自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, correct grammar (past tense), and add a clear topic sentence with one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words and avoid redundancy. For example, say you loved riding, describe a specific memory or how you learned to ride without training wheels, and finish with a brief result or feeling.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a small blue bike with training wheels that I used to ride around the neighborhood every morning. After a few weeks of practice with my father’s help, I learned to balance and eventually took the training wheels off, which made me feel very proud and independent.

建議: Improve accuracy and clarity: correct grammar, use consistent singular/plural and precise vocabulary, and give a specific reason with an example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to make the answer coherent. Avoid unclear or incorrect words (e.g. 'BC lows', 'commissioner').

範例: In my opinion, bicycles are not very popular in my country because most people prefer motorcycles for daily travel. Motorcycles are cheaper to buy and faster on busy roads, so for example many commuters choose them to get to work quickly during rush hour.

× I love it.

✓ I loved it.

The student is describing a past experience (having a bike as a child), so the verb should be in the past tense. Using present tense 'love' creates a time mismatch. Suggestion: use 'loved' to match past context.

× I used ride around the neighborhood every morning until I learn to ride without a training wheel and.

✓ I used to ride around the neighborhood every morning until I learned to ride without a training wheel.

The correct expression for a past habitual action is 'used to' followed by the base verb ('used to ride'). Also 'learn' should be in the past tense 'learned' to match the past timeframe. Remove the extraneous 'and' at the end. Suggestion: use 'used to' for past habits and keep all verbs in past tense when describing past events.

× Motorcycle are cheaper to buy and faster on BC lows so they have become the common choice for commissioner.

✓ Motorcycles are cheaper to buy and faster on busy lowways so they have become the common choice for commuters.

Several issues: 'Motorcycle' must be plural 'Motorcycles' to agree with the plural verb 'are' (subject-verb agreement). The phrase 'on BC lows' appears to be incorrect word choice; likely intended 'on busy roads' or 'on low-cost roads' — here 'busy roads' or 'roads' fits. 'commissioner' is incorrect; context requires 'commuters' (people who travel daily). Suggestion: use plural nouns to match verbs, choose correct common nouns ('roads', 'commuters'), and proofread for typos.