分享— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中充满了填充词“uh”，影响流畅性。建议减少重复的填充词，回答更自然简洁。同时，句子结构不够完整，缺少连贯的连接词。

範例: Yes, my parents always taught me to share with my cousins, such as snacks, toys, and even the TV time. They believed sharing helps build good relationships.

建議: 回答不够完整，句子结构不清晰，缺少连贯的连接词。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并补充具体细节。

範例: When I was a child, I often shared snacks and toys with others. However, now I usually share secrets with my closest friends, especially when we travel together.

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并使用更准确的词汇。

範例: In my opinion, other people's privacy is not suitable for sharing because it can hurt their feelings and damage their personality.

建議: 回答中断句不完整，表达不连贯，且有语法错误。建议简化表达，避免重复填充词，并完整表达想法。

範例: Yes, recently I started dating someone for the first time. I have many new experiences about our relationship that I enjoy sharing with my friends.

建議: 回答中有语法和表达不清的问题，句子结构混乱。建议使用简单明了的句子表达，并减少填充词。

範例: I usually share good news with my parents first. When I tell them about my studies through video chat, I can see the pride and excitement in their eyes, which makes me very happy.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，且有重复和断句问题。建议简化句子，使用正确的语法，并补充具体内容。

範例: As an extroverted person, I like to share various news with my friends, such as movies I have recently watched and delicious food I have tried.

× Uh, well, of course my parents always, uh, instruct me to share with my, uh, cousins, uh, such as, uh, snacks, uh, toys, uh, the usage of TV.

✓ Uh, well, of course my parents always, uh, instruct me to share with my, uh, cousins, uh, such as, uh, snacks, uh, toys, and the use of TV.

“the usage of TV”中的“usage”用法不当，应该用名词“use”表示“使用”。“usage”通常指语言用法，改为“the use of TV”更合适。

× When I was a child I always shared my snacks, toys with others, but now I often share some secrets with my closest friends and when we were traveling we always exchange.

✓ When I was a child I always shared my snacks and toys with others, but now I often share some secrets with my closest friends, and when we travel we always exchange.

“when we were traveling”时态不一致，前半句用现在时态“now I often share”，后半句应改为一般现在时“when we travel”。另外，“exchange”后缺少宾语，建议补充。

× Well, I in my view, I think the, uh, others privacy is not suitable for sharing because it may hurt someone's esteem and the, uh, his personality, umm.

✓ Well, in my view, I think others' privacy is not suitable for sharing because it may hurt someone's esteem and personality.

“others privacy”应为“others' privacy”，表示“他人的隐私”，需要所有格。且“the, uh, his personality”重复且不当，应简化为“personality”。

× Oh, definitely. Uh, recently I have made a boyfriend and it's my first time to fall in love with others. Therefore I have a lot of uh, umm, novel experience to share with my friends, uh, about our relationship. Umm, I think it's very interesting and they can give.

✓ Oh, definitely. Uh, recently I have made a boyfriend and it's my first time falling in love with someone. Therefore, I have a lot of novel experiences to share with my friends about our relationship. I think it's very interesting and they can give advice.

“first time to fall in love”应改为“first time falling in love”，动名词形式更自然。“others”改为“someone”更合适。“novel experience”应为复数“novel experiences”。句尾不完整，补充“give advice”。

× Well, I think it's my parents when I got some good news about to study, umm, I always have a video chat with them. I can, I could say the pride, uh, from their eyes and, uh, excitement. So it's always may, uh, it always make me so happy.

✓ Well, I think it's my parents. When I get some good news about studying, I always have a video chat with them. I can see the pride and excitement in their eyes. So it always makes me so happy.

“when I got”时态应与现在时“I always have”一致，改为“when I get”。“about to study”不自然，改为“about studying”。“I could say the pride from their eyes”表达不当，改为“I can see the pride and excitement in their eyes”。“it always make me”主谓不一致，应为“makes”。

× As I am a extroverted person, uh, I have a strong sense of sharing, therefore I always share varieties of news of my with my par with my friends such as uh, umm, the movies I recently watched and uh, the delicious food are.

✓ As I am an extroverted person, I have a strong sense of sharing. Therefore, I always share various kinds of news with my friends, such as the movies I recently watched and delicious food.

“a extroverted”冠词错误，应为“an extroverted”。“varieties of news of my with my par with my friends”语序混乱，应为“various kinds of news with my friends”。“the delicious food are”句子不完整，改为“delicious food”。