分享— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 질문에 직접적으로 답하지 않았습니다. 더 구체적이고 명확한 문장으로 부모님이 나눔을 장려했는지 직접적으로 답변하고, 간단한 이유나 예시를 덧붙여 보세요.

範例: Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share with others because they believed it helps build good relationships. For example, they often reminded me to share my toys with my siblings.

建議: 과거 시제와 현재 시제가 혼용되어 혼란을 주고, 문장이 중복되고 명확하지 않습니다. 현재 시제로 일관되게 말하고, 문장을 간결하고 자연스럽게 구성하세요.

範例: I usually share my pencils or snacks with my friends because I think sharing helps us get along better.

建議: 의견은 제시했으나 문장이 불완전하고 반복적이며 명확하지 않습니다. 이유를 명확히 설명하고 문장을 완성하여 자연스럽게 표현하세요.

範例: I prefer not to share my makeup items because they touch my skin, and if others use them, it might cause hygiene problems.

建議: 질문에 대한 답변을 회피하지 말고, 아는 범위 내에서 자신의 의견을 간단히 표현해 보세요. 모르는 부분은 솔직히 말하되, 관련된 생각이나 추측을 덧붙이면 좋습니다.

範例: I'm not very familiar with car sharing, but I think more people might share cars in the future to save money and help the environment.

× I usually shared with friends my pencil or eating something if they want that and I usually I was usually good at borrow something.

✓ I usually share with friends my pencil or eat something if they want that, and I am usually good at borrowing something.

The sentence incorrectly uses the past tense 'shared' and 'was' when describing habitual actions, which should be in the present tense. Also, 'borrow' should be in the gerund form 'borrowing' after 'good at'. Habitual actions require present tense usage.

× I usually I was usually good at borrow something.

✓ I am usually good at borrowing something.

The phrase 'good at borrow' is incorrect because after 'good at' a gerund (-ing form) is required. Therefore, 'borrow' should be changed to 'borrowing'.

× Cheryl is very sharing is good thing for people.

✓ Sharing is a very good thing for people.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'Cheryl' which seems to be a mishearing or typo. The intended meaning is about 'sharing' as a concept, which is a noun here. Also, the sentence structure is incorrect and needs to be corrected for clarity.

× I usually touch in my skin that items so if they touch with my friends or others I I don't I don't want to use them again because some.

✓ I usually put those items on my skin, so if my friends or others touch them, I don't want to use them again because of hygiene reasons.

The phrase 'touch in my skin that items' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'put those items on my skin'. Also, 'touch with my friends' should be 'if my friends or others touch them'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and correct preposition use.

× I don't speak that topic well because I don't know about that, umm, cars.

✓ I don't know much about that topic because I don't know about cars.

The phrase 'I don't speak that topic well' is incorrect; 'speak' is not used with 'topic' in this way. The correct expression is 'I don't know much about that topic'. This corrects the verb usage and improves clarity.