分享— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and fluent by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and 'umm'. Also, use correct grammar and sentence structure, for example, say 'my parents taught me to share things' instead of 'had taught me to share the things'. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with a specific example.

範例: Yes, definitely. My parents taught me to share from a young age. For instance, if a friend forgot to bring snacks, I would always share mine with her to help.

建議: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more precise linking words and correcting minor grammar errors. For example, say 'interesting conversations' instead of 'interest conversation' and 'new perspectives' instead of 'perspective'. Also, try to avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas.

範例: I enjoy sharing knowledge and experiences, especially about books and travel, because it helps me connect with others. For example, I often recommend good books to friends, which leads to interesting conversations about new ideas and perspectives.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use correct sentence structure. For example, say 'I think personal belongings or things we value most are not suitable for sharing because it may affect our needs and show a lack of self-respect.'

範例: I think personal items or things we value the most are not suitable for sharing because it might affect our own needs and could feel disrespectful to ourselves.

建議: Try to improve your grammar and sentence clarity. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent. For example, say 'I have a lot to share, especially with my friends since we haven't met for a long time. Recently, I learned how to do makeup, and I want to do my friend's makeup when we meet.'

範例: Yes, I have a lot to share, especially with my friends because we haven't met for a long time. Recently, I learned how to do makeup, and I want to do my friend's makeup when we meet.

建議: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure. For example, say 'She listens to everything I say and would be more excited to hear my good news than anyone else.'

範例: I'd say my best friend, Grisma. I would share good news with her because she listens to everything I say and gets more excited than anyone else.

建議: Try to avoid filler words and be more specific. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, say 'It depends on the situation. Sometimes, I share simple news from social media, but mostly we talk about the weather when we meet.'

範例: It depends on the situation. Sometimes, I share simple news from social media, but mostly we talk about the weather when we meet.

× Growing up, my parents had taught me to share the things.

✓ Growing up, my parents taught me to share things.

The past perfect tense 'had taught' is unnecessary here because the action is simply a past event without a reference to another past event. Also, 'the things' is incorrect; 'things' without 'the' is appropriate here.

× if someone has not anything

✓ if someone does not have anything

The phrase 'has not anything' is incorrect in standard English. The correct form is 'does not have anything' to express negation properly.

× when my a friend miss to bring her snacks I share with her.

✓ when my friend misses to bring her snacks, I share with her.

The article 'my a friend' is incorrect; it should be 'my friend'. Also, 'miss' should be 'misses' to agree with the singular subject 'friend'. The infinitive 'to bring' is incorrect here; it should be 'bringing' or 'to bring' depending on structure, but 'misses to bring' is not correct; better is 'misses bringing' or 'forgets to bring'.

× Sharing these things helps me connect with people and often sparks interest conversation.

✓ Sharing these things helps me connect with people and often sparks interesting conversation.

The adjective 'interest' is incorrect here; it should be 'interesting' to modify the noun 'conversation' properly.

× For example, I like recommending good books to friends because it allows us to discuss news, new ideas, and perspective.

✓ For example, I like recommending good books to friends because it allows us to discuss news, new ideas, and perspectives.

The noun 'perspective' should be plural 'perspectives' to match the plural nouns 'news' and 'new ideas' in the list.

× I believe the ones which we like the most are not suitable for sharing because it reaches it sabotages your needs and it feels like you are not respecting yourself.

✓ I believe the ones which we like the most are not suitable for sharing because it breaches or sabotages your needs and it feels like you are not respecting yourself.

The phrase 'it reaches it sabotages' is incorrect and unclear. Possibly 'breaches or sabotages' is intended. Also, 'yourself' is correct here as a reflexive pronoun referring back to 'you'.

× Yes I have lot to share specially with my friends as we havenonet met for a long time.

✓ Yes, I have a lot to share, especially with my friends as we have not met for a long time.

The phrase 'have lot' is incorrect; it should be 'have a lot'. Also, 'specially' should be 'especially'. 'havenonet' is a typo and should be 'have not'.

× The thing I want to share with her most is I learned makeup and I want to do her makeup when we meet.

✓ The thing I want to share with her most is that I learned makeup and I want to do her makeup when we meet.

The sentence is missing the conjunction 'that' to connect the clauses properly. Also, 'do her makeup' is acceptable but 'apply her makeup' is more formal.

× So yes these are the thing.

✓ So yes, these are the things.

'thing' should be plural 'things' to agree with 'these'.

× she listened, uh, my each and everything and she would be more excited to hear my good news than any other people.

✓ she listens to my every word and she would be more excited to hear my good news than anyone else.

The verb 'listened' should be present tense 'listens' to match the context. The phrase 'my each and everything' is incorrect; 'my every word' or 'everything I say' is better. 'any other people' should be 'anyone else'.

× sometimes I would like to share the news from the social media platforms like the simple ones.

✓ sometimes I would like to share news from social media platforms, like simple ones.

The article 'the' before 'news' and 'social media platforms' is unnecessary. Also, 'the simple ones' is vague; 'simple ones' without 'the' is better.

× Uh, mostly we talk about weather because we mostly meet.

✓ Uh, mostly we talk about the weather because we meet often.

'weather' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to the general topic. 'mostly meet' is awkward; 'meet often' is clearer.