自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and finish the sentence properly.

範例: No, I didn’t have my own bike as a child. My parents believed bikes were for boys, so they bought one for my brother instead; I used to borrow his bike whenever he wasn’t using it.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence, use correct tense and smoother linking words, and give one or two specific examples or statistics if possible. Keep sentences natural and avoid small grammar mistakes.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use bicycles for commuting to work or school and for exercise; for example, there are frequent cycling events and triathlons in the Philippines that attract many participants.

× Unfortunately no, because my parents told me that bikes are only for boys that's why they don't buy one for me.

✓ Unfortunately no, because my parents told me that bikes are only for boys, so they didn't buy one for me.

This sentence has run-on structure and incorrect tense consistency. The original uses present tense 'don't buy' while referring to a past decision; it also joins clauses with 'that's why' without proper punctuation. Use past tense 'didn't buy' to match 'told me' and connect clauses with a comma and 'so' for clarity.

× But my brother has a bike and whenever my parents are not around I would borrow his and.

✓ But my brother had a bike, and whenever my parents were not around I would borrow his.

Tense inconsistency and incomplete ending: the context asks about childhood, so use past tense 'had' and 'were not around'. The phrase ends with 'and.' which is incomplete; remove 'and' to complete the sentence. 'Would borrow' is acceptable for habitual past actions.

× Many people in here in our country were using bike, going to school or going to their work or even just for their hobby or in exercise.

✓ Absolutely, yes. Many people here in our country used bikes to go to school or to work, or even just for a hobby or for exercise.

Multiple issues: 'in here' is incorrect — use 'here' or 'in our country'; 'were using bike' is wrong number and tense — use plural 'used bikes' for general past habit, or 'use bikes' for general present. 'Going to their work' is better as 'to work'; 'in exercise' should be 'for exercise'. Also add articles where needed and parallel structure ('to go to school or to work').

× And here in the Philippines we have bike competition, we have triathlon, something like that.

✓ And here in the Philippines we have bike competitions and triathlons, and similar events.

Countable nouns require plural or articles: 'bike competition' and 'triathlon' should be plural if speaking generally. Also improve cohesion by combining with 'and' and clarify 'something like that' to 'similar events'.