分享— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中时态使用不准确，且句子结构较为混乱。建议注意时态一致性，简洁表达，并避免重复。

範例: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child because I have a younger brother. They always encouraged me to share my toys and snacks with him to help us build a closer relationship.

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议简化句子结构，使用恰当的词汇，并注意语法正确。

範例: I like to share snacks with others because sharing food is an easy way to strengthen relationships. Everyone enjoys food, especially sweet treats.

建議: 表达不清晰且有语法错误，句子不完整。建议明确表达观点，避免重复，并使用连贯的句子。

範例: I think sharing answers to assessments is not suitable because it is considered plagiarism and can harm academic performance, even though it might make relationships closer.

建議: 时态使用不当，句子结构复杂且有语法错误。建议使用正确时态，简洁表达，并注意句子连贯。

範例: Recently, I shared my handmade mooncakes with others because it was the Mid-Autumn Festival. I made chocolate mooncakes myself and gave them to my friends to show I care about them.

建議: 回答开头不相关，语法和表达不准确。建议直接回答问题，使用正确时态和连贯句子。

範例: The first person I would like to share good news with is my close friend from junior high school. She is always supportive and happy for me, and we often celebrate together.

建議: 表达基本清楚，但有语法错误和用词不当。建议注意时态一致性，简化句子结构，使用更准确的词汇。

範例: I usually share important study news with my friends. For example, when exam results are released, I tell them first because we are both interested and it affects our scholarships.

× Yes, my parents always teach me to share because I have a younger brother when I was three years old.

✓ Yes, my parents always taught me to share because I had a younger brother when I was three years old.

这里描述的是过去的事情，应该使用过去时态。动词teach和have应改为过去式taught和had。

× They always tell me to share my toys or my snack with him because they say it can bring us closer.

✓ They always told me to share my toys or my snacks with him because they said it could bring us closer.

前文是过去时态，保持时态一致，动词tell和say应改为过去式told和said。snack应使用复数形式snacks。

× I would like to share snacks with others because I think sharing food is a most is the easiest way to bring a relationship closer because everyone enjoy food especially some sweet food as it.

✓ I would like to share snacks with others because I think sharing food is the easiest way to bring a relationship closer because everyone enjoys food, especially some sweet food like it.

a most是不正确的用法，应去掉most。动词enjoy应加s与主语everyone保持一致。like it更符合表达习惯。

× everyone enjoy food especially some sweet food as it.

✓ everyone enjoys food, especially some sweet food like it.

everyone是单数，动词enjoy应加s变为enjoys。

× I think the solution to an assessment is not suitable for sharing, although when you share this, the relationship is usually more closer than sharing other things, but it is a kind of plagiarism and good for the study performance. And it is.

✓ I think the answers to an assessment are not suitable for sharing. Although sharing them may bring people closer, it is a kind of plagiarism and bad for study performance.

句子结构混乱，需拆分为两句。solution to an assessment应改为answers to an assessment，且主谓一致。more closer错误，应为closer。good for the study performance表达不当，应为bad for study performance。

× Recently I share my handmade mooncake to others because it is a Middleton festival and there are many posts on the social media on how to make mooncakes.

✓ Recently I shared my handmade mooncakes with others because it is the Mid-Autumn Festival and there are many posts on social media about how to make mooncakes.

描述过去发生的事情，动词share应改为过去式shared。Mid-Autumn Festival是固定表达。mooncake应使用复数mooncakes。with others更符合习惯用法。

× So I make a chocolate mooncake myself and share it to my friends because I think it show my care for them and consider it.

✓ So I made a chocolate mooncake myself and shared it with my friends because I think it shows my care for them and consideration.

动词时态应为过去式made和shared。share后应接with而非to。动词show应加s与主语it一致。consider it表达不清，改为consideration更合适。

× She is always helpful and willing to praise me if I have a good news.

✓ She is always helpful and willing to praise me if I have good news.

news是不可数名词，不加冠词a。

× When I share good news with her, she always feel happy and we would have some parties for it.

✓ When I share good news with her, she always feels happy and we would have some parties for it.

she是第三人称单数，动词feel应加s变为feels。

× I share some important study news with my friends.

✓ I share some important study-related news with my friends.

study news表达不完整，通常用study-related news更准确。

× For instance, when the score of a class is released, I would tell my friends in the first time because we are both interested in it and as this is connected to our scholarship.

✓ For instance, when the score of a class is released, I would tell my friends first because we are both interested in it and because this is connected to our scholarship.

in the first time用法错误，应为first。连接词as用法不当，改为because更清晰。