自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Correct grammar (use past tense and natural phrasing) and avoid vague phrases like "what they thought."

範例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents thought it was too dangerous for me at that age, so they didn't allow me to ride one. As a result, I learned to walk and use public transport instead.

建議: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to add details. Use correct plural forms and avoid repetition. Provide one or two specific examples (types of bikes, typical riders, or reasons for popularity).

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people ride commuter models such as the CD 70 because they are affordable and fuel-efficient. In addition, bikes are common on narrow streets and are often used by students and delivery workers.

× I did not have a bike when I was a child because my parents did not allow me to ride what they thought.

✓ I did not have a bike when I was a child because my parents did not allow me to ride what they thought was safe.

The original sentence is confusing and incomplete because the clause 'what they thought' lacks an object and disrupts meaning. This is a sentence structure and past tense meaning problem. Adding 'was safe' completes the comparative idea and keeps past tense consistent. Suggestion: include the adjective or clause that completes 'what they thought' (for example, 'what they thought was safe' or 'what they thought was suitable').

× It was too dangerous for me at that age.

✓ It was too dangerous for me at that age.

This sentence is grammatically correct and matches the past tense context, so no change is needed. Keep as is.

× Yeah bikes are popular in my country in every street or any road through many many peoples rides bikes just like normal bikes CD 70 unique and there are a huge market of peoples who ride.

✓ Yes, bicycles are popular in my country: many people ride them on every street and road. Ordinary bikes and models like the CD 70 are common, and there is a huge market for riders.

This long original sentence contains multiple issues: incorrect word choice ('peoples' should be 'people'), punctuation and sentence boundaries, singular/plural mismatches, and unclear phrasing. Corrections: replace informal 'Yeah' with 'Yes', use 'bicycles' for clarity, change 'peoples' to 'people', split into shorter sentences, and rephrase 'normal bikes CD 70 unique' to 'ordinary bikes and models like the CD 70 are common.' These changes fix sentence structure, noun number, and improve clarity while keeping present tense appropriate for a general statement.