新闻— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Avoid referring to yourself in the third person ('He is'). Also, try to be more concise and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I am quite interested in the news because it helps me stay informed about global events. For example, I often follow topics related to education, politics, and technology, which provide me with reliable information to discuss with others.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains repetition and grammatical mistakes. Try to answer directly and clearly, mentioning specific platforms you use to find news. Avoid unnecessary repetition and incomplete sentences.

範例: I usually find news through various platforms like social media, television, newspapers, and the Internet. These sources help me stay updated with the latest information.

建議: Your answer is clear but contains some repetition and minor grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating phrases and use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

範例: No, I wouldn't like to be a journalist because it is a very challenging job. Instead, I would prefer to work as a nurse or in the healthcare industry.

建議: Your answer is too long and contains filler words and grammatical errors. Try to be more concise and avoid hesitation sounds. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I read the news every morning with a cup of tea. This helps me stay aware of current events, especially in politics and technology.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes and repetitions. Try to express your opinion clearly and use linking words to explain your reasons.

範例: No, I don't often talk about the news with my friends because it can be stressful. Instead, I prefer to discuss more fun topics with them.

× I am quite interested in the news because it helped me to stay informed about what is happening around the world.

✓ I am quite interested in the news because it helps me to stay informed about what is happening around the world.

The sentence incorrectly uses the past tense 'helped' when referring to a current and ongoing interest. The present tense 'helps' is appropriate here to indicate a habitual action or general truth.

× which gives me a reliable information to discuss with others.

✓ which gives me reliable information to discuss with others.

The word 'information' is an uncountable noun and should not be preceded by the article 'a'. Removing 'a' corrects the quantifier usage.

× So def.

✓ So definitely.

The phrase 'So def.' is incomplete and unclear. Expanding 'def.' to 'definitely' completes the thought and improves clarity.

× IPhone news is on different platforms such as social media, television, newspaper, Internet.

✓ I find news on different platforms such as social media, television, newspapers, and the Internet.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and verb for the action of finding news. Adding 'I find' clarifies the sentence structure. Also, 'newspaper' should be plural 'newspapers' to match the list, and 'Internet' should be preceded by 'the'.

× So where I can where I can get the new update news and as well as whenever I need to listen than you.

✓ So I can get the latest news updates, and whenever I need to listen, I do so.

The original sentence has repeated phrases and incorrect prepositions. Rephrasing improves clarity and corrects prepositional usage.

× Journalist is a very tough job.

✓ Being a journalist is a very tough job.

'Journalist' is a singular noun referring to a person, but the sentence intends to refer to the profession. Using 'Being a journalist' correctly expresses this.

× It has, it is very challenging job.

✓ It is a very challenging job.

The phrase 'It has' is unnecessary and incorrect here. Also, 'very challenging job' requires the indefinite article 'a' before 'very challenging job'.

× I rather choose to choose to work as a nurse or in the healthcare industry.

✓ I would rather choose to work as a nurse or in the healthcare industry.

The modal verb 'would' is needed to express preference correctly. Also, 'choose to choose' is repetitive; removing the extra 'choose' corrects the sentence.

× Not only today, uh, I'm, uh, I prefer to read the news is read the news every morning with a cup of tea so that I, I will be aware of the day and what's happening around the world so I can get the information regarding politics or technology.

✓ Not only today, I prefer to read the news every morning with a cup of tea so that I am aware of the day and what's happening around the world, so I can get information regarding politics or technology.

The phrase 'is read the news' is incorrect and redundant. Also, 'will be aware' should be 'am aware' to match the habitual action. Removing unnecessary words improves clarity.

× No, I don't think so. I often talk with my friends about the news is because it it's always stressful room and whenever I hey listen or talk or talk about the news is but I rather I rather talk about the like fun.

✓ No, I don't think so. I often avoid talking with my friends about the news because it is always stressful, and whenever I listen or talk about the news, I prefer to talk about something fun instead.

The original sentence has pronoun misuse and unclear phrasing. Replacing 'talk with my friends about the news is because it it's always stressful room' with a clearer structure and correcting pronouns improves comprehension.