分享— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains errors that affect naturalness and clarity, such as 'leaves' instead of 'friends' or 'peers', and 'lease' which seems incorrect. Try to use clear and correct vocabulary, and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise.

範例: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child. For example, they encouraged me to share my snacks with my friends at school. Although I was reluctant at first, I now find sharing very rewarding because it helps build good relationships.

建議: Your answer includes relevant content but some phrases are unclear or unnatural, such as 'cheering could double your hand'. Try to use more precise vocabulary and linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'and so on' and be specific.

範例: I like to share various things with my friends, such as photos I have taken, funny stories from our daily lives, and tasty snacks. Sharing these things makes our friendship stronger and more enjoyable.

建議: Your answer lacks clarity and contains hesitations and incomplete thoughts. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and ensure your sentences are complete and coherent. Also, 'your best friend' is not something to share; perhaps you meant 'your best friend's secrets'. Use linking words to organise your ideas clearly.

範例: I think personal matters such as secrets, private information, and sensitive feelings are not suitable for sharing. It's important to keep some things private to maintain trust and respect in relationships.

建議: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'after I taking this exam' and 'I will just pick up my parcels'. Use correct verb forms and clearer sentence structures. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, recently I bought some snacks online that I want to share with my roommates. I plan to share them after this exam when I pick up the parcels at the university.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes and confusing phrases like 'They don't lay me down' and 'which made me not'. Avoid hesitation sounds like 'MMM' and organise your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use appropriate vocabulary to express your ideas clearly.

範例: The first person I would share good news with is my best friend because they always provide me with emotional support. They encourage me, especially when I feel upset due to negative comments from others.

建議: Your answer is relevant and clear but could be improved by using more varied vocabulary and linking words. Also, avoid repeating similar phrases like 'like I did'. Try to expand your answer with more specific examples or reasons.

範例: I usually share positive news with my friends, such as when I give a successful presentation in my major class or achieve a high score in an important exam. Sharing these achievements motivates me and strengthens our friendship.

× my parents asked me to share my snacks with my leaves

✓ my parents asked me to share my snacks with my siblings

The word 'leaves' is incorrect here as it refers to parts of a plant. The intended meaning is likely 'siblings' or 'relatives'. Using the correct plural noun that refers to family members is necessary for clarity.

× I still do it and I found it pleasant because my lease

✓ I still do it and I find it pleasant because of my siblings

The word 'lease' is incorrect and does not fit the context. It seems the speaker meant 'siblings' or 'relatives'. Also, the tense should be present 'find' to match 'still do it'.

× It's like cheering could double your hand

✓ It's like sharing could double your happiness

The phrase 'cheering could double your hand' is unclear and incorrect. Likely, the speaker meant 'sharing could double your happiness'. The quantifier and noun need to be appropriate to convey the intended meaning.

× your secrets, your, uh, best friend and uh, your privacy is like, uh, we don't need to share everything with others

✓ your secrets, your, uh, best friends and, uh, your privacy are like, uh, we don't need to share everything with others

The subject includes plural nouns 'secrets' and 'best friends', so the verb should be plural 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'best friend' should be plural to match the list.

× I would definitely do that after I taking this exam

✓ I would definitely do that after I take this exam

After the conjunction 'after', the verb should be in the base form or present tense, not the '-ing' form. 'After I take this exam' is correct.

× I will just pick up my parcels when I go to the university

✓ I will just pick up my parcels when I go to the university

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the future tense context, so no correction is needed.

× They don't lay me down if my parents say sometimes will speak some sad words which made me not

✓ They don't let me down even if my parents sometimes say sad words that make me feel bad

The phrase 'lay me down' is incorrect; the correct idiom is 'let me down'. Also, the sentence structure is unclear and needs rephrasing for clarity and correct pronoun use.