自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct, use correct past tense and simple clear sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect words (e.g., “die”, “to to”, “drive”).

範例: No, I didn't have my own bike as a child. Instead, I often borrowed my mother's bike and rode along the river with my friends on weekends, which was a fun way to relax and chat together.

建議: Answer directly and use clearer grammar and linking words. Give a reason and a specific example. Use correct noun phrases and plural forms (e.g., “students”), and include a brief explanation about why bikes are popular.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many high school and secondary school students commute to school by bike, especially in smaller towns where traffic is light.

× When I was die, I didn't have my own bike.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't have my own bike.

The word 'die' is incorrect here and makes the sentence nonsensical; the intended noun is 'child'. This is a sentence structure/word choice error. Replace 'die' with 'child' to convey the meaning that during childhood the student lacked a bike.

× I usually used to my mother's bike to to ride a drive along the river with my friends, to be my friends.

✓ I usually used my mother's bike to ride along the river with my friends.

Errors include incorrect use of 'used to' plus extra 'to', the redundant verb 'drive' (not appropriate for bikes), and the phrase 'to be my friends' which is irrelevant. 'Used to' should be followed by the base verb without an extra 'to' when describing a past habitual action: 'used my mother's bike' or 'used to ride my mother's bike.' Clear concise form: 'I usually used my mother's bike to ride along the river with my friends.' Remove unrelated clause 'to be my friends.'

× Yes, my popular among vehicles in my country many high school student and secondary still student right to commute the school by bike.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular among vehicles in my country; many high school and secondary students ride bikes to commute to school.

This sentence has multiple problems: missing subject ('bikes'), incorrect word order, missing plural endings, wrong word choice ('still student'), and missing prepositions. Break into clearer clauses: state the subject 'bikes', use plural 'students', and the correct verb phrase 'ride bikes to commute to school.' Also use a semicolon or conjunction to connect the two related ideas.