 'were' or singular 'was' depending on variety; using 'were' matches 'staff' as a group. Break into shorter sentences for clarity and use simple past 'helped' and 'gave' for past events.

× So I prefer UH so everyone prefer this school in my town.

✓ So I prefer it; many people in my town prefer this school.

Original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. Provide clear subject for 'prefer' and correct subject-verb agreement: 'everyone prefers'. Use 'many people' if meaning general preference.

× The environment was a very common quiet and there were no fighting between the students and and the teachers were very kind.

✓ The environment was very calm and quiet; there was no fighting among the students, and the teachers were very kind.

Replace 'a very common quiet' with 'very calm and quiet'. Use 'there was no fighting' (singular 'no fighting' requires 'was') and 'among the students' or 'between students'. Remove duplicate 'and'.

× How important is interest in study?

✓ How important is interest in studying?

Use the gerund 'studying' after 'interest in' to form the correct noun phrase. 'Interest in study' is unnatural; 'interest in studying' or 'interest in one's studies' is preferred.

× The interest is very important to study because if a percentage do not take interest in the work he's doing, he will probably do not give his best.

✓ Interest is very important for studying, because if a person does not take an interest in the work he is doing, he will probably not give his best.

'A percentage' is incorrect when referring to a person; use 'a person' or 'someone'. Subject-verb agreement: 'does not' not 'do not'. Word order: 'probably not give' -> 'will probably not give'. Use 'interest in the work he is doing' for clarity.

× And so whenever you do any work, you have to take interest in it and give your best.

✓ So whenever you do any work, you must take an interest in it and give your best.

Add 'an' before 'interest' for correctness: 'take an interest in'. 'Have to' is acceptable, but 'must' is stronger; either is grammatical. Keep present tense for general advice.