新闻— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は話題に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が目立ちます。例えば、「which is big football club in England」は「which is a big football club in England」とすべきです。また、「this crap」は不適切な表現で、意味が伝わりにくいです。より自然で正確な表現を心がけ、冗長な部分を避けてください。

範例: Yes, I am interested in news, especially sports news, because I am a big fan of Manchester United, which is a famous football club in England. I often check updates about their matches and discuss them with my friends.

建議: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法的に不自然な部分があります。例えば、「I find from my smartphone」は「I get news from my smartphone」や「I usually check news on my smartphone」と言い換えた方が自然です。また、「football rounds」より「football matches」や「football games」の方が適切です。接続詞を使って文をつなげるとより効果的です。

範例: I usually get news from my smartphone, especially through apps like Yahoo News and Google News. For example, I often check these apps to follow the latest football matches.

建議: 回答は否定的な意見を述べていますが、文法の誤りや繰り返しがあり、意味が伝わりにくいです。例えば、「it looks hard to work also」は不自然で、「it seems to be a hard job」などに修正が必要です。また、「a lot of desk works」は「a lot of desk work」と単数形にすべきです。より明確で簡潔な表現を心がけてください。

範例: No, I wouldn't like to be a journalist because it seems to be a difficult job that requires a lot of concentration and desk work.

建議: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法ミスや誤った単語の使用があります。例えば、「which which」は繰り返しで誤りですし、「has game」は「had a game」または「played a match」が正しいです。また、「they defeat Amazon」は意味不明で、おそらく相手チーム名の誤りです。正確な情報と文法を使い、具体的に説明してください。

範例: Yes, I read the news this morning because my favorite club, Manchester United, played a match yesterday. Unfortunately, they were defeated by their opponent.

建議: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があります。例えば、「discuss with my friend about football news」は「discuss football news with my friend」が自然です。また、「I argued that」は意味が不明瞭で、どのように議論したのか具体的に説明すると良いでしょう。

範例: Yes, I usually discuss football news with my friend because I am a big fan of Manchester United, while he supports Manchester City. We often debate which team is better.

× which is big football club in England

✓ which is a big football club in England

The noun phrase 'big football club' requires the indefinite article 'a' because it is a singular countable noun being mentioned for the first time.

× I check the information about this crap and I often discuss with.

✓ I check the information about this crap and I often discuss it.

The verb 'discuss' requires an object; the pronoun 'it' should be used to indicate what is being discussed.

× I find from my smartphone, especially Yahoo News and Google News.

✓ I get news from my smartphone, especially Yahoo News and Google News.

The verb 'find' is not typically used with 'from' in this context; 'get news from' is more appropriate.

× For example, using them I catch the news about football rounds.

✓ For example, using them I catch the news about football matches.

The phrase 'football rounds' is unclear; 'football matches' is a more natural collocation.

× No, I don't like to be a journalist because it looks hard to work also.

✓ No, I don't like to be a journalist because it seems hard to work as well.

The phrase 'looks hard to work' is incorrect; 'seems hard to work' is more natural. Also, 'also' should be 'as well' at the end of the sentence.

× It it it seems that it's difficult to concentrate and a lot of desk works.

✓ It seems that it's difficult to concentrate and there is a lot of desk work.

'Desk works' is incorrect; 'desk work' is uncountable. Also, 'there is' is needed to indicate existence.

× Yes, I read the news in the morning because yesterday Manchester United, which which is my favorite club has game.

✓ Yes, I read the news in the morning because yesterday Manchester United, which is my favorite club, had a game.

The verb 'has' should be in past tense 'had' to match the past time 'yesterday'. Also, 'which which' is a repetition error.

× However they defeat Amazon.

✓ However, they were defeated by Amazon.

The sentence requires passive voice in past tense to indicate that Manchester United was defeated by Amazon.

× Yes, I usually discuss with my friend about football news because I'm a big fan of Manchester United, while my friend is, uh, fan of Manchester City.

✓ Yes, I usually discuss football news with my friend because I'm a big fan of Manchester United, while my friend is, uh, a fan of Manchester City.

The verb 'discuss' does not require 'with' when followed by the object; 'discuss football news with my friend' is correct. Also, 'a fan' requires the article 'a'.

× I argued that.

✓ I argued that.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct.