分享— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Votre réponse est claire et naturelle, mais vous pouvez améliorer la fluidité en utilisant des mots de liaison pour connecter vos idées et éviter la répétition de "sharing". Essayez d'ajouter des détails spécifiques pour enrichir votre réponse.

範例: Yes, my parents taught me to share from a young age because they believed it fosters kindness and strengthens bonds. For instance, they encouraged me to share toys and snacks with my siblings and friends, which always made our time together more enjoyable.

建議: Votre réponse est un peu courte et contient une phrase incomplète. En français algérien, je vous conseille d'éviter les phrases inachevées et d'utiliser des mots de liaison pour rendre votre discours plus cohérent.

範例: I enjoy sharing food with my friends and family because it brings us closer. Additionally, I often lend books and clothes, which shows mutual trust and helps build stronger relationships.

建議: Votre réponse manque de clarté et contient des erreurs grammaticales. En français algérien, je vous suggère de structurer votre réponse avec une phrase principale claire suivie d'explications précises, et d'éviter les répétitions inutiles.

範例: I believe personal devices like phones and computers are not suitable for sharing because others might accidentally delete important files or information that belong to you.

建議: Votre réponse est bonne mais pourrait être améliorée en ajoutant des mots de liaison pour mieux connecter vos idées et en précisant pourquoi le livre est utile. En français algérien, cela rendra votre discours plus fluide et convaincant.

範例: Yes, I recently finished reading a book about love and relationships, which I found very insightful. I can't wait to discuss it with my friends because I believe it will offer them valuable perspectives and spark interesting conversations.

建議: Votre réponse contient des erreurs grammaticales et pourrait être plus naturelle. En français algérien, je vous conseille de reformuler pour plus de clarté et d'utiliser des expressions plus idiomatiques.

範例: I would share good news first with my little sister because she has always been there for me and supported me in everything. I want her to be the first to know about the positive changes in my life.

建議: Votre réponse est un peu confuse et contient des erreurs grammaticales. En français algérien, je vous recommande de structurer votre réponse avec des phrases complètes et d'utiliser des prépositions correctes pour améliorer la clarté.

範例: I usually share personal news with my friends, such as getting a new job or making travel plans. We also discuss family events and other topics that interest us.

× Sharing personal items shows trust and.

✓ Sharing personal items shows trust and helps to build strong relationships.

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'and', which is a conjunction that requires a following clause. The sentence is incomplete and needs a verb phrase after 'and' to complete the thought. Adding 'helps to build strong relationships' completes the sentence logically and grammatically.

× I often lend books and clothes with them too.

✓ I often lend books and clothes to them too.

The verb 'lend' is typically followed by the preposition 'to' when indicating the person receiving the item. Using 'with' is incorrect in this context. Therefore, 'lend books and clothes to them' is the correct form.

× I think the things that are not suitable to sharing is the phone or computer, because I think if you share these two things to others, they will maybe delete some important things that you really need or maybe yours.

✓ I think the things that are not suitable for sharing are the phone or computer, because I think if you share these two things with others, they might delete some important things that you really need or that belong to you.

There are multiple issues: 'suitable to sharing' should be 'suitable for sharing' (preposition error), 'is' should be 'are' to agree with plural subject 'things' (singular/plural issue), 'share these two things to others' should be 'share these two things with others' (preposition error), and 'maybe' is better replaced with 'might' for modal verb usage. Also, 'maybe yours' is unclear and corrected to 'that belong to you' for clarity.

× I think the things that are not suitable to sharing is the phone or computer, because I think if you share these two things to others, they will maybe delete some important things that you really need or maybe yours.

✓ I think the things that are not suitable for sharing are the phone or computer, because I think if you share these two things with others, they might delete some important things that you really need or that belong to you.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used with 'suitable' and 'share'. The correct prepositions are 'suitable for sharing' and 'share with others'. This correction improves grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× I think the things that are not suitable to sharing is the phone or computer, because I think if you share these two things to others, they will maybe delete some important things that you really need or maybe yours.

✓ I think the things that are not suitable for sharing are the phone or computer, because I think if you share these two things with others, they might delete some important things that you really need or that belong to you.

The phrase 'will maybe delete' is awkward. The modal verb 'might' is more appropriate to express possibility. Therefore, 'they might delete' is the correct usage.

× I think the things that are not suitable to sharing is the phone or computer, because I think if you share these two things to others, they will maybe delete some important things that you really need or maybe yours.

✓ I think the things that are not suitable for sharing are the phone or computer, because I think if you share these two things with others, they might delete some important things that you really need or that belong to you.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used with 'share'. The correct preposition is 'with' when indicating the person receiving the shared items.

× Oh, that would be my little sister because she has been always for me and supported me in everything I do.

✓ Oh, that would be my little sister because she has always been there for me and supported me in everything I do.

The phrase 'she has been always for me' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'she has always been there for me'. The adverb 'always' should come before the verb 'been', and the phrase 'been there for me' is the idiomatic expression meaning support.

× I want her to be the first who will know my new positive things in my life.

✓ I want her to be the first person who knows about the new positive things in my life.

The phrase 'the first who will know' is awkward. It is better to say 'the first person who knows about'. Also, 'my new positive things' is vague; adding 'about' clarifies that she will be informed. The verb 'knows' agrees with 'who' referring to 'person' (third person singular).

× I share personal news like having a job or have travel plans and also we talk about family events and things happening that we are interested about.

✓ I share personal news like having a job or having travel plans, and we also talk about family events and things happening that we are interested in.

The phrase 'interested about' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'interested in'. Also, parallel structure requires 'having travel plans' to match 'having a job'. Adding commas improves readability.