自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct, use a clear topic sentence, and add one or two specific details with linking words. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences). Also correct tense and pronoun errors (e.g., “I was usually the one to ride it, and she sat on the back”).

範例: Yes, I did. It was a second-hand bike my cousin gave me, and we rode it together every afternoon after school. I was usually the one riding while she sat on the back, and we often rode to the park about ten minutes from our house.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), and organise supporting details with linking words (for example, also). Provide specific examples and a brief reason or comparison to make your point stronger.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, parents often give small bikes to their children as gifts, and you can also find larger models used for sports such as mountain biking. Because cities have many parks and bike paths, cycling is a common pastime for families and young people.

× Yes I did, it was actually from my cousin and we used to ride the bike every afternoon after school and I usually the one to drive and she's on the passenger seat.

✓ Yes, I did. It was actually from my cousin, and we used to ride the bike every afternoon after school. I was usually the one to drive, and she sat in the passenger seat.

Multiple tense and structure errors: run-on sentence and inconsistent past tense forms. 'I usually the one to drive' lacks a verb and should be 'I was usually the one to drive' (past simple). 'She's on the passenger seat' mixes present with past context; change to past simple 'she sat in the passenger seat'. Also split into shorter sentences and add commas for clarity. Suggestion: keep past narrative consistent by using past simple ('did', 'was', 'used to', 'was', 'sat').

× Uh, yes, our country is really fond of bikes and it is most usually used by kids, uh, given as gifts from their parents.

✓ Uh, yes, our country is really fond of bikes, and they are most often used by kids, given as gifts from their parents.

Wrong agreement and awkward adverb placement. 'It' incorrectly refers to 'bikes' (plural), so use 'they'. 'Most usually' is unnatural; use 'most often'. Maintain present simple for general statements: 'are used'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun agrees in number and choose standard adverb collocation ('most often').

× You can see uh, from smaller bikes to big bikes usually used for sports like mountain bikes.

✓ You can see, from smaller bikes to big bikes, which are usually used for sports like mountain biking.

Missing relative clause and wrong noun choice. The original lacks a connector describing the big bikes; add 'which are' to link and use 'mountain biking' (activity) or 'mountain bikes' as plural noun consistently. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use a relative clause to describe items and prefer 'mountain biking' when referring to the sport or 'mountain bikes' when referring to the bikes themselves.