新闻— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. For example, avoid phrases like 'completely interested' and use 'very interested' instead. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'one of the easiest way' should be 'one of the easiest ways'.

範例: Yes, I am very interested in news because it is one of the easiest ways to learn about the world we live in.

建議: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and clearer sentence structures. Avoid redundancy and improve vocabulary by saying 'I usually watch news videos on YouTube on my mobile phone. Besides that, I also watch television and listen to FM radio for the latest news.'

範例: I usually watch news videos on YouTube on my mobile phone. Besides that, I also watch television and listen to FM radio for the latest news.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas logically and use simpler sentences. For example, say 'Yes, I wanted to be a journalist after finishing secondary school. I tried to join journalism courses and contacted several people, but my parents did not support me. So, I changed my mind and studied physics at university instead.'

範例: Yes, I wanted to be a journalist after finishing secondary school. I tried to join journalism courses and contacted several people, but my parents did not support me. So, I changed my mind and studied physics at university instead.

建議: Your answer does not respond to the question. Make sure to answer directly with a clear 'Yes' or 'No' and add supporting details. For example, 'Yes, I read the news this morning on my phone. I found some interesting articles about local events.'

範例: Yes, I read the news this morning on my phone. I found some interesting articles about local events.

建議: Try to make your answer more fluent and avoid hesitation sounds like 'umm'. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar, for example, 'Yes, if my friends feel comfortable, I like to share top news and discuss it with them. Especially when the news is important and related to our hometown, many friends get involved in the discussion.'

範例: Yes, if my friends feel comfortable, I like to share top news and discuss it with them. Especially when the news is important and related to our hometown, many friends get involved in the discussion.

× I am completely interested in news because it's one of the easiest way to know more about our world that we are living.

✓ I am completely interested in news because it's one of the easiest ways to know more about the world we are living in.

The word 'way' should be plural 'ways' because it refers to one among multiple ways. Also, 'our world that we are living' is awkward; 'the world we are living in' is more natural and grammatically correct.

× I am completely interested in news because it's one of the easiest way to know more about our world that we are living.

✓ I am completely interested in news because it's one of the easiest ways to know more about the world we are living in.

The phrase 'the world that we are living' requires the preposition 'in' at the end to be correct: 'the world we are living in'.

× The first main 1 is a mobile phone using YouTube videos.

✓ The first main one is using a mobile phone to watch YouTube videos.

The phrase 'mobile phone using YouTube videos' is incorrect. It should be 'using a mobile phone to watch YouTube videos'. Also, '1' should be spelled out as 'one'.

× Firstly I prefer my YouTube channels for getting videos and apart from that there is television uses and FM radios are all other main sources for providing us the top news of the day.

✓ Firstly, I prefer my YouTube channels for getting videos, and apart from that, television and FM radios are other main sources providing us with the top news of the day.

The phrase 'television uses' is incorrect; it should be 'television'. Also, 'providing us the top news' requires the preposition 'with' after 'providing us'.

× I tried it to join in a journalist course and tried several times connected with several peoples for joining in a general course.

✓ I tried to join a journalism course and tried several times to connect with several people to join a general course.

The phrase 'join in a journalist course' should be 'join a journalism course'. 'Connected with several peoples' is incorrect; it should be 'connect with several people'. Also, 'joining in a general course' should be 'to join a general course'.

× I tried it to join in a journalist course and tried several times connected with several peoples for joining in a general course.

✓ I tried to join a journalism course and tried several times to connect with several people to join a general course.

The word 'peoples' is incorrect here; the correct plural form is 'people' when referring to persons.

× I tried it to join in a journalist course and tried several times connected with several peoples for joining in a general course.

✓ I tried to join a journalism course and tried several times to connect with several people to join a general course.

The preposition 'in' after 'join' is unnecessary; 'join a course' is correct.

× And because of my pushing from my parents, I deviated from my decision of being a journalist and then I took a graduation physics system in subject of my graduation.

✓ Because of pressure from my parents, I deviated from my decision to become a journalist and then I pursued a physics degree for my graduation.

'My pushing from my parents' is incorrect; 'pressure from my parents' is correct. 'Decision of being a journalist' should be 'decision to become a journalist'. 'Took a graduation physics system in subject of my graduation' is awkward; 'pursued a physics degree for my graduation' is clearer.

× Is there at the news this morning?

✓ Was there any news this morning?

The sentence 'Is there at the news this morning?' is incorrect. The correct form is 'Was there any news this morning?' to ask about past news.

× Yes, if the friends are also umm feel comfortable, I like to share the top news and be engaged in talks related to that news.

✓ Yes, if my friends also feel comfortable, I like to share the top news and engage in talks related to that news.

'The friends' should be 'my friends' to specify possession. Also, 'are also umm feel comfortable' is incorrect; it should be 'also feel comfortable'. 'Be engaged' should be 'engage' to match the subject.

× Usually if it's a important news related to our native place, most of our friends are highly engaged.

✓ Usually, if it's important news related to our native place, most of our friends are highly engaged.

'A important news' is incorrect because 'news' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. Also, 'important' starts with a vowel sound, so 'an' would be used if countable, but here no article is needed.

× Usually engaged with me for discussing about news.

✓ They usually engage with me to discuss the news.

The original sentence lacks a subject and proper verb form. 'Engaged with me for discussing about news' is incorrect; it should be 'They usually engage with me to discuss the news'.