自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural by correcting small grammar errors, using a clear topic sentence, and adding one specific supporting detail. Keep it concise (no more than 4–5 sentences). Use linking words (for example, “and” or “so”) to connect ideas. Also give a brief time reference correctly (e.g., “when I was five”).

範例: Yes. My parents bought me a blue bicycle with training wheels when I was five, and I learned to ride it in the park near our house. I practiced there every weekend, so I became comfortable riding on my own after a few months.

建議: Make the answer more coherent and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words (e.g., “uh”), and give one or two specific reasons or examples (such as commuting, affordability, or cycling culture). Use linking words like “because” and “for example” to structure your points. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel short distances. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or market, and local manufacturers offer a wide range of models to suit different needs.

× Yes, I had one that my parents bought me when I was in five.

✓ Yes, I had one that my parents bought me when I was five.

Use 'when I was five' not 'when I was in five'. The preposition 'in' is not used with ages in English; ages take the structure 'when I was + age'. Suggestion: say 'when I was five' or 'at five years old.'

× It was a blue bicycle with training wheels and I learned to ride it in the park near our house every weekend.

✓ It was a blue bicycle with training wheels, and I learned to ride it in the park near our house every weekend.

The original sentence is mostly correct but needs a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' joining two independent clauses for clarity. Suggestion: add punctuation to separate clauses: use a comma before 'and'.

× Yes, because in every house we can see a bike and a bicycle, which basically rides in the same category and uh, every person and in every house, every, every family in our country needs a bike.

✓ Yes, because in every house we can see a bike or a bicycle, which basically falls into the same category, and every person and every family in our country needs a bike.

Problems: 'in every house' is acceptable but repetitive phrases and conjunctions are awkward; 'and a bicycle' then 'which basically rides' — 'ride' is incorrect here; use 'falls into the same category'. Also unnecessary repetition of 'every' and 'in every house'. 'Or' is more natural than 'and' when presenting alternatives. Suggestion: simplify to 'in every house we can see a bike or a bicycle' and replace 'rides in the same category' with 'falls into the same category.' Remove redundant words.

× So yes, bikes are very popular and there are many brands in of bikes in our country, which helps us a lot.

✓ So yes, bikes are very popular and there are many brands of bikes in our country, which helps us a lot.

The phrase 'brands in of bikes' contains an extra preposition 'in'. The correct prepositional phrase is 'brands of bikes' or 'brands of bicycles'. Suggestion: remove the extra preposition: 'brands of bikes in our country.'