新闻— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答はやや冗長で、文法的な誤りもあります。より自然で効果的な表現にするために、簡潔にし、文法を正しく使うことを意識しましょう。例えば、"I am interested in news because it helps me stay informed, especially about global events."のように。

範例: Yes, I am interested in news because it helps me stay informed about what is happening around the world, especially global events.

建議: 回答が不自然で繰り返しがあり、文法も不正確です。より自然な表現にし、具体的に説明しましょう。例えば、"I usually check the news twice a day on my smartphone using the internet."のように。

範例: I usually check the news twice a day on my smartphone using the internet.

建議: 理由の説明が不明瞭で文法的にも誤りがあります。より明確で自然な理由を述べ、文法を正しく使いましょう。例えば、"No, I wouldn't like to be a journalist because it requires learning many languages and a lot of vocabulary."のように。

範例: No, I wouldn't like to be a journalist because it requires learning many languages and a lot of vocabulary.

建議: 文法の誤りが多く、内容も不明瞭です。正しい時制と語順を使い、具体的に説明しましょう。例えば、"Yes, I read some domestic news in the newspaper this morning. The article was about our Prime Minister visiting Korea."のように。

範例: Yes, I read some domestic news in the newspaper this morning. The article was about our Prime Minister visiting Korea.

建議: 表現が不自然で文法的な誤りがあります。より自然で明確な表現にしましょう。例えば、"Yes, sometimes we talk about the news, but it depends on the day."のように。

範例: Yes, sometimes we talk about the news, but it depends on the day.

× Yes, I am interested in reading news or hearing news because it's very important to live with those news and especially.

✓ Yes, I am interested in reading news or hearing news because it's very important to live with that news, especially.

The phrase 'live with those news' is incorrect because 'news' is an uncountable noun and should be treated as singular. Therefore, 'those' should be replaced with 'that'. Also, the sentence structure is improved by moving 'especially' to the end for clarity.

× Global news is very important.

✓ Global news is very important.

No correction needed. 'News' is an uncountable noun and correctly used in singular form here.

× I find several news twice a day or so and I I always use my my smartphone with Internet.

✓ I find several pieces of news twice a day or so and I always use my smartphone with the Internet.

'News' is an uncountable noun and cannot be pluralized as 'several news'. The correct quantifier is 'several pieces of news'. Also, 'my my' is a repetition error and 'Internet' should be preceded by 'the'.

× No, I wouldn't like to be a journalist because. The people who journal something, they have to learn more languages and several words.

✓ No, I wouldn't like to be a journalist because the people who journal something have to learn more languages and many words.

The sentence has a period incorrectly placed after 'because'. Also, 'several words' is acceptable but 'many words' is more natural here. The phrase 'journal something' is awkward; however, since it is not in the problem list, it is left as is.

× Yes, I have read some domestic news on the new newspaper. My our Prime Minister go to went to Korea and this article.

✓ Yes, I have read some domestic news in the newspaper. Our Prime Minister went to Korea, and this is in the article.

'On the new newspaper' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in the newspaper'. 'My our' is a repetition error; 'our' is correct. 'Go to went to' is a tense error; 'went' is the correct past tense. The sentence is fragmented and needs to be connected properly.

× Yes, sometimes we talk about some news each other, but. It depends on the day we talk.

✓ Yes, sometimes we talk about some news with each other, but it depends on the day we talk.

The phrase 'talk about some news each other' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'talk about some news with each other'. Also, the period after 'but' is incorrect and should be removed to connect the sentence properly.