分享— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Try to directly answer the question first, then add specific examples. Avoid unclear phrases like "my opinions teach me" and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child. For example, they encouraged me to share food and books with my siblings, which helped me become more patient and generous.

建議: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by correcting grammar and adding linking words. Also, provide more specific reasons to make your answer richer.

範例: I like to share books with others because once I finish reading, the book may not be useful to me anymore. However, sharing it allows others to enjoy and learn from it as well.

建議: Good content but improve sentence structure and coherence. Use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' properly. Avoid repetition and clarify your points.

範例: I think clothes are not suitable for sharing because they absorb sweat. Therefore, sharing clothes can feel uncomfortable and unhygienic.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas logically, use correct tenses, and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Also, explain the relationship and reason for sharing more clearly.

範例: Yes, yesterday I shared a book called "Rich Dad Poor Dad" with my best friend Ginny. We have known each other since school, and he enjoys reading books like me.

建議: Your answer is relevant but needs better grammar and clearer linking. Avoid confusion in pronouns and improve sentence flow by using connectors like 'because' and 'so'.

範例: I would first share my good news with my parents because I am very close to them. Then, I would tell my girlfriend since they both encourage me to grow in life.

建議: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and using linking words. Also, try to be more specific about the news you share.

範例: I often share various types of news with my friends, such as my college enrollment, trips to different cities, or when I buy something new.

× Yes, definitely my opinions teach me that habit to share food twice, books or other things that have been made me patient.

✓ Yes, definitely my parents taught me that habit of sharing food twice, books, or other things that have made me patient.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'opinions teach' instead of 'parents taught' and misuses 'have been made me patient'. The past participle 'made' should be used with 'have' to form the present perfect tense. Also, 'habit to share' should be 'habit of sharing'. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Nowadays I can share my things because of that habit.

✓ Nowadays, I can share my things because of that habit.

A comma after 'Nowadays' improves sentence clarity. The sentence is otherwise correct.

× Most often it's because when I read a book it is not useful for me, but when I share with others it can be useful for other also.

✓ Most often, it's because when I read a book, it is not useful for me, but when I share it with others, it can be useful for others also.

The word 'other' should be plural 'others' to match the plural context. Also, 'share with others' should be 'share it with others' to specify the object being shared.

× I believe clothes are not suitable for sharing. It's because of sweating. I personally believe when I share my clothes to other there's, my clothes absorb other people's sweat.

✓ I believe clothes are not suitable for sharing because of sweating. I personally believe when I share my clothes with others, my clothes absorb other people's sweat.

The phrase 'share my clothes to other there's' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'with' and 'others' should be plural. Also, 'there's' is unnecessary and incorrect here.

× That's why I feel uncomfortable and unhygienic while sharing clothes.

✓ That's why I feel uncomfortable and think it is unhygienic to share clothes.

The original sentence is understandable but 'feel uncomfortable and unhygienic' incorrectly suggests the speaker feels unhygienic. The correction clarifies that sharing clothes is unhygienic.

× Yes, uh, yesterday I share a book called Rich dead border to my best friend Ginny.

✓ Yes, uh, yesterday I shared a book called Rich Dead Border with my best friend Ginny.

The action happened in the past, so the verb should be in past tense 'shared'. Also, the preposition 'to' should be 'with' when giving something to someone.

× I met him since schools he's my best friend.

✓ I have known him since school; he's my best friend.

'Met' is simple past and does not fit with 'since'. 'Have known' is present perfect, appropriate for actions continuing from the past. Also, 'schools' should be singular 'school'.

× That's why he's also like to read books.

✓ That's why he also likes to read books.

The subject 'he' requires the verb 'likes' in third person singular form. 'He's' (he is) is incorrect here.

× He I often cheer him books.

✓ I often lend him books.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. 'Cheer him books' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'lend him books'.

× I would like to share my good news with my parents. After that my girlfriend.

✓ I would like to share my good news with my parents, and after that, with my girlfriend.

The second sentence is a fragment. Combining the two with a conjunction and adding 'with' clarifies the meaning.

× It's because I am very close to my parents and my girlfriend He they often encourage me to grow more in life.

✓ It's because I am very close to my parents and my girlfriend. They often encourage me to grow more in life.

The phrase 'my girlfriend He they' is incorrect. It should be 'my girlfriend. They' referring to both parents and girlfriend.

× I share different type of news with my friend.

✓ I share different types of news with my friends.

'Type' should be plural 'types' to match 'different'. Also, 'friend' should be plural 'friends' to be consistent with sharing news with multiple people.

× That news I share with my friend often.

✓ I often share that news with my friends.

The sentence structure is awkward. Placing 'often' before the verb and using plural 'friends' improves clarity and correctness.