新闻— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简洁明了地表达兴趣，并具体说明喜欢哪类新闻，避免重复和不连贯。

範例: Yes, I am interested in news, especially political news, because it helps me understand what is happening in our government and how policies affect my daily life.

建議: 回答中语法和词汇使用不准确，建议使用正确的句型表达获取新闻的方式，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: I usually find news by reading online articles and searching for the latest topics on social media. I also follow some news channels that recommend updated information.

建議: 回答表达了观点，但存在语法错误和用词不当，建议用更准确的词汇和句式表达对记者职业的兴趣和原因。

範例: Yes, absolutely. I want to be a journalist because it is an exciting job. I can travel around the world to discover beautiful natural scenery, capture moments, and share them with others. It is a meaningful profession.

建議: 回答不够清晰，语法和表达有误，建议直接回答是否阅读新闻，并具体说明关注的新闻内容和原因。

範例: Yes, I have read the news this morning. I have been following updates about Australia's working holiday visa because I am interested in applying for it. I check the news almost every day to see if there are any changes.

建議: 回答中表达不够流畅，建议用更清晰的句子说明与朋友讨论新闻的频率和内容，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

範例: Yes, we often talk about news related to public events or celebrations. Since I work in international sales, we also discuss government policies between countries to stay informed.

× I can obtain a lot of knowledge there IK specially the politic news.

✓ I can obtain a lot of knowledge there, especially the political news.

这里“politic news”中的“politic”应为形容词“political”，且“news”是不可数名词，不需要复数形式。

× I know what's happening our government and what happened between.

✓ I know what's happening in our government and what happened between.

动词短语“happening”后应接介词“in”表示“在……中发生”。

× Our cities and and there's a government there, so I know this.

✓ Our cities and there's a government there, so I know this.

句中重复了“and”，应删除多余的“and”。

× Is there any latest their policy related to my life?

✓ Is there any latest policy related to my life?

“their”在此处使用不当，应去掉，直接用“latest policy”。

× Are usually by reading online news or I'd searches summer topics related true or newest Lowe's on social medium and also I followed the some channel so sometimes I recommend me some updated news.

✓ I usually read online news or search some topics related to true or newest news on social media, and also I follow some channels, so sometimes they recommend some updated news to me.

句子中“Are usually”应为“I usually”，“I'd searches”应为“I search”，“related true or newest Lowe's”表达不清，应改为“related to true or newest news”，“social medium”应为“social media”，“I followed the some channel”应为“I follow some channels”，“I recommend me”应为“they recommend to me”。

× Yes, absolutely. I want you be originalist.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I want to be a journalist.

“I want you be originalist”语法错误，应为“I want to be a journalist”。

× I think it's a very fun job.

✓ I think it's a very interesting job.

“fun”通常用作名词或非正式形容词，正式表达应使用“interesting job”。

× I can travel around the world to find some beauties for some natural scenery, Aerotek moments to capture them and later published them that more people know that place.

✓ I can travel around the world to find some beautiful natural scenery, artistic moments to capture them and later publish them so that more people know that place.

“beauties for some natural scenery”表达不当，应为“beautiful natural scenery”；“Aerotek moments”应为“artistic moments”；“published”应为动词原形“publish”；“that more people know”应为“so that more people know”。

× Yes, recently I'm focused on there. Up working holiday waste of Australia so it's our news for people applying for the visa.

✓ Yes, recently I've been focusing on the working holiday visa of Australia, so it's news for people applying for the visa.

“I'm focused on there”时态和表达不当，应为现在完成进行时“I've been focusing on”；“Up working holiday waste”应为“working holiday visa”。

× So I check out almost everyday to say if it's updated or opened.

✓ So I check it almost every day to see if it's updated or open.

“check out”后应加宾语“it”；“everyday”应为副词“every day”；“to say”应为“to see”；“opened”应为形容词“open”。

× Yes, we often talk about the news of something related to choose a celebrating or something related to public, especially my work related to international sales.

✓ Yes, we often talk about news related to choosing a celebration or something related to the public, especially my work related to international sales.

“news of something related to choose a celebrating”表达不当，应为“news related to choosing a celebration”；“related to public”应为“related to the public”。

× So we need to pay attention to some the government policy between countries or through the relay.

✓ So we need to pay attention to some government policies between countries or through the relay.

“some the government policy”中“the”多余，应去掉；“policy”应为复数“policies”以匹配“some”；“through the relay”表达不清，建议根据上下文调整。