分享— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with concise reasons. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and unclear phrases such as 'appears to son'.

範例: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child because they believed sharing is an important value. Sharing helps build good relationships and makes life happier.

建議: Your answer has good content but contains some grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases like 'make the IT can create the bond more strong'. Use linking words properly and avoid repetition.

範例: I like to share my food with friends because it shows appreciation and helps strengthen our bond. Sharing meals often brings us closer together.

建議: Your answer is relevant and specific but could be more concise and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid repeating similar phrases.

範例: Many personal items are unsuitable for sharing due to hygiene reasons. For example, toothbrushes, combs, and underwear are very personal and should not be shared.

建議: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear or incorrect phrases like 'people who have sex'. Be careful with word choice and sentence structure. Provide a clear and relevant example.

範例: Recently, I shared my baby's outgrown clothes with other parents who have infants. It feels good to help others by giving away things we no longer need.

建議: Your answer is clear but contains minor grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating similar phrases.

範例: I would first share good news with my husband because we support each other. Whether it's happy or sad news, I always feel comfortable sharing it with him.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and contains repetition and unclear phrasing. Make sure to finish your sentences and organize your ideas logically using linking words.

範例: I usually share good news with my friends to celebrate together. However, if there is bad news that affects them, I also share it carefully to support them.

× Yes, my parents encouraged us to share when I was a child because sharing is an important character that appears to son should have umm sharing is loving and when you are always sharing, you have a good life, we believe.

✓ Yes, my parents encouraged us to share when I was a child because sharing is an important character trait that a son should have. Sharing is loving, and when you are always sharing, you have a good life, we believe.

The word 'character' should be 'character trait' to correctly describe a quality or feature. Also, the sentence was fragmented and unclear; it was corrected for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I like to share my food with my friends because I believe that the sharing is one way to show your appreciation towards them.

✓ I like to share my food with my friends because I believe that sharing is one way to show your appreciation towards them.

The definite article 'the' before 'sharing' is unnecessary here because 'sharing' is used in a general sense, so it should be omitted.

× Also, it can make the IT can create the bond more strong.

✓ Also, it can make the bond stronger.

The original sentence is redundant and ungrammatical. 'Make the bond stronger' is the correct and concise expression.

× There are a lot of things that are not suitable for sharing because of the hygienic purposes.

✓ There are a lot of things that are not suitable for sharing for hygienic purposes.

The phrase 'because of the hygienic purposes' is incorrect; 'for hygienic purposes' is the correct prepositional phrase to express the reason.

× For instance, a toothbrush, a comb, your personal belongings like underwear, those things are not to be shared of those are very personal and should be kept.

✓ For instance, a toothbrush, a comb, and personal belongings like underwear are not to be shared because they are very personal and should be kept private.

The sentence had pronoun misuse and awkward phrasing. 'Those things are not to be shared of those' is incorrect; it was corrected to a clearer and grammatically correct form.

× Yes, I have plenty of things that I can share to other people.

✓ Yes, I have plenty of things that I can share with other people.

The verb 'share' is followed by the preposition 'with' not 'to' when indicating the person receiving something.

× For example, the clothes of my baby when she was zero to three months and she cannot wear it anymore because it's already small for her.

✓ For example, the clothes of my baby from when she was zero to three months old, which she cannot wear anymore because they are already too small for her.

The original sentence was fragmented and had subject-verb agreement issues. It was restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× So I I've been giving her clothes to people who have sex.

✓ So I've been giving her clothes to people who have children.

The phrase 'people who have sex' is incorrect and inappropriate in this context. It should be 'people who have children' to convey the intended meaning.

× Anything that would make me happy or even make me sad, I would always share it to my husband.

✓ Anything that would make me happy or even make me sad, I would always share it with my husband.

The verb 'share' should be followed by the preposition 'with' when indicating the person with whom something is shared.

× And I appreciate that my husband is supported, supportive of me in terms of bad news.

✓ And I appreciate that my husband is supportive of me in terms of bad news.

The word 'supported' is unnecessary and incorrect here; 'supportive' alone correctly describes the husband's attitude.