分享— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答不够连贯，语法和表达存在较多错误，建议加强句子结构的完整性和逻辑性，避免断句和语法错误。可以尝试用完整句子表达观点，并使用连接词使表达更自然。

範例: Yes, my parents encouraged me to share because they believe it helps me become more positive and better at communicating with others.

建議: 回答内容较为零散，表达不够清晰，建议使用完整句子并合理使用连接词，使回答更连贯。同时，内容应更具体，避免模糊表达。

範例: I usually share stories about what happened at school and discuss interesting topics, such as what girls like, with my friends.

建議: 表达有语法错误且不够流畅，建议使用完整句子并注意时态和冠词的使用。同时，内容可以更具体，说明为什么不愿意分享私人信息。

範例: I prefer not to share my private information with others, even close friends, because I think it is sensitive and I worry it might be shared further.

建議: 回答表达混乱，语法错误较多，建议理清思路，使用完整句子表达观点，并用连接词使内容连贯。内容方面，可以更具体地说明为什么不愿意共享汽车。

範例: I don't think more people will share cars in China because most families already own private cars, and sharing cars might expose personal information, which makes people uncomfortable.

× Yes, sharing your appearance is a good way to express. Your ideas and thoughts? My parent. Did me to become more and more. Positive and. Good at. Communicating with others.

✓ Yes, sharing your appearance is a good way to express your ideas and thoughts. My parents encouraged me to become more and more positive and good at communicating with others.

原句句子结构混乱，断句不合理，导致表达不清晰。应将相关内容合并成完整句子，使语义连贯。建议学习完整句子结构，避免随意断句。

× My parent. Did me to become more and more.

✓ My parents encouraged me to become more and more.

原句中“Did me”用法错误，动词“did”不能直接跟宾语“me”，应使用“encouraged me”表达“鼓励我”。建议学习动词搭配和正确使用宾语。

× My parent.

✓ My parents.

“parent”是单数，表示一个家长，而语境中应指双方父母，故应使用复数“parents”。建议注意单复数形式的使用。

× I usually catch up with my friend about talking, discuss with what happened in the school.

✓ I usually catch up with my friends by talking and discussing what happened at school.

原句中“about talking”和“discuss with”用法不当，正确表达应使用“by talking”和“discussing”，且“in the school”应为“at school”。建议学习常用动词短语和介词搭配。

× I usually catch up with my friend about talking, discuss with what happened in the school.

✓ I usually catch up with my friends by talking and discussing what happened at school.

“friend”应为复数“friends”，因为通常是和多个朋友交流。

× And you know, guys always have some interesting topic to talk. Ann About. What girls and what they like.

✓ And you know, guys always have some interesting topics to talk about, like what girls like.

“topic to talk. Ann About.”表达不正确，应合并为“topics to talk about”，且“what girls and what they like”表达不完整，改为“what girls like”。建议注意介词短语和句子完整性。

× The private information. I don't like share my private information about us to others, even the close friends because I think that's.

✓ Private information. I don't like to share my private information about us with others, even close friends, because I think that's

“share my private information about us to others”中“to others”应为“with others”，且“like share”应为“like to share”。建议学习动词后介词搭配和不定式用法。

× I don't like share my private information about us to others, even the close friends because I think that's.

✓ I don't like to share my private information about us with others, even close friends, because I think that's

“about us to others”中“to”应改为“with”，表示“与别人分享”。

× More sensitive for more sentence for me.

✓ more sensitive and serious for me.

原句“More sensitive for more sentence for me”结构混乱，语义不明，应改为“more sensitive and serious for me”表达“对我来说更敏感和严重”。建议学习正确的句子结构和词汇搭配。

× If somebody gives his others and they'll know this. Information.

✓ If somebody gives it to others and they'll know this information.

“gives his others”表达错误，应为“gives it to others”，即“把它给别人”。建议学习代词和介词的正确搭配。

× In China even everything even family have was in one car nowadays.

✓ In China, even families have one car nowadays.

“family”应为复数“families”，且“have was in one car”语法错误，应简化为“have one car”。建议注意单复数和动词搭配。

× So we have private cars and the cause can include include some private information and sensitive, so we don't share items.

✓ So we have private cars, and the cars can include some private and sensitive information, so we don't share them.

“the cause”应为“the cars”，“include include”重复，应去掉一个，“private information and sensitive”表达不完整，应为“private and sensitive information”，“share items”应为“share them”。建议注意单词拼写和词语搭配。