分享— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“sharing it was very important”应为“sharing was very important”。此外，句子结构较为简单，缺少连贯的连接词，建议加强语法准确性和句子连贯性。

範例: Yes, my parents always told me that sharing was very important when I was a child because it helps improve relationships with others and develops a good personality.

建議: 回答表达不清晰，语法错误较多，如“share anything to people”应为“share anything with people”。句子结构混乱，建议简化表达，使用正确的介词和句型，并增加逻辑连贯性。

範例: It depends on the person. I usually share things like clothes or books with people I trust, but I prefer not to share personal relationships with others.

建議: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，如“not suitable for to share with others”应为“not suitable to share with others”。表达不够简洁，建议使用更清晰的句子结构，避免重复。

範例: I believe personal relationships are not suitable to share because my friends are very special and important to me.

建議: 回答内容不够清晰，存在语法和表达混乱的问题，如“many doors, uh, in a cabinet”不明确。建议简化句子，明确表达分享的物品和原因。

範例: Yes, recently I shared a delicate collectible item with my friends because they know I enjoy collecting, and they thought it was beautiful.

建議: 回答中有语法错误，如“receive a good news”应为“receive good news”，以及“share to her”应为“share with her”。建议注意冠词使用和介词搭配，句子结构可更自然。

範例: Definitely my best friend, because she encourages and motivates me a lot. Whenever I achieve something good, I like to share the news with her immediately.

建議: 回答中存在介词使用错误，如“share good news to my friends”应为“share good news with my friends”，以及句子结构不够流畅。建议注意介词搭配和句子连贯性。

範例: I usually share good news with my friends because they encourage me, but I prefer to handle bad news by myself to avoid making them feel depressed.

× Yes, they always told me that sharing it was very important when I was a child.

✓ Yes, they always told me that sharing was very important when I was a child.

这里“sharing”作为动名词，不需要加“it”，加了“it”是多余的。应直接使用“sharing”。

× On the one hand, they think it can improve my relationship with others.

✓ On the one hand, they thought it could improve my relationship with others.

句子描述的是过去的情况，时态应与前文保持一致，使用过去时“thought”和“could”。

× On the other hand, they told me that it is a good personality for me to improve.

✓ On the other hand, they told me that it was a good quality for me to develop.

时态应为过去时，且“personality”用词不当，改为“quality”更合适，且“improve”改为“develop”更自然。

× I can share anything to people I trust.

✓ I can share anything with people I trust.

动词“share”后应接介词“with”，表示“与某人分享”，而不是“to”。

× If they told me that one of my clothes was very beautiful, I can share with them.

✓ If they tell me that one of my clothes is very beautiful, I can share it with them.

条件句中应使用一般现在时“tell”，主句用“can”，且“clothes”是复数，需注意一致性，且“share”后应加宾语“it”。

× But I don't like share with my friend to other relationship with me.

✓ But I don't like to share my friends with others.

表达不清且介词使用错误，应简化为“不喜欢把我的朋友分享给别人”，用“share ... with others”。

× I think the relationship with others is not suitable for to share with others because I think my friends are very special and important to me and I don't want to be shared with others to my friends.

✓ I think relationships with others are not suitable to share because my friends are very special and important to me, and I don't want to share them with others.

句子结构混乱，介词使用错误，应简化表达，去掉多余的“to”，并正确使用“share ... with others”。

× Yes, I shared a delicate item with my friends because they know I like collecting very much and in my bedroom there are many doors, uh, in a cabinet and they think they are pretty.

✓ Yes, I shared a delicate item with my friends because they know I like collecting very much, and in my bedroom there is a cabinet with many doors, and they think they are pretty.

“there are many doors, uh, in a cabinet”表达不清，应改为“there is a cabinet with many doors”，保持主谓一致。

× So I shared with my friends recently.

✓ So I shared it with my friends recently.

“share”后应有宾语，缺少宾语“it”。

× So if I perform well and receive a good news I will share to her soon.

✓ So if I perform well and receive good news, I will share it with her soon.

“share”后应接宾语和介词“with”，且“news”不可数，不加冠词“a”。

× I often share good news to my friends because I know they will praise me and encourage me, but I don't want to share with them about some bad news.

✓ I often share good news with my friends because I know they will praise and encourage me, but I don't want to share bad news with them.

“share”后应接介词“with”，且“share ... about”结构错误，应直接“share bad news with them”。

× I want to relieve stress by myself and I don't want them will also be depressed.

✓ I want to relieve stress by myself and I don't want them to be depressed as well.

“want them will”结构错误，应为“want them to be”，表示希望某人做某事。