分享— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp hơn, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child. They encouraged me to share food and toys with others, which helped me understand the importance of generosity. Sharing always made me feel happy and connected to people.

建議: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các cụm từ không tự nhiên như "You know" và lỗi ngữ pháp như "or and sometime". Hãy sử dụng từ vựng phong phú hơn và câu trả lời rõ ràng, mạch lạc hơn với các liên từ phù hợp.

範例: I like to share food and toys with others because they are easy to give and bring joy. For example, I often share snacks and tea with my friends, and sometimes I share special items with my relatives. Sharing these things feels very meaningful to me.

建議: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng có một số lỗi từ vựng như "rivet" không phù hợp và câu hơi dài. Bạn nên dùng từ chính xác hơn và chia câu ngắn để dễ hiểu hơn.

範例: In my opinion, sensitive and confidential information should not be shared. For example, personal details or private stories about others can cause problems if shared carelessly. Therefore, it's important to keep such information private.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp như "don't want to shares" nên là "don't want to share". Câu trả lời hơi dài và lặp ý, bạn nên trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

範例: No, I haven't shared anything personal recently because I prefer to keep my life private. This helps me feel secure and focus on myself without worrying about others' opinions.

建議: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như "roughly cares" và "My her support". Bạn nên dùng từ phù hợp và cấu trúc câu đúng để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

範例: The first person I would share good news with is my mother because she cares deeply about my life. I respect her a lot, and her support and encouragement always mean a great deal to me.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và trật tự từ trong câu như "talk with them something about me" nên là "talk to them about something personal". Câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc hơn.

範例: Honestly, I rarely share news with my friends, even small daily stories, because I don't feel comfortable. Instead, I prefer to talk to my family first when I have something important to share.

× Moreover, they also encourage me to share foods or toys for other people.

✓ Moreover, they also encourage me to share food or toys with other people.

The modal verb 'encourage' is correctly used, but the preposition 'for' is incorrect here. The correct preposition is 'with' when talking about sharing something with others. Also, 'foods' is usually uncountable in this context, so 'food' is preferred.

× Moreover, they also encourage me to share foods or toys for other people.

✓ Moreover, they also encourage me to share food or toys with other people.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used. When sharing, the correct preposition is 'with' to indicate the recipients of the sharing.

× Moreover, they also encourage me to share foods or toys for other people.

✓ Moreover, they also encourage me to share food or toys with other people.

The word 'foods' is generally uncountable when referring to types of food in general, so 'food' is the correct form here.

× You know, maybe I would like to share some snacks and teas with my friends or and sometime when I have some special thing I usually share with my relatives.

✓ You know, maybe I would like to share some snacks and tea with my friends, and sometimes when I have something special, I usually share with my relatives.

The conjunction 'or and' is incorrect; only one conjunction should be used. Also, 'teas' is usually uncountable in this context, so 'tea' is preferred. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Some special thing' is better as 'something special' for natural phrasing.

× You know, maybe I would like to share some snacks and teas with my friends or and sometime when I have some special thing I usually share with my relatives.

✓ You know, maybe I would like to share some snacks and tea with my friends, and sometimes when I have something special, I usually share with my relatives.

'Teas' is generally uncountable when referring to the beverage in general, so 'tea' is correct here.

× You know, maybe I would like to share some snacks and teas with my friends or and sometime when I have some special thing I usually share with my relatives.

✓ You know, maybe I would like to share some snacks and tea with my friends, and sometimes when I have something special, I usually share with my relatives.

The phrase 'or and' is incorrect; only one conjunction should be used to connect clauses.

× I personally like to share foods or toys with others because they are very affordable and don't cost much.

✓ I personally like to share food or toys with others because they are very affordable and don't cost much.

'Foods' should be 'food' as it is uncountable in this context.

× I don't want to shares anything related to myself with other people.

✓ I don't want to share anything related to myself with other people.

The verb 'shares' is incorrectly conjugated after 'don't'; it should be the base form 'share'.

× I don't want to shares anything related to myself with other people.

✓ I don't want to share anything related to myself with other people.

After 'don't', the verb should be in base form. 'Shares' is third person singular, which is incorrect here.

× Actually the first person I would like to share my good news that is my mother because she roughly cares my life.

✓ Actually, the first person I would like to share my good news with is my mother because she really cares about my life.

The sentence is missing the preposition 'with' after 'share my good news'. 'Roughly' is incorrect here; 'really' is appropriate. Also, 'cares my life' should be 'cares about my life'.

× Actually the first person I would like to share my good news that is my mother because she roughly cares my life.

✓ Actually, the first person I would like to share my good news with is my mother because she really cares about my life.

The verb 'share' requires the preposition 'with' to indicate the person receiving the news. Also, 'cares' is followed by 'about' when referring to caring for something.

× My her support and encouragement mean a lot to me.

✓ Her support and encouragement mean a lot to me.

The phrase 'My her' is incorrect; only one possessive pronoun should be used. 'Her' alone is correct here.

× From my point of view, we shouldn't share some sensitive, rivet confidential information such as personal information, other people's stories or something negative because it can lead to bad consequence if we talk wrongly and carelessly.

✓ From my point of view, we shouldn't share some sensitive, really confidential information such as personal information, other people's stories, or something negative because it can lead to bad consequences if we speak wrongly and carelessly.

'Rivet' is incorrect; likely intended 'really'. 'Consequence' should be plural 'consequences' as it refers to possible multiple outcomes. 'Talk wrongly' is unnatural; 'speak wrongly' or 'speak carelessly' is better.

× From my point of view, we shouldn't share some sensitive, rivet confidential information such as personal information, other people's stories or something negative because it can lead to bad consequence if we talk wrongly and carelessly.

✓ From my point of view, we shouldn't share sensitive, really confidential information such as personal information, other people's stories, or something negative because it can lead to bad consequences if we speak wrongly and carelessly.

The quantifier 'some' is unnecessary before 'sensitive, really confidential information' because 'information' is uncountable and generally used without 'some' in this context.

× I feel very comfortable and secure when it comes to a place no one knows about me.

✓ I feel very comfortable and secure when it comes to a place where no one knows about me.

The sentence is missing the relative pronoun 'where' to correctly connect the clause describing 'a place'.

× I feel very comfortable and secure when it comes to a place no one knows about me.

✓ I feel very comfortable and secure when it comes to a place where no one knows me.

The phrase 'knows about me' is less natural than 'knows me' when referring to familiarity with a person.

× Honestly, I rarely share something with my friends, even smaller or daily stories because I don't feel comfortable and secure when I talk with them something about me.

✓ Honestly, I rarely share anything with my friends, even small or daily stories, because I don't feel comfortable and secure when I talk to them about something related to me.

'Something' should be 'anything' in negative sentences. 'Smaller' is incorrect; 'small' is the correct adjective. 'Talk with them something about me' is incorrect; the correct structure is 'talk to them about something related to me'.

× Honestly, I rarely share something with my friends, even smaller or daily stories because I don't feel comfortable and secure when I talk with them something about me.

✓ Honestly, I rarely share anything with my friends, even small or daily stories, because I don't feel comfortable and secure when I talk to them about something related to me.

The verb 'talk' is usually followed by 'to' when indicating the person spoken to, and 'about' to indicate the topic.