自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear, concise and grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers (you know, like) and correct verb forms (wanted, needed). Keep to at most 3–4 short sentences. For example, say when you had the bike, who gave it to you, and why it was important to learn to ride.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me when I was five because he wanted me to learn how to ride. He thought cycling was an important skill for getting around and staying active, so he practiced with me every weekend.

建議: Answer directly, use clearer structure and specific reasons. Start with a topic sentence stating your opinion, then give two concrete reasons linked with words like because and for example. Remove hesitations and correct grammar (bicycles are, people ride them). Keep sentences short and focused.

範例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. Because many people use them for short trips and commuting, they are affordable and practical. For example, I see many students and delivery riders cycling in cities every day, especially during rush hour.

× My dad bought one for me because he really want me to try to, you know, ride a bicycle.

✓ My dad bought one for me because he really wanted me to try, you know, to ride a bicycle.

The sentence refers to a past event ('bought'), so the verb 'want' should be in the past tense 'wanted' for consistency. Use past-tense verbs for actions or states in the past to maintain tense agreement. Suggestion: keep all verbs describing past circumstances in past tense (wanted, needed, etc.).

× And he really need to give me that skill because, you know, like it could be a light share, it could be.

✓ And he really needed to give me that skill because, you know, it could be useful.

The original has tense inconsistency and unclear quantifier/phrase ('a light share'). 'Need' should be past tense 'needed' to match the past context. Also 'a light share' is not a correct quantifier or collocation here; 'useful' or 'a good skill' fits the meaning. Suggestion: use appropriate collocations and keep past tense consistent.

× Yes, I think it's quite popular in my country because I've seen people buying a lot and you know, and also I need, I think ride bicycles is very essential skill in my country, which is, you know, like we have a lot of but then and I can see like people ride by all the time and.

✓ Yes, I think it's quite popular in my country because I've seen people buying them a lot, and I think riding bicycles is a very essential skill in my country; there are many bicycles and I can see people riding them all the time.

Multiple issues: 'buying a lot' needs an object ('them') to refer to bicycles. 'I need, I think ride bicycles' is grammatically incorrect: replace with 'I think riding bicycles' (gerund) to express opinions about an activity. 'We have a lot of' needs an object (e.g., 'bicycles') and 'ride by' is incorrect here; use 'riding them' or 'riding bicycles'. Also tense: present perfect 'I've seen' is fine to show past experience relevant now. Suggestion: use gerunds after 'think' for general statements about activities, supply necessary objects, and ensure clear collocations ('riding them all the time').

× I had a bug when I was very young.

✓ I had a bike when I was very young.

This is likely a mispronunciation or typo: 'bug' should be 'bike'. While not a grammar rule from the list, the intended word 'bike' fits the context. If treating grammar, no -ing issue here; however ensure correct vocabulary. Suggestion: use the correct noun 'bike' for clarity.