分享— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is understandable but contains some grammatical errors and filler words like 'uh'. Try to avoid fillers and use correct verb forms. Also, make your sentences more concise and natural. For example, instead of 'my parents emphasize on that', say 'my parents emphasized sharing'.

範例: Yes, my parents emphasized sharing when I was a child. Since I am an only child, I often played with my cousins, so they encouraged me to be generous and share my toys with them.

建議: Your answer has some unclear expressions and grammar mistakes. Avoid filler words and clarify your ideas. For example, instead of 'things that would uh, cost cheap', say 'things that are inexpensive'. Also, explain why you hesitate to share gifted items more clearly.

範例: I like to share inexpensive things like toys and books. However, I usually don't share gifts I received because they are special to me and I prefer to keep them.

建議: Your answer is confusing and has grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas clearly and use correct sentence structures. For example, say 'Expensive items and personal gifts are not suitable for sharing because they are valuable to me.'

範例: I think expensive items and personal gifts are not suitable for sharing because they are valuable and important to me.

建議: Your answer is good but contains some awkward phrases like 'a very book on person'. Try to use natural expressions and avoid repetition. For example, say 'She loves reading books' instead. Also, combine sentences to be more concise.

範例: Yes, recently I shared some books with my friend Aditi because she loves reading. It made me happy to see her enjoy them.

建議: Your answer is clear but a bit repetitive and long. Try to avoid repeating words like 'instantly' and organize your ideas smoothly. Use linking words to improve coherence.

範例: I would first share good news with my parents because I love them and want to make them proud. After that, I would tell my extended family and my boyfriend.

建議: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and awkward phrases. For example, 'achievements like economically' is unclear. Try to use clearer expressions and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: I usually share my achievements, such as financial success or gifts from my family, with my friends. They always encourage me, which makes me feel loved and supported.

× Yes, my parents emphasize on that, uh, I am a single child, so I used to play with my cousins.

✓ Yes, my parents emphasized that, uh, I am a single child, so I used to play with my cousins.

The verb 'emphasize' should be in the past tense 'emphasized' to match the past context indicated by 'used to play'. The phrase 'emphasize on' is incorrect; 'emphasize' does not require the preposition 'on'.

× Yes, my parents emphasize on that, uh, I am a single child, so I used to play with my cousins.

✓ Yes, my parents emphasized that, uh, I am a single child, so I used to play with my cousins.

The verb 'emphasize' should not be followed by the preposition 'on'. The correct usage is 'emphasize that' or 'emphasize something'.

× So my parents thought that I should be more generous and polite to them and I should share my toys and other things, uh, with them.

✓ So my parents thought that I should be more generous and polite to them and that I should share my toys and other things, uh, with them.

The sentence needs 'that' before the second clause to maintain parallel structure and clarity in the sentence.

× I think I would share materialistic things like toys, books, and others.

✓ I think I would share material things like toys, books, and others.

The word 'materialistic' is an adjective describing a person who values material possessions excessively. The correct adjective here is 'material' to describe things.

× Things that would uh, cost cheap and don't weigh me down so much.

✓ Things that would, uh, cost little and don't weigh me down so much.

The word 'cheap' is an adjective and cannot be used after 'cost'. The correct form is 'cost little' or 'be inexpensive'.

× But I don't think I would share something that gifted to me because they are suspicious to me.

✓ But I don't think I would share something that was gifted to me because it is special to me.

The phrase 'something that gifted to me' is missing the verb 'was'. Also, 'they are suspicious to me' is incorrect; likely the intended meaning is 'it is special to me' or 'I am suspicious about sharing it'.

× Phone me any inexpensive items and that things are received from others is not suitable for sharing because expensive items cost me so much and if I share them it would drain me down.

✓ Any inexpensive items and things received from others are not suitable for sharing because expensive items cost me so much, and if I share them, it would drain me.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and subject-verb agreement. 'Phone me' is incorrect and likely a mishearing or typo. The subject should be plural 'items and things' with plural verb 'are'. Also, 'drain me down' is incorrect; 'drain me' suffices.

× So I don't think that good for sharing.

✓ So I don't think that is good for sharing.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' to be grammatically correct.

× Yes, recently I shared a book with my friend Aditi.

✓ Yes, recently I shared a book with my friend Aditi.

This sentence is correct in past tense and needs no correction.

× She is a very book on person and I love to see her happiness by reading books.

✓ She is a very book-loving person and I love to see her happiness when reading books.

The phrase 'book on person' is incorrect. The correct adjective is 'book-loving'. Also, 'by reading books' is better expressed as 'when reading books' to indicate the time of happiness.

× So I shared some books with her. I loved that.

✓ So I shared some books with her. I loved that.

This sentence is correct in past tense and needs no correction.

× I think it would be my parents because I love my parents so much and if I achieve something or do something great, I would instantly tell them and I think it will make them proud of my of my achievements so I would share them instantly.

✓ I think it would be my parents because I love my parents so much, and if I achieve something or do something great, I would instantly tell them. I think it will make them proud of my achievements, so I would share with them instantly.

The sentence is long and needs to be split for clarity. Also, 'share them' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'share with them'. The repeated phrase 'of my' is a typo.

× Then my extended family and my boyfriend.

✓ Then my extended family and my boyfriend.

This is a sentence fragment without a verb; it should be connected to the previous sentence or rephrased.

× I think any achievements like economically or any gifts that I got from my parents or extended family, I instantly share with them.

✓ I think any achievements, like economic ones, or any gifts that I got from my parents or extended family, I instantly share with them.

The phrase 'like economically' is incorrect; 'economic ones' or 'economic achievements' is correct.

× They are so proud of me whenever I achieve something and they say so much encouragement, encouraging words to me that I feel very lovable.

✓ They are so proud of me whenever I achieve something, and they say many encouraging words to me that make me feel very loved.

'Say so much encouragement' is incorrect; 'say many encouraging words' is correct. Also, 'feel very lovable' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'feel very loved'.